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--Nikitakit

“Marya Morevna – a beautiful queen from Russian fairy tales. According to some interpretations, Morevna comes from the word "mor" – which means “death”; according to others, the image of "a strong woman living in the steppe" or "queen-girl" refers to the matriarchal nomadic Sarmatians.”

Wikipedia (ru.wikipedia.org)

Intro

EXT. IVAN'S HOUSE – DAY - ESTABLISHING

Ivan's home (log cabin). Rings of smoke come from the chimney on the roof.

INT. IVAN'S HOUSE - IVAN'S ROOM – DAY

IVAN, 21, a red-haired guy is sitting at the table in front of a computer. Camera view is set as if the viewer is looking at him from a computer screen. IVAN is wearing a white jacket and light-colored jeans. A blue T-shirt is visible under the jacket.

NARRATOR (V.O.)

Once upon a time there lived a Tsarevich, named Ivan, who had three sisters. One sister was a mechanic, the other a doctor, and the third was a priestess.

First, the MECHANIC-SISTER, 22, runs behind IVAN's back carrying a wrench. Then the DOCTOR-SISTER, 24, runs through the room with a first aid kit. Finally, PRIESTESS-SISTER, 28 slowly passes through deeply immersed in some magical book.

NARRATOR (V.O.)

On one beautiful sunny day a terrible thunder was heard, the wall split in two, and a car crashed into their house.

The sun, seen through the window, gets hidden behind dark clouds. A thunder occurs followed by a sound of crash, the ground starts shaking and pieces of plaster fall from the ceiling. IVAN turns his head to the left towards the source of the noise. MECHANIC-SISTER and PRIESTESS-SISTER run past in the same direction.

INT. IVAN'S HOUSE - DOCTOR-SISTER'S ROOM - DAY

A car with a broken front window sticks out of one of the room's walls. There is a person lying on the floor – the BUSINESSMAN - who has been thrown out of the car. DOCTOR-SISTER is leaning over him.

NARRATOR (V.O.)

A handsome young man appeared from the car.He took one of Ivan's sisters as his wife, and left with her to where he came from.

DOCTOR-SISTER injects something into the BUSINESSMAN, he jumps up and invites her with a gesture to sit in the car. DOCTOR-SISTER gets in the car and they leave together.

NARRATOR (V.O.)

Ivan was left with only two of his sisters.

IVAN and the two sisters are repairing the wall.

NARRATOR (V.O.)

Time passed. Then once again, the wall split in two, and another car crashed into their house.

Another car crashes into the opposite wall of the same room. From the front window of the car flies out the RAPPER. IVAN and the MECHANIC-SISTER step back in panic, while only PRIESTESS-SISTER remains in place.

NARRATOR (V.O.)

A handsome young rapper appeared from the car. He took the oldest sister as his wife, and left with her to where he came from.

The RAPPER jumps from the floor in a break-dance style, runs towards IVAN, shakes cordially his hand, tells him something and points to the PRIESTESS-SISTER. She blushes. The RAPPER and the PRIESTESS-SISTER, hand in hand, get in the car and leave.

INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – MECHANIC-SISTER'S BEDROOM – MORNING

The sunrise is seen through the window. MECHANIC-SISTER is sleeping in her bed.

NARRATOR (V.O.)

A month passed and then Raven - the brave guy - crashed into their house with his car. He wore leather. A rocker so to say.

A car crashes into the wall. But nobody gets thrown out of it. The MECHANIC-SISTER wakes up and screams while trying to cover herself with a bedsheet. The ROCKER inside of the car unfastens his seatbelt, turns off the car audio (no music is heard but one could see the peaks on the screen in the car) and steps out from the car. He stands right in front of the MECHANIC-SISTER and smiles.

A door bursts open and IVAN appears at the doorstep. In a flash moment, the MECHANIC-SISTER turns to him. Then she gets enraged. She powerfully hits the ROCKER with a wrench that was hidden beneath her pillow (yes, indeed, she sleeps with a wrench under her pillow). The ROCKER gets knocked-out. MECHANIC-SISTER flings her working jacket on her nighty, drags his unconscious body into the car and takes off.

NARRATOR (V.O.)

He took the last sister as his wife.

The camera shows a wall with photos from Ivan's sisters' weddings. He stares at them, then sighs, turns around and walks off, scratching his head.

NARRATOR (V.O.)

Ivan was left alone. Soon he felt miserable, but nothing could be done about it.

Nazar's Visit

INT. IVAN'S HOUSE - BASEMENT – DAY

IVAN is in front of the computer chatting in Jabber. On the table besides him there is a glass with an unknown liquid substance.

EXT. THE ROAD TO IVAN'S HOUSE – DAY

Semi-truck with a trailer rides the road, heading to the Ivan's house. Camera shows the side view of the front wheels.

INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT – DAY

Ivan keeps chatting.

The camera follows the road, side view, The truck with the trailer overtakes the camera. The trailer is notably big. The emblem on the back of it reads “M2 Motors”.

INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT – DAY

The camera shows Ivan from the side. The lower part of Ivan's face, as well as his hands typing on the keyboard are in focus. The liquid substance in the glass suddenly shakes. Ivan stops typing abruptly.

EXT. THE ROAD TO IVAN'S HOUSE – DAY

This time the camera shows the back wheels of the truck. They crash and throw asides dirt and garbage from the road.

INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT – DAY

Ivan stops typing and looks behind his back towards the viewer. His eyes narrow with suspicion.

EXT. THE ROAD TO IVAN'S HOUSE – DAY

The truck appears from the nearest hill. The air on the horizon trembles. The noise from the truck engine increases.

INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT – DAY

Ivan jumps abruptly away from the computer pushing away his chair in such a way as if he is running away from death. He runs upstairs. The viewer can now see that he has been wearing only boxers.

EXT. IVAN'S HOUSE – YARD - DAY IVAN runs out of the house and stops in front of the door, placing his arms apart as if trying to shield the house behind him.

IVAN

(desperately waving hands)

No-o-o-o! No-o-o-o!!!

Screech of brakes. The truck stops right in front of IVAN, almost pinning him to the wall of the house . IVAN breaths heavily he is sweating with cold cold sweat. NAZAR (Nazar Brave), 26, jumps out of the truck's cabin. He takes several steps forward examining the surroundings.

IVAN

(frightened)

Um... There is no one else left here!

NAZAR BRAVE

Don't panic Ivan Tsarevich, it is you that I'm looking for!

IVAN panics.

NAZAR BRAVE

(continuing)

I was sent by my sister – Marya Morevna the Beautiful Queen. She wants to meet you, Ivan Tsarevich. Go immediately.

IVAN

(still shocked)

But how?

IVAN and NAZAR stand in front of the door to the trailer of the truck, their backs to the camera. The door is opening slowly. There is a cool shiny sports car inside. IVAN stands motionless, awed by the sight. Then NAZAR attracts Ivan's attention back by jiggling with a keyring in his hand. IVAN looks at the keys.

INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT - DAY

The room with the computer. The computer is still turned on. A lamp blinks. The camera zooms the screen. The text “Fedora Home” can be read on the desktop. A “New message” icon is flashing in the tray. In a few moments, the flashing window with the messages appears on the screen. The text reads:

(11:12:32) TSAREVICH: Moreover, this modification in the suspension bracket will decrease the stability of the whole system
(11:13:00) М^2: Hey, maybe you can come and look at this by yourself? Then we could discuss all details with you in person.
(11:13:12) * Personal vCard received from M^2*
(11:13:18) TSAREVICH: Sounds interesting, but it looks like it's too far for me...
(11:14:40) М^2: Has my brother arrived there yet? ;)

At the bottom of the screen appears a text: “File with new location received”. Then the screen goes black and instead appears a progress bar with the text: “Loading...”

On the Road

EXT. DAY - HIGHWAY

IVAN drives his new car down the highway. The car's stereo is turned up to full volume. The sun sets and rises a few times.

The main credits are displayed over this.

Meeting Marya Morevna

EXT. TOWN STREET - DAY

Silent and lonely town. By all appearances, a battle recently occurred there - buildings nearby are damaged by explosions, some are destroyed. The road is covered with bodies of people in military uniforms, wrecks of motorcycles, and other machines, various street weapons... Here and there, signs of grenade explosions are visible. Amidst the junk lying on the ground there are pistols, machine guns, and various other weapons, but they have all been destroyed or deformed by some unknown force. One tommy-gun lies crushed by someone's foot as if it were made of tin foil. There are also street-fighting weapons – debris, clubs, metal pipes, chains, and hammers.

IVAN'S CAR approaches. He can't drive any further because he would otherwise need to drive on the lying bodies. IVAN gets out of the car and looks around in a daze. He closes the car door, and the alarm is set (a sound indicates that). IVAN starts to walk forward very carefully. His foot accidentally touches a bat on the ground. The bat rolls aside with a typical sound and stops near a soldier lying on the ground.

IVAN walks, looking around among the smoking remains and bodies lying on the ground. The hand of the soldier lying near the bat starts to move unconfidently.

IVAN notices that there is a small rise at the road nearby on top of which there is a gorgeous motorbike. IVAN starts climbing upwards. Once on the top, he can see that the bodies of soldiers form a circle around the body of a girl leaning across the bike – MOREVNA (Marya Morevna, 26). She is lying unconsciously on the ground, leaning her back against the bike. She has violet hair and wears a long black cape and high-platform boots. A strange amulet, part of which is broken, is tied on a cord around her neck.

IVAN jumps towards her side, and shakes her shoulders.

IVAN

Hey! Wake up! Are you alive?

IVAN turns around, looking for help.

IVAN

Anyo-o-one! Is there is anyone alive here?!

IVAN breaks off one of the rear-view mirrors from the motorcycle, and after wiping it against his clothing, brings it to the girl's face. The mirror barely clouds from her breath. IVAN wipes the sweat from his forehead, drops the mirror, and carefully takes the girl in his arms. He lifts her and as he turns, we see the logo of “M^2 Motors” on the back of her coat. IVAN bears MOREVNA to his car. The girl's hand hangs down lifelessly. A katana, attached with some belts to her waist drags along on the ground.

A few meters before the car IVAN stops. A threatening group of people in soldier uniforms blocks their way. It seems as if they have been lying on the ground until now but have suddenly awaken. and have just come to. Despite that they are in uniform their appearance resembles more of bandits rather than soldiers. One man stands out of the group - the GENERAL. He has a fresh bruise under his eye. The rest of the group also appears quite rumpled.

GENERAL

Do not move, boy, if you value your life.

IVAN keeps silent, not knowing what to say. He examines the gang. It is armed with weapons they had just picked up from the ground. A moment of embarrassing silence. The SOLDIERS stand still, holding the weapons in their hands.

GENERAL

Give her to us.

IVAN

(surprised/wonderingly)

Why should I do that?

GENERAL

All this mighty force...

(gesturing with his hand)

...was slain by Marya Morevna aka the 'Beautiful Queen'. We wanted to sabotage her kingdom, but luck was not on our side.

IVAN looks surprised at the girl lying in his arms. He recalls the “M^2 Motors” logo on her back. He looks at the soldiers. His eyes meet with the eyes of the GENERAL. IVAN sighs, lowers his eyes and carefully places MOREVNA on the ground. The SOLDIERS relax a little bit. The GENERAL, with a creepy smirk on his face steps forward. At the same moment IVAN picks up with his hand a pipe from the ground. IVAN steps in front of the crowd, shielding MOREVNA, who lies at some distance on the ground.

IVAN

(his lips shaking)

I cannot do that.

The GENERAL spits out viciously to one side.

GENERAL

Son of a...

 The GENERAL makes a gesture and a strong soldier – PAYLAT - steps forward . PAYLAT approaches IVAN, slowly and threatening, his steps making dull thumps, his feet crack the asphalt. IVAN squeezes harder the pipe in his hand. His other hand appears to be squeezing something in the fist.

PAYLAT swings his bat. At the same moment IVAN activates the alarm of his car through the remote control hidden in his hand. The car behind the soldiers fires up its headlights and starts honking. The SOLDIERS turn around. PAYLAT gets also distracted for a short moment. IVAN seizes the chance, hits PAYLAT with the pipe in the hand knocking out the bat away to the side. IVAN quickly makes a step forward, ending up behind

PAYLAT's back. He intends to hit PAYLAT in the knees from behind. But at this moment he notices that one of the SOLDIERS is already approaching him jumping, trying to grab him. Without changing his position, IVAN puts his foot on the ground and grabs PAYLAT by the collar. In an effort to catch IVAN, PAYLAT starts turning around. IVAN uses turns around as well, in such a way that he once again ends up behind PAYLAT. The jumping SOLDIER flies by.

In the meantime IVAN makes a sudden movement, punching his fist right into PAYLAT's face. PAYLAT tries to dodge back and falls. The two bodies collapse at once on the ground– both PAYLAT's and the jumping SOLDIER's into some garbage bins nearby.

IVAN presses the arm of PAYLAT pinning his back with his knee. IVAN breathes heavily, his eyes wide open. He cannot tear his eyes away from the prostrate enemy, not believing his luck. Finally, he shifts his attention and sharply raises his head to the remaining crowd.

IVAN

Drop your weapons to the ground or I will break his arm...

(he moves his knee from the back onto the neck)

...or his neck.

PAYLAT looks up at the GENERAL. The GENERAL raises an eyebrow. A strange contented smile appears on his face.

GENERAL

Take him.

The SOLDIERS carry out the order and start running towards IVAN. IVAN looks at the GENERAL's smirk behind the crowd of the running SOLDIERS. He lowers his eyes and the SOLDIERS grab him without him managing to do anything to PAYLAT.

The SOLDIERS hold IVAN as they beat him. The remote of the car is lying under their feet. They step on it as part of the rhythm of their impacts, and each time the car honks its horn sorrowfully. They do not pay it any attention.

IVAN slips down to the ground and is dragged to the GENERAL.

The GENERAL swings back for one more punch, but a gust of wind blows by, and an unearthly ray of light illuminates his face - the reflection of the sun on MOREVNA's katana. He raises his head upwards and looks off in that direction. The remaining SOLDIERS also turn around. Nearby, MARYA MOREVNA stands on her feet. Her coat and hair blow threatening in the wind. She holds a katana, tilting it to direct the reflected sunlight at the GENERAL. GENERAL's face is distorted by expressions of distrust, rage and fear.

Top view of IVAN lying on the ground. The SOLDIERS leave his body and exit the screen as they rush off towards MOREVNA, picking up weapons as they go. The view pans smoothly back to IVAN, lying on the ground. IVAN looks at the sky. White fluffy clouds move on the blue sky. In front of the sky appears the inclined face of MARYA MOREVNA.

MOREVNA

What is your name?

Cut to IVAN's face, all covered with cuts and bruises, but with a smile of relief.

IVAN

I am Ivan. The “Tsarevich” one.

MOREVNA

I know you then. I'm Marya Morevna.

IVAN

I know.

MOREVNA

(laughs)

So, we we know each other!

She gives him a hand. IVAN takes it and she helps him stand up.

IVAN stands to his full height, covering the view of MOREVNA. MOREVNA then moves forward shoulder first, rewarding IVAN with a smile.

IVAN turns around; the two stand back-to-back. The camera circles around them, showing the soldiers getting up from the ground and surrounding them. IVAN looks at them and flashbacks of the latest events appear to him – a picture of lifeless Morevna, leaning with her back on the motorcycle. IVAN sets his teeth.

The fight begins. In the crowd IVAN only manages to dodge a few of the hits before finally he is hit on the ground. At this moment MARYA MOREVNA jumps and blocks with her sword a blow aimed at IVAN. IVAN lifts up, but the crowd has encircled them. The bodies of the soldiers surround MOREVNA and IVAN. Above the crowd flies the katana, hit out of MOREVNA hands. At the next moment their two bodies fly out of the crowd.

IVAN and MOREVNA fly up into the air faces up parallel to each other. Time slows down as they turn their heads to each other. MOREVNA sees with surprise that IVAN is smiling at her. When they fall back to the ground, IVAN uses his inertia in order to rise immediately and gives MOREVNA his hand not slowing down his movements. IVAN pulls MOREVNA towards himself and they start dancing face-to-face amongst the soldiers, not forgetting to kick them off. As they dance they step on various objects under their feet, which, tossed up, fly to the sides and hit the bandits. MOREVNA, not believing her eyes, looks at IVAN who is hugging her towards himself. The amulet on her neck starts to shine. There forms something like a vortex around them, which throws back the SOLDIERS as it expands.

A wrack pulled upward by the vortex falls on the advertisement billboard which immediately breaks apart into a thousand pieces which slowly falls down from the sky as rose petals. MOREVNA and IVAN remain alone among the devastated opponents. They keep dancing. Military helicopters with search lights appear from behind the roofs of the buildings. The searchlights focus on the "rose petals" circling in the air which as a result changes color, and illuminates everything around. Under these iridescent (rainbow) rays MOREVNA and IVAN continue dancing.

One of the people, peering out from a helicopter.

SOLDIER IN HELICOPTER

(shouts)

Fire!

MOREVNA and IVAN run, holding hands beneath the hail of shots, to the motorcycle and ride it The motorcycle rears up and takes off. They rush along the road.

EXT. HIGHWAY - EVENING

MOREVNA and IVAN ride on the motorcycle along the night road. NAZAR overtakes them in his truck; they wave at him.

INT. BAR - EVENING

MOREVNA and IVAN are dancing again. (This time normally.)

EXT. MOTORCLUB - DAY

MOREVNA and IVAN's wedding. The wedding is held in the motor club. IVAN's SISTERS, their husbands and NAZAR are present. Above the newly-weds flies a SPARROW with a flower in its beak.

Morevna's departure

EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE

MOREVNA's estate consists of a palace on a hill, two garages, and around them a garden, something like a small grove. The palace is enclosed by a wall.

A howl is heard, and a howling body flies out of the grove, launched into the air by an invisible force.

EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - GROVE

AGENT sits in the brushwood near the wall of the house, following the body with a horrified gaze. The wall of the house is rigged with a large quantity of explosives. The AGENT wipes sweat from his forehead and lowers his eyes to the cord stretching from the explosives. With shaking hands he takes out a matchbox. He strikes a match on the box.

Behind his back, from somewhere above, IVAN hangs face down on a rope. A puff of air resulting from this motion puts out the match. But AGENT does not notice IVAN behind him and takes out a new one. IVAN looks at his actions with interest. With shaking hands, the AGENT moves the match near the fuse.

IVAN

Whatcha doing here, friend?

AGENT shouts and jumps up out of surprise. IVAN detaches his harness from the rope and puts his feet on the ground.

AGENT snatches out a knife. Then, after some thinking, his other hand takes his id from his breast pocket.

AGENT

I'm a government agent!

IVAN

(tiredly)

Yes, I know- I know... And I am the owner of this house.

EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - COURT

IVAN leaves the grove, dragging AGENT by the foot. There is an enormous lump on the AGENT's head. In his other hand, IVAN carries a large bundle of explosives, which were previously used to rig the wall. In the very center of the court stands a threatening catapult. AGENT desperately scrapes his fingers on the earth, but IVAN confidently takes step after step forward in the direction of the catapult. MOREVNA appears from one of the doors of the house.

IVAN

(still walking)

Ah, Marya Morevna, here's what I can't make sense of.

Is this place, like, covered in honey? We don't really live all that wealthily, but they just keep coming here! Lousy extremists!

IVAN places Agent in the catapult.

IVAN

... As if there are no other houses around!

IVAN presses the trigger and the catapult throws the howling agent into the air, far beyond the wall of the estate.

MOREVNA

As if this entertainment doesn't make you happy.

IVAN

Of course! But say, what point did you try to make by throwing my 32-inch monitor on his head?

EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - GROVE - FLASHBACK

Chibi-style animation. AGENT stands opposite IVAN, holding a knife and his identification. From the window above, MOREVNA throws a monitor on AGENT's head. IVAN jumps up from surprise and shakes his fists.

EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - COURTYARD

MOREVNA

(shrugs)

It's all right. We'll sell the explosives and buy you a 33-inch one.

IVAN

At his rate I may soon open a TNT trade! I wonder, when will they realize that we have webcams set up everywhere?

MOREVNA walks a motorcycle from the garage.

MOREVNA

I'm going out to a biker gathering. It's pretty far away, so I won't return until tomorrow.

(Takes out keys)

Here are the keys to all the doors in the house. Feel free to go anywhere, but don't touch this key and don't unlock the door it opens.

IVAN

(takes keys)

Why?

MOREVNA

(stomps her foot)

You just shouldn't, I said!

IVAN shrugs with a smile, as if saying “fine, fine”.

MOREVNA

Well, bye...

She sits down on the motorcycle and leaves. IVAN waves after her.

Return of Koshchei The Deathless

INT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - ROOM

IVAN sits at his computer. The screen displays the "Fedora Castle" desktop operating system. Next to IVAN stands a can with some beverage. IVAN lifts it to take a sip, but the jar is empty. IVAN sighs and rises from the table.

INT. NIGHT - MOREVNA ESTATE - CORRIDOR

IVAN, holding a candle, walks up to the door of the cellar, unlocks it, and goes in.

INT. NIGHT - MOREVNA ESTATE - CELLAR

The door into the cellar opens with a squeak. IVAN goes down the stairs.

We see IVAN's legs, walking on the cellar floor.

IVAN looks around, as if searching for something. In the cellar there are many barrels, bottles, and foodstuffs, as well as the explosives taken from the extremists.

IVAN passes by a massive iron door with with an enormous lock, and finally stops next to a shelf with bottles.

IVAN

Aha… Here!

IVAN extends his hand towards the bottle. The sound of a bubbling liquid is heard.

KOSHCHEI

(from behind the door, in a sepulchral voice)

He-eeelp me-e-e...

IVAN

(peering from around the corner)

Huh? What?

KOSHCHEI:

(a little more clearly)

Hee-eeee-eelp me-e-e...

IVAN looks at the lock, then to the keyring. Memories flash through his subconscious, which show MOREVNA and KOSHCHEI. They battle in some cave. The appropriate key falls from the ring by itself.

IVAN

Oh... the forbidden key!

(puts key in the lock)

Well, let's see...

IVAN opens the door slightly and carefully peers in. Again there is a flashback. IVAN shouts out of fright, shock, and surprise.

In the closet, on 12 chains, hangs KOSHCHEI (who resembles a robot-transformer). IVAN enthusiastically examines him.

IVAN

(awed, in a whisper, almost about itself)

Such amazing tuning...

The eyes of KOSHCHEI open, his view passing over the figure of IVAN.

KOSHCHEI

Who are you?

IVAN

I am Ivan-Tsarevich.

KOSHCHEI

Ivan-Tsarevich! How good it is that you are here. Give me something to drink...

IVAN readily hands KOSHCHEI his bottle.

KOSHCHEI

...some gasoline.

IVAN goes away and returns with a gas can. KOSHCHEI drinks. His eyes light ablaze, and he laughs a sinister laugh. KOSHCHEI tears apart the chains and stands up to his full height, towering above IVAN.

KOSHCHEI

Thank you, Ivan-Tsarevich. You have helped me.

From now on, you won't be able to see Marya Morevna any more than you can see your own ears!

KOSHCHEI's engines flare, he transforms into a flight vehicle and flies away after breaking a few beams in the ceiling, as well as the window in the wall.

There is a slow-motion effect: KOSHCHEI flies out, fragments from the broken window flying to all sides. Then the camera quickly returns into the cellar through the holes made by Koshchei. Now sober, IVAN is in a panic. He quickly runs out of the cellar, runs to the garage, sits in a car and rides out in pursuit.

EXT. NIGHT - ROAD

Along the road IVAN hastily tries to call MOREVNA on her cell phone. It reports "The subscriber is temporarily unavailable."

EXT. NIGHT - CLEARING WITH MOREVNA'S BROKEN MOTORCYCLE

IVAN sees MOREVNA's broken MOTORCYCLE on the road, all in flames. MOREVNA's sword is thrust into the ground nearby, and near it lies a wounded bird - SPARROW. IVAN sharply brakes, as result of which his car drifts and stops perpendicular to road. IVAN jumps out and runs to the motorcycle, but the nearer he goes, the more he slows down, finally slowing to a walk. He bends to his knees, taking the SPARROW in his hands.

IVAN

What happened here?

SPARROW

What misfortune! An evil robot-transformer kidnapped Marya Morevna. And it hooked me. Good-bye, Ivan-Tsarevich.

The SPARROW dies.

IVAN

No!

SPARROW

(raises its head)

And tell my family that I loved them all dearly.

IVAN pulls MOREVNA's katana from the ground and puts it behind his back.

IVAN

(tearfully shaking his fist)

I will tell them, I will definitely tell them. And I will save Marya Morevna as well! Farewell.

IVAN runs to the car, sits down, and drives away.

While he drives, pictures blink on the screen, showing him visiting his sisters.

Encounter with the first sister. DOCTOR-SISTER walks towards him with the BUSINESSMAN. She hugs IVAN. They talk. DOCTOR-SISTER runs out of the frame and then runs through the background with a first-aid kit, in the direction of her car.

Encounter with the PRIESTESS-SISTER. IVAN sits at the table. He eats and tells them. They are sad and remain silent. Then IVAN suddenly smiles and says something about the food. PRIESTESS-SISTER looks happy.

Encounter with the MECHANIC-SISTER. IVAN asks her husband and her about something, they think, but contritely shake their heads. ROCKER opens a briefcase before IVAN. IVAN nods and takes it.

A State Meeting

INT. DAY - COMMAND CENTER

A luxurious hall with high windows. There is a long table in the middle. At the table sit the GENERAL, MINISTER OF FINANCE, ADVISER, MINISTER OF SCIENCE, MINISTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH, and MINISTER OF CULTURE. At the head of the table sits the President - OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH, 38. The GENERAL's face is completely covered with plasters (band-aids). All in all, everyone present resembles a patient in a psychiatric hospital - enormous bags under their eyes, tics, shaking hands, spasms, shaking lips, and shifty glances.

Photographs of KOSHCHEI flying with MOREVNA's body on his shoulders are scattered across the table.

A CHURCH CHOIR stands behind the back of the President.

ADVISER

Well, and what do you propose we do now? In the present situation...

GENERAL

I repeat: without air support, any of our actions are doomed to failure.

MINISTER OF FINANCES

General, you like war, don't you?

Do you understand how much each helicopter costs the government? I'm afraid even to recall how the last encounter of our armored division with Marya Morevna ended.

GENERAL

I repeat, this was pilot error!

MINISTER OF FINANCES

(sarcastically)

Of course, and the legendary attack on our research center was also 'pilot error'!

MINISTER OF SCIENCE

(in the background, with disgust)

Ugh!

MINISTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH

(in the background, simultaneously)

Don't bring that up!

GENERAL

If our respected Minister

(points in the direction of the Minister of Science)

had immediately reported the incident with Yaga, we would not have simply dismissed her, but would have locked her up in the right place. And then...

MINISTER OF SCIENCE

Yaga was an outstanding specialist. If there had been proper control over the criminal gangs during that period, then such an incident simply could not have occured at all and the EVNN project would have been completed.

GENERAL

I am putting forth my best efforts, but I don't have enough people. If you had granted me helicopters earlier, we would've already finished Marya Morevna and her entire farce.

MINISTER OF FINANCES

I completely understand your desire to singlehandedly destroy Marya Morevna. After all, it was you who aimed to be the “Death Carrier”.

GENERAL

(bangs his fist on the table)

That's a serious accusation!

ADVISER

You must be grateful that we sent to you help during the previous incident.

GENERAL

Then why so late? It was already time to send medical helicopters!

MINISTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH

(suddenly awake)

Of course we would have sent you medical helicopters, except, as you remember, our budget was cut so that we could not make even one flight!

All begin to speak simultaneously, an uproar rises.

ADVISER

Is it for this reason that the Minister has arrived in a private jet?

MINISTER OF FINANCES

We were forced to do this in order to finance the construction of the national cathedral.

MINISTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH

No one is more concerned about the President's health than I!

GENERAL

But where is this cathedral? The money has already been allocated four times over!

MINISTER OF CULTURE

Yes, the people need religion; we need something to keep their minds occupied!

President bangs his fist on the table out of fury.

OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH

Enough!

Silence reigns.

OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH

We know the location. We know the situation. All the maps are still in our hands. We will make a helicopter strike.

General looks victoriously at the minister of finances.

OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH

Should that fail, we will mine the entire island and blow it and the both of them to hell.

The eyes of General flare up still brighter.

OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH

(wipes his sweaty forehead with the palm of his hand)

I'm tired and, moreover, I can't miss dinner.

CHURCH CHOIR

(begins to sing)

Oh esteemed President,

God save you,

Your family, friends, relatives.

Lord, save the Tsar!

Accompanied by the sounds of their voices, Oroshay Polivayevich leaves the room with a blissful smile on his face.

At the Old Ruins

EXT. EVENING - RUINS OF RESEARCH CENTER / COURTYARD

Late evening. The sun has almost entirely vanished beyond the horizon. Old ruins of some research center next to the highway. The complex has been neglected for a long time; it is evident that the main building was seriously damaged by a powerful explosion in the past.

It begins to drizzle.

IVAN's car drives past the ruins, but then stops. IVAN looks at the ruins.

The rain picks up.

IVAN brushes his fingers around his red, bruised, eyes and puts his car into reverse. He drives into the courtyard and hides the car under a canopy near the building. IVAN turns off the engine, reclines his seat, and lies back in it. He closes his eyes.

The moon peeks out through the clouds. The rain drums on the roof of the car, drops running down the windshield. The ruins seem absolutely lifeless. IVAN is asleep.

Morevna's Flashback

EXT. STONY WASTELAND - DAY - FLASHBACK

Picture in mono-chrome.

Stony landscape. A sea splashes in the distance. Out of the stones grows an enormous, thick, and knotty tree - an oak. The surroundings are shrouded by smoke. A building is mounted into the body of tree, like a parasite. There is a dark crevice in the building - the entrance.

A trail of blood leads to the crevice, as if someone injured had gone inside.

Camera zooms towards the crevice and into the darkness.

INT. LABORATORY INSIDE THE OAK - FLASHBACK

In the darkness, some fluff begins to fall from above. But in reality it is gray fur. It spins in the air, appearing from nowhere and falling downward.

MOREVNA (V.O.)

Yes, I knew... I came to destroy her…

Instead of the fluff, duck feathers begin to spin in the air.

MOREVNA (V.O.)

But at that moment she became my only way to... my only source of the power. The only source. And I've taken her...

A luminous girl hovers in air among the feathers. It is possible to recognize her as MOREVNA. In the center of her body a shines a thin gold line that is similar to the needle.

In front of MOREVNA an amulet hangs in the air, surrounded by a white substance.

MOREVNA (CONT'D)

...and I became her.

EXT. STONY WASTELAND - DAY - FLASHBACK

Figure of MOREVNA walking away from the oak. There is the amulet on her neck. When she walks away up to a decent distance, far away, on the horizon, on the other side of the sea, a fortress (the research centre) flies apart into smithereens.

Darkness.

Encounter at the old ruins

EXT. NIGHT - RESEARCH CENTER RUINS, INDUSTRIAL YARD

Drizzle. The moon is visible through moving clouds. IVAN is still asleep in his car.

Headlights suddenly shine brightly through his windshield. IVAN wakes up with a start and looks around in confusion.

A tractor-trailer truck, similar to NAZAR's, enters the yard. It turns in the yard and stops. A figure in a raincoat jumps down out of the cab onto the damp earth. This is BABA-YAGA, but the camera does not reveal her face as she walks through the ruins.

IVAN's car is shadowed by a shed and so she doesn't notice it. She walks rapidly over the mud towards the gates in front of the main building. IVAN watches her. Once she passes out of sight inside of the building, he jumps out of his car to follow her.

INT. NIGHT - RESEARCH CENTER RUINS, MAIN RECEPTION

IVAN follows carefully. He looks around uncertainly, not knowing where to go. He comes to a large double door. On it, half-eroded capital letters "EVNN" can be made out, and below them smaller text, reading "Electronic Versatile Nanodevice Network". The doors are ajar. IVAN stands near them in indecision. Through them he hears a sound like something heavy falling onto the stone floor. IVAN goes through the doors and down a long dark corridor. In it there are many doors, almost all of which bear a logo with the abbreviation "EVNN".

IVAN passes through some laboratories, where various technological debris is left behind: computers and electro-mechanical equipment. A ray of light leaks into the room from one door. IVAN sneaks towards it.

INT. NIGHT - RESEARCH CENTER RUINS, LABORATORY

The room resembles a computer server farm. There are rows of rackmount frames with various computer components in them. In the walls there are fans. A pair of working tables stand in the middle. To one side are prototype mechanical arms and other equipment.

IVAN moves stealthily into the room. The light of a lantern moves around somewhere behind the cabinets. IVAN happens to knock a photograph in a cracked frame off of the table towards the floor, but he snatches it out of the air before it smashes into the ground.

IVAN looks at the photograph. In it, two smiling girls are sitting at a table, apparently in this office. Behind them stands a somewhat older woman with white hair in a dressing gown (this is BABA-YAGA in her youth).

IVAN returns the photograph to the table and hides behind one of the racks. The raincoated figure has turned one of the cabinets around. This one is taken up by a large tank in which some liquid gurgles. The tank walls are heavily insulated. BABA-YAGA intently studies the tank. She coughs. IVAN looks intently at her. BABA-YAGA suddenly raises her head as if feeling his gaze.

IVAN stands still, hiding behind of one of the cabinets, out of the BABA-YAGA's field of view. It is not clear whether he managed to hide himself in time or not. There is a rustle and the sound of footsteps. Then complete silence. IVAN waits. He carefully attempts to look out of his hiding place. At this moment, the silhouette of BABA-YAGA appears right behind him in the shadows. She grabs for IVAN's neck.

IVAN grunts and turns to flee, after pushing BABA-YAGA aside. But BABA-YAGA tripps him and IVAN noisily falls into a heap of debris and trips. IVAN scrambles to turn and draw his sword, but BABA-YAGA's sword (just like MOREVNA'S SWORD!) is already in his face. In the same moment he is blinded by the light of the lantern.

IVAN lifts his hand to block the light. BABA-YAGA, after looking him over, returns her sword to its scabbard and reaches out her hand. IVAN looks with distrust at the raincoated figure.

Sister-Doctor and The Little Sparrow

EXT. NIGHT - CLEARING WITH MOREVNA'S BROKEN MOTORCYCLE

SPARROW lies on a tilted stump. DOCTOR-SISTER's car is nearby. DOCTOR-SISTER attempts to resuscitate SPARROW. MAN-IN-BLACK approaches.

DOCTOR-SISTER

(without turning, angled away from MAN-IN-BLACK)

Is it really his time already?

[In the original text there's more doubt in the question. This asking is closer to a prayer, she can't believe that it's time to die for SPARROW. She asking herself, but it equally can be addressed to a MAN-IN-BLACK. And the meaning is like "Can't be it's his time already?", "Surely his time has come?", "Is it really his time already?", "Is it his time has come?" That's the dual-meaning of the scene - it's not clarified to the viewer is DOCTOR-SISTER really see and hear MAN-IN-BLACK or not, but at the both cases scene remains sane. --KonstantinDmitriev 15:21, 30 January 2010 (UTC) ]

[Okay, this has the double meaning you wanted Digitante ] [Added "really" in order to increase the doubt JuliaVelkova ]

MAN-IN-BLACK

(smiling faintly)

No, no. I only stopped in passing...

[Not sure what the intent is here. What does he want to ask her? He might say he's "just curious" or "just watching" if the intent was only to find out what's going on with the SPARROW. Digitante 03:45, 31 January 2010 (UTC)]

[Yes, "just watching" - is close to the right meaning. I meant something like "just passing through" / "just passing by" - don't what is correct. --KonstantinDmitriev 15:21, 30 January 2010 (UTC)]

[Okay, "stopped in passing" avoids the unimportant detail and emphasizes motion -- pausing and then leaving without doing anything. Of course MAN-IN-BLACK is "Death", so SPARROW is spared. Digitante 03:45, 31 January 2010 (UTC)]

MAN-IN-BLACK passes by behind DOCTOR-SISTER.

SPARROW opens its eyes. From his point of view we see a cloudy image of DOCTOR-SISTER. There is no one behind her.

The Map

INT. NIGHT - RESEARCH CENTER RUINS, LABORATORY

BABA-YAGA sits near the tank she has turned around, and untwists its cap. She coughs. IVAN sits on the floor nearby, leaning against the wall with his arms folded. BABA-YAGA fills a container with the silvery liquid in the tank.

BABA-YAGA

(absent-mindedly)

No, I've seen no robots around here.

She puts two wires into the liquid in the container. The contained liquid instantly hardens into a whimsical form.

BABA-YAGA

(continuing)

What does it look like? Who's controlling it?

She takes the solid form out of the container and holds it up to her eyes.

IVAN

No one...

BABA-YAGA raises her head in worry, dropping the object on the floor.

BABA-YAGA

No one?

IVAN

(not noticing her reaction)

It looked that way to me. It talked by itself and...

BABA-YAGA

(looking at IVAN in shock)

So, he escaped after all...

IVAN

He?

BABA-YAGA

The robot you are looking for. He is named Koshchei. Oh, dark times are coming.

BABA-YAGA gets up off of the floor.

IVAN

Wait, you do know something?

BABA-YAGA grasps for a handle on the tank.

BABA-YAGA

Go home, young man. I have no time for that now.

IVAN

(emotionally)

Wait, tell me where to find him!

BABA-YAGA attempts to pull the tank across the floor, but it's too heavy for her.

BABA-YAGA

You don't need to know about this.

(She coughs)

Don't search for your death.

IVAN

(runs up to her begging)

Please, tell me! This is very, very important to me!

BABA-YAGA

(looking fixedly at him)

So you are...

(pause)

Help me out, young man, and I will show you.

EXT. NIGHT - RESEARCH CENTER RUINS, INDUSTRIAL YARD

IVAN and BABA-YAGA pull the tank into the trailer of her truck. BABA-YAGA climbs into the cab, and reaches out with a map.

BABA-YAGA

Here, take this. Koshchei's castle is on Buyan Island.

(points out a road on the map)

This is the way to get there.

IVAN

(taking the map)

Thanks.

BABA-YAGA

Good luck, young man.

BABA-YAGA's truck drives off into the night.

Crossing the bridge

EXT. NIGHT - BRIDGE TO BUYAN ISLAND

There are many SOLDIERS encamped near the bridge. They have military vehicles and trucks loaded with explosives. The bridge is blocked by barricades with signs reading “DANGER!” and “ROAD CLOSED!”

IVAN'S CAR appears from behind the top of nearest hill and stops. IVAN looks at the bridge. Then he guns the accelerator and the car plunges towards the barricades at full speed. SOLDIERS see him, but it's too late, because he's already too close. SOLDIERS run confused.

A SOLDIER

Stop! Not this way! It's prohibited territory!

IVAN'S CAR crashes through the barricades and over the bridge. Two POLICE CARS chase after him. Pursuit continues briefly, but then IVAN makes a high-speed sharp turn which the POLICE CARS can't follow. They crash into bushes on the side of the road and get stuck.

A POLICEMAN comes out of one car, looking towards IVAN'S CAR departing.

POLICEMAN

That guy is out of his mind...

POLICE CARS leave in disarray, returning back to the bridge.

First escape

EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS

IVAN'S CAR races towards KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS.

KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS is enclosed by a rock wall. At the corners, there are several towers. In the center is a main building (the fortress itself), with a central tower above it. A very large garage is attached to one side of the main building.

There is fighting near the FORTRESS. Several helicopters are vainly attempting to shoot at KOSHCHEI as he flies around them. One helicopter is being controlled by PAYLAT. KOSHCHEI shoots down two of the helicopters, but a third succeeds in firing a rocket into KOSHCHEI.

PILOT 1

Take that, Koshchei, you bastard!

KOSHCHEI flies away, but his shell immediately recovers from the damage made by the missile. He continues the battle.

PILOT 1

Damn it! How could it be?

PILOT 2

The Water of Death...

[I'm pretty clueless as to what that was about. But I learned some Russian cuss words. I get that "Water of Death" is significant from the fairy tale, but how is it being used here? An invocation/expletive? Or is he concerned that Koshchei is about to use the Water of Death or something? Also not sure about "Is that so?" -- is Pilot 1 supposed to be taunting Koshchei for running away?Digitante 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]

[In brief: Koshchei is recovering and pilot 1 wonders how is it possible. Pilot 2 drops in reply: "Death Water", meaning that Koshchei is made of Death Water. But he is to concentrated on the battle to explain that in detail. Death Water concept is briefly described here: http://synfig.org/forums/viewtopic.php?p=458#p458 --KonstantinDmitriev 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]

[I knew what the "Water of Death" was, but I wasn't sure how it related to the conversation (mainly because I misinterpreted the sentence before it) -- thanks for clarifying. I restored this to "Water of Death" which I think you should adopt, because: 1) it's the formula used in the fairy tale, 2) it has been used in a similar way in English stories and science fiction books (particularly your nanomachine explanation occurs in "The Snow Queen" and "The Summer Queen" by Joan Vinge), 3) "Death Water" sounds mundane and boring while "Water of Death" has 'weight' (it sounds archaic, but that's good in this situation), and 4) it is symmetric with "Water of Life", which of course, has a _long_ history in English-language stories and will be immediately understood. Digitante 04:23, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

[You convinced me. ^___^ --KonstantinDmitriev 07:23, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

KOSHCHEI, running low on fuel, returns to hide inside the FORTRESS.

PILOT 1

What's going on? Where's he gone?

PILOT 2

He must be out of fuel. He can't last long. Still using A-76, eh?

[I'm guessing this is some kind of reference to the gas station company "76"? Digitante 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]

[Here's A-76 gasoline referenced, a very low grade kind of gasoline. I don't know is it related to http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/76_%28Conoco_Phillips%29 or not. --KonstantinDmitriev 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]

PAYLAT

Hey, it's a good bargain!

[If this was a word play, you're going to have to explain it to me. Digitante 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]

[That fits very well! ^__^ --KonstantinDmitriev 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]

PILOT 1

Cut the chatter! Our priority is killing the target. Concentrate your fire on the central tower!

It's at this moment that IVAN'S CAR arrives at the FORTRESS. IVAN gets out of the car. PAYLAT sees him and takes his helicopter down.

PILOT 2

Paylat!

PILOT 1

Hell with it, follow the order!

The helicopters move towards the central tower.

INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER, UPPER ROOM

MOREVNA is unconscious, hanging from chains on the wall. Her amulet is gone. In the room is a table and chair. The chair is similar to a dentist's chair.

[I'm assuming this is meant to imply torture rather than dental hygiene Digitante 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]

[LOL --KonstantinDmitriev 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]

EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER

Helicopters direct sights at the upper room of tower.

EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, [WINCH?]

PAYLAT'S HELICOPTER lands in front of IVAN'S CAR. IVAN can see into the HELICOPTER. PAYLAT in turn looks at IVAN.

EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER

Rockets fly out from the HELICOPTERS. They go towards the CENTRAL TOWER, but explode several meters short. The tower is unharmed.

PILOT 1

There's a force field! He is clever, damn!

PILOT 2

The source must be...

(cut off)

Now, GUNS on the walls and outer towers open fire on the HELICOPTERS.

PILOT 1

It's a trap!

INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, LABORATORY

KOSHCHEI sits at a control panel, consisting of radar screen, other monitors, and lots of buttons.

KOSHCHEI

Ha-ha-ha-ha!

[God this is cheesy. He needs to have a nice metallic filtered laugh. Would be awesome. Still cheesy though. Digitante 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]

[^__^ --KonstantinDmitriev 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]

[I'm auditioning for that part when the time comes to find voices. ;-) Digitante 04:23, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

With relish swallows gasoline from the mug in his hand.

KOSHCHEI

Bwa-ha-ha-ha!

EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER

HELICOPTERS, maneuvering between the towers, are trying to avoid the guns and escape. Above them flies PAYLAT'S HELICOPTER. Guns shoot down one HELICOPTER and heavily damage another.

PILOT 1

Retreat! Retreat!

PAYLAT'S HELICOPTER also flies away damaged, rocking absurdly as it flies.

INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, LABORATORY

Points on the radar screen fly away to the edges, away from the fortress. KOSHCHEI looks with satisfaction at the screen, swallows from a mug and stands up in front of the control panel.

The camera exits through the LABORATORY window and tracks to the ROOF of the CENTRAL TOWER.

EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER ROOF

IVAN stands on the roof. A rope is tied to his belt. IVAN jumps from the roof downward, swinging Tarzan-style. He hovers directly outside the window of the UPPER ROOM. He can see MOREVNA through the window.

IVAN reachs back and pulls his sword out.

IVAN

Hi, Baby!

[This was in English originally. We could also do it in Russian in the English version (but I'm not sure what would fit) Digitante 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]

[Let's leave it English. IVAN uses slang, but I'm really not sure that any English-speaking person would use Russian words as a slang in that kind of situation. --KonstantinDmitriev 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]

INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER, UPPER ROOM

IVAN cuts the fetters with his sword.

EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, LABORATORY

The fortress gates burst open in an explosion and IVAN runs out, carrying MOREVNA. He runs to the car. KOSHCHEI, hearing the explosion looks out the window to see them.

KOSHCHEI

(enraged)

What?!

KOSHCHEI runs away from the window. The garage doors open. Two bright headlights are seen within. There is a roar from a motor, and KOSHCHEI exits the garage in his BELAZ [A very large dumptruck http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/BELAZ ]

First chase

EXT. NIGHT - BUYAN ISLAND ROAD

Koshchei is chasing IVAN (Pursuit in the style "Need For Speed Underground", http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Need_For_Speed_Underground).

IVAN tries as hard as he can to escape the pursuit, but he doesn't succeed. KOSHCHEI'S BELAZ is a really souped up machine with modifications.

KOSHCHEI laughs loudly in the cab as he gets nearer. Then he hits the "nitro," fire belches from the smokestack and the BELAZ flies through the air over IVAN'S CAR.

The BELAZ is reflected in the windshield of IVAN'S CAR as it flies over. The BELAZ lands on the road in front of it, blocking the way. IVAN slams on the breaks to avoid hitting it and stops.

KOSHCHEI gets out of the BELAZ and approaches IVAN'S CAR. He tears the window off of the passenger side of the car and pulls MOREVNA out, completely ignoring IVAN. IVAN jumps out of the car in a rage to confront KOSHCHEI, but he's brought up short as KOSCHEI turns to him.

KOSHCHEI

A word of advice, Ivan. Forget Marya Morevna. I'll let you escape this once, but next time there will be no mercy!

IVAN droops his head. KOSHCHEI takes MOREVNA into the BELAZ and leaves. A strange smile appears on IVAN's face.

Blow'em up

INT. NIGHT - COMMAND CENTER

OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH stands near one of the windows, facing the window, hands folded behind him. He enjoys the view. An adviser enters and whispers something to him quietly.

OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH

(nods)

Set them off.

Adviser departs.

Second escape

EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS

From the central tower we hear MOREVNA's cries.

MOREVNA

Let me go! Let me go, damn it! Or I'll tear you apart!!!

INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, TOWER ROOM

KOSHCHEI stands facing MOREVNA, who is tied up with ropes on the dentist-like chair. She strains against the ropes, trying (unsuccessfully) to get loose. KOSHCHEI reaches and takes the AMULET from around her neck, and tosses it idly in his hand.

KOSHCHEI

I'll be in my laboratory. You sit here!

KOSHCHEI leaves with the AMULET. Rustling is heard at the window. MOREVNA looks through the window, where IVAN is hanging on the rain gutter.

IVAN

All right, let's go?

MOREVNA

Ivan Tsarevich!

EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS

IVAN and MOREVNA run out through the open gates and into the car. As KOSHCHEI passes by the window, he looks through and sees them.

KOSHCHEI

(totally enraged)

What?!

[For future reference, you probably wanted "flipped off", though "pissed" or "pissed off" is my dialect. These expressions are very regional, though. "Enraged" will be understood by all. Digitante 04:48, 31 January 2010 (UTC)]

KOSHCHEI runs to the garage, and starts his BELAZ.

Second chase

EXT. NIGHT - BUYAN ISLAND, HIGHWAY

IVAN and MOREVNA are in IVAN'S CAR, running away from KOSHCHEI'S BELAZ.

IVAN

Faster! Go faster!

MOREVNA

What are we going to do?

IVAN

I don't know! I just want to get you back!

MOREVNA

But what can we do about Koshchei?

IVAN

If we can't shake him, we might have to find a way to finish him off.

MOREVNA

But there's no way. He's immortal.

IVAN

How do you know that?

MOREVNA

His death - is...[me].

The BELAZ rams the back of the car and her last words drown in the sound of crashing metal, but we can see MOREVNA's lips pronouncing "me."

[Yes, the sentence is incomplete. She should say "His death - this is me" --KonstantinDmitriev 07:59, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

[Okay, if I understood the treatment, this should now make sense. We're referring to the nanomachine connection between MOREVNA and Koshchei. The word should be in the screenplay since the actor and animator need to know it to get this right. I used "in me" instead of "is me" because I think we're talking about the nanomachines being in her body (this would be Water-of-Death technology jargon, so it would be understood by Ivan only under the assumption that he is familiar with the technology -- which I _think_ is true in your story). Another possibility is "is mine" -- as in "if he dies, so do I". Ivan would probably understand that even if he hadn't heard of the Water of Death, even though it's a weird sympathetic-magic idea. It doesn't seem to be important whether the audience understands this connection at this point in the story(?). Notably, the lips will look very different for "me" versus "mine". Digitante 14:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

[Still it's better to stick to "is me" version, because the exact meaning here is "if I die - then he dies". Nanomachines are not referenced directly as being inside of her body, instead of that Morevna is treated as Koshchei's death herself - that' s closer to original meaning. And yes, it doesn't important whether the audience understands this connection at this point in the story. --KonstantinDmitriev 15:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

[BTW: "treatment" is screenwriters' jargon for what you titled "story plot" on the Synfig forum, that is "an informal description of a plot" it can be either a "short" or "summary" treatment (like what you wrote) or it can be a "detailed" treatment, which usually has one paragraph to describe each scene in the final screenplay. Digitante 14:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

[Oh, that's good to know for me! ^___^ --KonstantinDmitriev 15:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

IVAN [desperately] turns the steering wheel, trying his best to keep the car on the road. But his eyes are filled with surprise at what he just heard. He's looking at her instead of the road.

Pictures flash by in black-and-white:

An opened chest standing inside a cave.

A broken egg shell on the stones, covered by feathers.

IVAN

God...

KOSHCHEI laughs out loud and accelerates. The BELAZ'S right wheel hits the left side of IVAN'S CAR (where IVAN is sitting), and rolls right over, crushing the entire left side of the car into the asphalt, along with IVAN himself.

MOREVNA, in the right side of the car, remains intact. Her eyes are wide with horror and she cannot speak at first. Then she cries out hysterically.

An image of IVAN talking just now flashes before her eyes and wheel of the BelAz crushing the car with him. [cutaway?][flashback?].

[My issue here was only that the direction seems to say what _Morevna_ sees, but we need to know what the _camera_ sees. I'm assuming we're cutting either to a still image or a moving image of Ivan talking. Does the flashback include seeing him die? (the machine translation mentions a "wheel", but that could be either the "steering wheel" or the "wheel of the BelAz crushing the car+Ivan" (Eww). Digitante 14:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

[Yes, the camera shows event from the Morevna's point of view. Distracting moment, eh? --KonstantinDmitriev 15:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]

She continues to scream, even louder. The window behind her (on the right side of the car) is torn away, and KOSHCHEI'S metal hands pull her out of the car. She tries to escape, holding on to the mutilated car, but KOSHCHEI simply pulls her away and carries her off.

Before MOREVNA's eyes flicker images of her memories:

MONTAGE

IVAN and MOREVNA in a clearing near the house. MOREVNA'S head on IVAN'S shoulder.

IVAN and MOREVNA on the motorcycle driving on a sunny day. IVAN is sitting on the baggage carrier [isn't trunk a better word?].

[A car has a "trunk". Motorcycles don't. "Saddle bags" might be more common (mounted left and right), but they would be hard to sit on. "Baggage carrier" would be a rack on the back of the cycle, centered on top, allowing bags to be strapped to it. You could sit on that, so it made sense to me. Of course, most bikes are designed for two people. BTW, I don't see anything like this on the computer model -- in fact it looks like he'll have a hard time not getting burned on those tailpipes! Digitante 08:38, 7 February 2010 (UTC)]

IVAN and MOREVNA swinging on a rope together. MOREVNA screams, but IVAN appears to be enjoying himself.

IVAN and MOREVNA on the beach, fighting a shark.

The BELAZ is riding away. MOREVNA holds onto the window looking back. We see the road. MOREVNA, going into shock, sits depressed and listless in the seat. KOSHCHEI drives the truck without looking at her.

Revival

EXT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND HIGHWAY (WRECKAGE WHERE IVAN DIED)

IVAN's mutilated car lies in a puddle of blood. The sun rises.

IVAN'S SISTERS' cars drive up from three sides. First their HUSBANDS get out, then the SISTERS get out themselves.

DOCTOR-SISTER takes out a syringe into hand and with a medical cart and first-aid kit goes out of the camera view to the wreck. She starts to throw debris, boots, bottles and other junk out of frame border.

|Because of the sequence begin to throw out the fragments, boots, bottles and so forth. junk|

[The original says "boots, bottles, and so forth", but why should those be there? Shouldn't it just be broken pieces of car? Or is this intentional comedy? Digitante 22:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC)]

[Intentional comedy. ^___^ --KonstantinDmitriev 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]

MECHANIC-SISTER approaches. She takes out a wrench and begins to work, unbolting something, welding, and so on.

[BTW, a wrench normally implies "open-end", the closed kind is called a "box wrench" Digitante 22:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC)]

["Open-end" one meant here. --KonstantinDmitriev 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]

Then it is PRIESTESS-SISTER's turn. She takes a cross and begins to read an incantation from a magic book. The other sisters help her by sprinkling Water of Life all around. A glow comes from the book.

A beam of light emerges from the wreckage. After tossing fragments out of the way, it becomes brighter.

The HUSBANDS, who are standing away from the wreckage, put on dark sunglasses -- except of course for the BUSINESSMAN, because he's always wearing dark sunglasses.

A dark figure, resembling IVAN appears in the light. His left eye reflects an image of red flame. It becomes clear that this is IVAN, but his head is surrounded by a metal hoop [with a gemstone]. His left eye is artificial. His right hand and left leg are mechanical.

[I'm not sure I understand the "stone" -- like a gemstone in a ring? Digitante 22:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC)]

[Yeah! ^___^ --KonstantinDmitriev 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]

The HUSBANDS are shocked.

IVAN opens his eyes. He rocks, while supported by his sisters. He looks with horror at his own hands, looks up into the sky, and lets out a howl.

The sky grows dark and cloudy. It begins to drizzle.

IVAN is depressed. He sits on the stone, near what's left of the car. Nearby wait the SISTERS' cars.

MECHANIC-SISTER sits in the car. Next her is ROCKER. They remain silent, looking at the figure of IVAN. Windshield wipers scroops. MECHANIC-SISTER sighs and she gets out of her car again.

She approaches IVAN, but is hesitant to talk to him. The other SISTERS come up from behind.

MECHANIC-SISTER

Let's get into the car. We're worried about you.

IVAN clenches and unclenches his metal hand. It creaks in the rain.

IVAN

(without raising his head)

Why is all this happening?

[In other words, is "this" the whole plot, or just the revival? Digitante 22:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC)]

[The whole plot. "What all this for?" --KonstantinDmitriev 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]

MECHANIC-SISTER

I... I don't know.

(pause)

But if you're still here...

(breathes shakily)

Surely it's meant to be.

(pause)

What do you plan to do?

IVAN

To do...? What can I do?

Flashback to the shot of MOREVNA saying "His death is...", but without sound. In the same sequence, KOSHCHEI, saying "Give me a drink...."

IVAN

I, myself. I totally destroyed everything with my own hands. How can that be 'meant to be'?

[Thumbs up for the last sentence! --KonstantinDmitriev]

DOCTOR-SISTER

(sorrowfully)

But you must save Marya Morevna!!!

IVAN

(jumps up)

Must?!

I MUST? How?

Why, why did you bring me back? I'm meant to be there, dead!

(breathes heavily)

Even if I could, just look at me...

(raises his metal hand)

Now I'm just like...

[..just like him - Koshchei. (unsaid words) --KonstantinDmitriev 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]

IVAN brings down the metal hand against the stone nearby. A stone breaks into pieces.

IVAN lies on the debris, quietly sobbing.

IVAN

(whispered)

A monster...

DOCTOR-SISTER

(approaching)

Listen, Ivan...

DOCTOR-SISTER tries to put her hand on his arm, but with a wild look, he pushes her away.

IVAN

Don't touch me! Leave me alone!

DOCTOR-SISTER falls down to the ground. IVAN himself jumps aside as if scalded. With horror, he looks at his sister lying on the ground. He looks at his mechnical arm.

Waving his arms in a shunning motion, he steps back, then again. He stumbles, then runs away into the rain. DOCTOR-SISTER takes a step after him, but MECHANIC-SISTER stops her.

MECHANIC-SISTER

We've done all that we could.

She looks after the departing IVAN.

Despair

EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, STONY WASTELAND

IVAN runs. Then slow downs. He is walking on the stony earth, not paying attention to the road. His head is down, not looking where he is going. Drops of water drip from his wet hair.

EXT. DAY - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, YARD

The BelAZ is parked in the yard. KOSHCHEI pulls a completely unresisting MOREVNA out of it.

EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND BRIDGE

Soldiers set mines on the bridge and on the island landing. [i.e. "where the bridge meets the island" Digitante 01:57, 19 February 2010 (UTC)]

EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, HIGHWAY, WRECKAGE WHERE IVAN DIED

The SISTERS are still standing in the rain. In the foreground, ROCKER-HUSBAND dials his cell phone.

EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, STONY WASTELAND

IVAN'S cell phone shows an incoming call. IVAN looks, then throws the cell phone down on the ground. He continues walking.

EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, HIGHWAY, WRECKAGE WHERE IVAN DIED

ROCKER-HUSBAND looks at his phone, then dials another number.

ROCKER-HUSBAND

Hi...

Yes, it's me.

Yes, but not entirely.

[I gather we're hearing half of the conversation. But are there 3 lines as shown or 2? I can't guess what was said between the last two, so I'm not sure how to translate the last Digitante 01:57, 19 February 2010 (UTC)]

[He is calling MAN IN BLACK. After "Yes, it's me. " MAN IN BLACK asking: "Is he back?", meaning "to this world, to life". I think "Yes, but not entirely." fits well, as the meaning that IVAN is back to life mentally not completely. --KonstantinDmitriev 04:12, 19 February 2010 (UTC)]

EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, STONY WASTELAND

IVAN continues. On the horizon, shrouded by rain is the silhouette of a dark building -- ruins.

INT. EVENING - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER, TOP ROOM

MOREVNA is in the armchair, not even tied up. She stares listlessly out the window. A grate is closed over the window. Behind MOREVNA, KOSHCHEI'S back can be seen as he leaves.

INT. EVENING - BUYAN ISLAND

IVAN goes into a building in the ruins. The sun is setting as the clouds disperse.

INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER, TOP ROOM

MOREVNA looks out the window at the moon.

INT. NIGHT - BUYAN ISLAND, RUINS

IVAN looks out at the moon through a window. He falls down onto his knees, shuts his eyes, and bows his head down onto the floor in despair.

The clouds disperse completely, revealing the moon.

IVAN falls asleep, curled up on the rock floor. A beam of moonlight through a hole in the ceiling illuminates him.

The Man in Black

INT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND, RUINS

IVAN opens his eyes.

Nearby, MAN-IN-BLACK sits on a boulder. He is hammering something together from boards, ignoring IVAN as if he weren't there.

IVAN rises and sits up without consideration. He is indifferent. MAN-IN-BLACK continues to work, not paying him any attention too.

The silence becomes uncomfortable. IVAN tries to get up to leave, but only waves his hands and shifts his body. There is a light rustle. The MAN-IN-BLACK notices this motion and turns to look at him (his hair is partially blocking his eyes).

MAN-IN-BLACK

Are you just being rude, or are your eyes really so dim?

IVAN freezes, looking at him (MAN-IN-BLACK).

MAN-IN-BLACK

How do you do, Ivan.

IVAN

(sheepishly)

How do you do.

IVAN sits on the floor, not knowing how to act. The MAN-IN-BLACK continues his work.

MAN-IN-BLACK

What's bothering you? ... Maybe you should go home.

Pause.

IVAN

Home?

(to himself at first, then to MAN-IN-BLACK)

I don't have a home anymore... I'm all... Now I'm just like him. I can't let Marya Morevna see me this way... Like some undead thing...

As IVAN speaks, he looks at his mechanical arm. There is a flashback to the shot of the DOCTOR-SISTER thrown to the ground.

MAN-IN-BLACK

You see this hammer?

It's possible to drive nails with it and build a house. But it can also break a man's head. This is a tool. The tool is only an extension of the body and soul. Not evil; not good. It all depends on the man using it.

As the MAN-IN-BLACK speaks, he puts down the hammer and begins to sharpen a wooden stake with a knife. IVAN involuntarily follows his motions, but he's having weird and scary hallucinations -- for example, of MAN-IN-BLACK shaving down pieces of his own fingers together with the wood without reacting to it.

IVAN stares in horrified fascination, but manages to blink away the hallucination.

IVAN

(still in shock from what he's seeing, unable to look away from MAN-IN-BLACK's hands)

How do you know my name? I suppose my sisters must've sent you?

MAN-IN-BLACK

(amused)

Ha-Ha. Your sisters are pure gold. But no, I was simply passing by and decided to visit you. It's not yet time for your sisters to see me.

IVAN

But it turns out to be my time to see you?

MAN-IN-BLACK

Didn't you come here to die?

IVAN

(dazed)

What?

MAN-IN-BLACK

I came to help.

IVAN jumps to his feet, but nails are already flying into him like like darts. IVAN ducks out of the way only to see nails fly by his face. As IVAN follows them, they shoot into the rock wall.

IVAN turns back to the MAN-IN-BLACK. Already he's charging with the hammer in one hand and the stake in the other.

IVAN ducks one hit, then another. He manages to grab the MAN-IN-BLACK by the hand, knocking away the stake first, and then the hammer. The MAN-IN-BLACK jumps to the side, and in the next instant, IVAN sees that he holds in his hand an amulet -- very similar to the one that MOREVNA had, but shaped differently. The MAN-IN-BLACK sneers.

IVAN, not knowing what to expect, steps back. The man tightens his grip on the amulet and it flashes with gleaming light from inside.

IVAN experiences flashes igniting in his mind. His eyes widen, his pupils constrict, he grits his teeth. Another flash, and IVAN's mechanical leg bends at the knee by itself and IVAN falls down to the ground. He hears a crack, hissing -- the sounds are like howls.

Now IVAN's mechanical arm begins to choke him. IVAN chokes and attempts to resist, but his eyes are already clouded. Above him looms the figure of the MAN-IN-BLACK.

MAN-IN-BLACK

Well, just look at you! Die now, you evil, filthy thing!

Suddenly, the figure of the MAN-IN-BLACK is replaced by MOREVNA, exactly as she appeared when they first met.

MOREVNA

What's your name?

IVAN

I'm Ivan. The Tsarevich one.

[Presumeably this should be matched to the exact dialog in that scene Digitante 17:02, 5 March 2010 (UTC)]

[Yes. --KonstantinDmitriev 09:05, 6 March 2010 (UTC)]

There is a montage of abbreviated flashs of IVAN and MOREVNA's life together, sped up.

IVAN

I am Ivan Tsarevich!

Flashes sped up even more to a flicker.

IVAN

I AM IVAN TSAREVICH!

IVAN yells, beside himself. The scene freezes -- all sounds and flashes of light stop. Silence. IVAN stands face-to-face with the MAN-IN-BLACK. He grips MAN-IN-BLACK's hand with the amulet in his hand -- the mechanical one. The MAN-IN-BLACK looks somewhat surprised, but satisfied. He easily shoves IVAN in the stomach with his free hand, sending him flying into the opposite wall, making a large dent.

IVAN jumps up immediately. The MAN-IN-BLACK is already running up the ruined stairs to the roof. IVAN rushes to follow.

INT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND, RUINS - ROOF

IVAN stops in the rooftop doorway. Before him spreads out distant spaces: fields, blue sky, and golden sun rising on the horizon. IVAN stands there bewitched by the view. Above and behind IVAN, the MAN-IN-BLACK's dangling leg lowers into view -- he is sitting on the lintel above the doorway IVAN came through.

MAN-IN-BLACK

(admiring the sunrise)

With a spirit as strong as steel -- nothing else matters.

IVAN

(inhales deeply)

Now I know what it is -- to remain standing, when all the foundations have fallen.

MAN-IN-BLACK

(leaving)

Keep this strength with you. You both took the best from each other. Did you really think you get away from THERE for no reason?

IVAN turns around, but the man is gone already -- there's just two black feathers spinning in the air. Where the MAN-IN-BLACK was sitting on the stone, is IVAN's CELL PHONE.

Where the sun is rising on the horizon, the figures of IVAN's walking SISTERS are silhouetted against the golden sky.

IVAN looks at the cell phone. The number is already on it, he has only to push the button to call.

EXT. EVENING - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS - CENTRAL TOWER - UPPER ROOM

MOREVNA sits in the tower in complete despair. There is a rustle at the window, but she does not react. Then there is a ring. The cell phone on the window-sill is ringing. MOREVNA turns in consternation, she sees the telephone and the figure of SPARROW flying away from window. The phone continues to ring. MOREVNA picks it up.

INT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND RUINS ROOF

IVAN

Hello! Marya Morevna?

EXT. EVENING - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS - CENTRAL TOWER - UPPER ROOM

MOREVNA coughs in suprise and falls back onto the floor. She looks sightlessly to the ceiling.

MOREVNA

(exhaling almost in a whisper)

You're... you're alive!

INT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND RUINS - ROOF

IVAN

You wouldn't happen to know where Koshchei got that truck of his, would you?

Baba Yaga's automobile workshop

EXT. DAY - BRIDGE TO THE BUYAN ISLAND

Ivan's car crashes through the barricades and crosses the bridge. None of the soldiers manages even to react.

EXT. DAY - BABA YAGA'S AUTOMOBILE WORKSHOP

On a building, which resembles both a carwash and a garage, hangs a signboard:

"Baba Yaga's Auto Shop"

[Very nearly literal and sounds right to me. Digitante 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]

(postscript: no humans! cars and trucks only) ~ off script :)

["Off script"? Are we re-writing? I guess you mean this is hand-written on the sign? I like it. Digitante 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]

[Someone just joking here... ^___^ --KonstantinDmitriev]

IVAN drives up, leaves his car, and approaches the door.

THE DOOR

Password?

IVAN pushes his bangs away from his eyes and shuts them. A peaceful expression crosses his face.

IVAN

Cabin, cabin, turn your back to the trees and your door to me!

[Obviously a formula from the original story. My best poetic translation -- it almost rhymes. :-) Digitante 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]

Door opens.

INT. DAY - BABA YAGA'S AUTOMOBILE WORKSHOP

BABA YAGA -- a skinny elderly woman with gray hair, hooked nose, and black eyebrows -- sits at the table with a laptop computer. In the corner near the door hangs a black raincoat -- the one she wore in the laboratory ruins. IVAN enters the room. The raincoat hangs behind his back, so he does not notice it.

IVAN

Good day, Baba Yaga, aka "The Bone Leg". I need you to give me a ride that will leave Koshchei's BelAZ in the dust.

[Do you want him to actually say "A.K.A."="AY-KAY-AY"? Also, this is a very abrupt request. Can Ivan really address Baba-Yaga this way? The word "overtake", BTW, always means "to catch up with from behind", not just "go faster than", so it'd be confusing here, since we know Ivan wants to run _away_ from Koshchei, not catch him. Digitante 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]

[In Russian "aka" sounds well, maybe replace it with "known as" in English version? --KonstantinDmitriev 07:46, 19 March 2010 (UTC)]

[To me it sounds good with "aka". Or he could say just Baba Yaga, The Bone Leg"" - --User:JuliaVelkova 17:21, 1 Aug 2012 (CET)]

BABA YAGA

To outrun Koshchei the Immortal, you say? Come with me.

The door is opening, showing a dark corridor. BABA-YAGA goes inward, IVAN makes several steps and freezes: ROBOTS, similar to KOSHCHEI, stand all along the corridor.

BABA YAGA

Don't be afraid, follow me.

IVAN

For a moment... it seemed like... like they were alive.

He goes after BABA YAGA.

BABA YAGA

(chuckles/grins)

What you are saying, sweetie, a machine can't be alive...

(she coughs and adds quietly after a pause)

...without a human.

[Options for what she calls Ivan "honey"/"sweetie"/"dearie": "honey" is more like she's being fresh with an attractive young man; "sweetie" sounds like she's talking affectionately to a child (more genuine); "dearie" is what witches usually say in fairytales when they're pretending to be nice (but is rarely used in life) -- which makes it a little threatening or insincere. I don't know which feeling you want. Digitante 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]

[Then "sweetie" is fine. --KonstantinDmitriev 07:46, 19 March 2010 (UTC)]

IVAN

(looks around)

But... how did all these come to be here?

BABA YAGA, ignoring the question, approaches a door.

BABA YAGA

You're surely going to need a fast ride for that, aren't you?

[This is strays a bit from the literal, but I think it conveys the feeling better than literally saying "the fastest ride". Using "surely" instead of "sure" is grammatically more correct, but less common. It sounds a little bit "Southern" or "hick" to me, but it's exactly like I expect an old lady to talk. Digitante 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]

IVAN

The car and myself -- that's all I can count on.

Dark screen. The garage door rises up, the silhouettes of BABA YAGA and IVAN are visible against the bright light of the background. IVAN's eyes grow wide.

IVAN

(shocked)

Oh my God...

Final escape

EXT. DAY - HIGHWAY

IVAN drives a ZAPOROZHETS along the road.

[It matters little what we call it -- it's a virtual prop and we need to note it. Let's just be consistent Digitante 18:53, 26 April 2010 (UTC)] [We could also replace Zaporozhets with "an old soviet car" so that everyone understands the joke with driving such a zaporozhets? User:JuliaVelkova ]

EXT. DAY - BRIDGE TO THE BUYAN ISLAND

A luxurious car drives up. The GENERAL and his security guys step out of it. A COMMANDER approaches and reports something to them.

IVAN approaches in the ZAPOROZHETS, crashes through the barricades, and continues driving across the bridge. Everyone watches silently, mouths hanging open.

GENERAL

(astonished)

What was that?

COMMANDER

I… I…

GENERAL

It was him! Blow it now! Don't let anyone off that island!

EXT. DAY - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS

IVAN drives up to KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS. He says something over the telephone, then gets out of the car.

INT. DAY - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER, UPPER ROOM

MOREVNA is kept behind an improvised barricade of furniture.

EXT. DAY - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS

IVAN throws with all his might a grenade into the window of the upper room of the central tower. There's an explosion.

KOSHCHEI passes by the window, the ceiling collapses directly onto his head, burying him. Only his feet remain visible, dangling in the air.

Tousled but contented, MOREVNA appears in the breach. Using her raincoat as parachute, she jumps out from the tower to the ground.

MOREVNA hugs IVAN.

MOREVNA

My God, how has this all happened?

IVAN

We should go now!

He takes her hand, they get into the car. IVAN presses the accelerator, and they leave.

KOSHCHEI gets out from under the heap of debris, shakes his fists, and rushes into the garage.

The Last Chase

EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND HIGHWAY

IVAN and MOREVNA'S ZAPOROSHETS rushes along the road. KOSHCHEI'S BELAZ overtakes them.

IVAN presses down on the accelerator, and the ZAPOROZHETS shoots ahead of KOSHCHEI'S BELAZ moving twice as fast as before.

KOSHCHEI

What???

KOSHCHEI activates nitro starting-lever and also increases speed.

[Gearheads just say "nitro". I thought it stood for "nitro-glycerin", not "nitrogen", but I admit I don't know much about it. Digitante 19:11, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

The bridge can be discerned in the distance.

EXT. DAY - BRIDGE TO BUYAN ISLAND

GENERAL: Blow it now!

The explosive detonates. The bridge explodes first, then the explosions start to disperse from the both sides of the bridge to the island landing.

EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND HIGHWAY

IVAN

(frightened)

My God! The bridge...

MOREVNA raises her head.

IVAN

We should brake! Pull up!

MOREVNA

Let me drive!

She attempts to reach the steering wheel.

IVAN

(in panic)

No!

MOREVNA

Trust me! Give me the wheel!

IVAN

I trust you but...

(cringing with shame and effort)

I need to tell you… It's all my fault! It was me who let Koshchei out! Me! It's me who has to fix this!

MOREVNA looks at him in surprise, then a soft smile appears on her face.

MOREVNA

I know. It's all your fault.

IVAN cringes even more and squeezes his teeth tighter. MOREVNA embraces his shoulders.

MOREVNA

But I am still with you. And I'm not going back. Not for anything!

[ She means that she don't want to return back to Koshchei. --KonstantinDmitriev 06:44, 1 May 2010 (UTC) ]

IVAN opens his eyes

MOREVNA

(continuing)

I'm with you, because I want to.

IVAN raises his head.

IVAN

(quietly, through tears)

So do I.

["I want it so much" would've been okay too. "With all my heart!" might be corny, but it's appropriate here. Digitante 19:11, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

[I recombined replicas a bit, because "with all my heart" suits Morevna better. What do you think? --KonstantinDmitriev 06:44, 1 May 2010 (UTC)]

[I think it is a bit cheesy with "all my heart" - which is also missing in the script... I think in the script Morevna is just determined, and I think "I'am with you, because I want to" expresses such a determination --JuliaVelkova 12:09, 2 Aug 2012 (UTC)]

MOREVNA

Then, together...

IVAN lets her and they together take the steering wheel. The car jumps off the edge of the broken bridge and falls into the abyss.

IVAN and MOREVNA

No-oooooo!!!!

Darkness.

Flashback

INT. DAY FLASHBACK - BABA-YAGA'S AUTO-SHOP

BABA-YAGA

You're certainly going to need the a fast car.

IVAN

Me and my car -- such is my only hope.

BABA-YAGA

That's where... you are totally wrong!

Battle

EXT. DAY - BRIDGE TO BUYAN ISLAND

The ZAPOROZHETS falls from the bridge. Suddenly, two white wings, like the wings of a bird, slide out from it. The ZAPOROZHETS rockets upwards and flies to the other end of the bridge. When the car is about to land, its lower part transforms into legs. The ZAPOROZHETS lands on its feet. In the passenger compartment, we see the legs and arms of IVAN and MOREVNA, sticking up -- they fell out of their seats during the landing. The car stands motionlessly, for a couple of seconds, then it continues the transformation -- one by one, two hands appear from the upper part of the car, the cabin moves back to the horizontal position and transforms into the control cab.

KOSHCHEI brakes sharply. His BELAZ is slightly swerved to the side and the car stops on the opposite end of the bridge. Explosions start all over Buyan Island, and it starts to sink into the sea. A shroud of fire hides the BELAZ from sight.

All of the soldiers, including the General, goggle in a deep amazement at the robot towering above them.

IVAN

(looks around rejoicing)

Holy mare! How... how could this all...

[No one says "holy mare". Digitante 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)] ["Святая кобыла" is exactly the phrase no one says in real world. It's an artificial idiom of a person from an artificial/alternative world, the world which combines the traits of ancient/fairy-tale Russia (mare) and modern days. AFAICT.Liv] [Okay, if it's supposed to be strange, then it's fine. :-) Digitante 01:34, 29 April 2010 (UTC)]

MOREVNA throws her arms around IVAN's neck.

MOREVNA

We did it!

The hoop round IVAN's head cracks and breaks into pieces. Now it's just a normal head. MOREVNA caresses IVAN's cheek.

[Should note for artwork -- is he completely back to normal, or did the hoop just go away? (e.g. what about the prosthetic eye?) Digitante 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

[Yes, eye goes back to normal too. But not his arm and leg unfortunately. --KonstantinDmitriev 08:05, 1 May 2010 (UTC)]

GENERAL

(shocked)

This… is our number one target!

(he shouts)

Fire! Destroy them!

[Other choices for "number one target": "primary target", "prime target"? Digitante 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

[Looks like "number one" fits perfectly. --KonstantinDmitriev 08:05, 1 May 2010 (UTC)]

Soldiers start shooting at the robot. IVAN tries pulling different levers, but nothing happens -- the machine remains motionless.

IVAN

What? What's going on?

Suddenly the shooting stops, because through the shroud fire on the island appears KOSHCHEI, frightfully burnt and terribly infuriated. He approaches quickly. A glow appears around the robot containing IVAN and MOREVNA, and the robot rockets into the sky, its transformation continuing -- the seat beneath IVAN lifts up towards the head (of the robot), MOREVNA finds herself in the center part of the robot's body -- she spreads her arms, two bracelets clasp her thin wrists and she becomes the source of energy for the robot.

In the cab, the control panel in front of IVAN turns on by itself (starts glowing), IVAN grabs the levers and rushes towards KOSHCHEI. The battle begins.

Simultaneously, as IVAN fights KOSHCHEI, MOREVNA is having a conversation inside herself.

INT. BLACKNESS

In the complete darkness hangs the illuminated figure of MOREVNA in the same pose she was in the center of the robot's body.

MAN-IN-BLACK

(off-camera)

Finally. You did call me?

MOREVNA

Yes.

EXT. DAY - NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE

The fierce battle between KOSHCHEI and IVAN continues. The soldiers are watching, not daring to interfere.

INT. BLACKNESS

MAN-IN-BLACK

(off-camera)

What do you want?

MOREVNA

I am guilty.

MAN-IN-BLACK

(off-camera, slightly sarcastically)

Oh, really?

MOREVNA

So many people were seriously injured and even killed. How many more are to suffer? And... is one single life worth this sacrifice?

Flashbacks of IVAN's smashed car, flashbacks of Koshchei's battle with the helicopters.

MAN-IN-BLACK

(off-camera)

Is it that bad to want to live?

MOREVNA

I simply did not want to die.

The MAN-IN-BLACK appears from the darkness.

MAN-IN-BLACK

You do know the cost of our encounter?

["encounter" could be "meeting" if you prefer. "Encounter" is a little more formal, "meeting" more colloquial. Either makes sense. Digitante 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

MOREVNA

Yes.

MAN-IN-BLACK

You do not want to live anymore?

EXT. DAY - NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE

KOSHCHEI fights with more confidence than IVAN. His strokes are more sharp and he hits perfectly, but IVAN fights back with unrelaxing energy.

INT. BLACKNESS

MOREVNA

There are mistakes, that, once you make them, stay with you your whole life.

They can't be forgiven, because you can't ever forgive yourself.

But at some point you stop regretting them, because they made you who you are now. One day you realize those mistakes and realizing that there's no way to fix them and you have to live with them for the whole rest of your life... it makes you a different person.

[Liv: Still, Morevna DO regret she have _done_ (because she feeling guilty), but DON'T regret she _have_them_ (because she accepted herself as she is). --KonstantinDmitriev]

[Yeah, that was tough. Translated somewhat liberally. Digitante 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

[I did few edits. Probably they are not correct English, but is closer to original idea. This phrase is very important for the whole movie. --KonstantinDmitriev 08:05, 1 May 2010 (UTC) ]

[I think the translation is as good as it can be. Just the very last sentence feels a bit heavy, but not sure if it can be changed, and how...--JuliaVelkova 12_24, 2 Aug 2012 (UTC) ]

EXT. DAY - NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE

KOSHCHEI is standing at the edge, IVAN rushes towards him, ready to strike. At the last moment, KOSHCHEI dodges and stabs IVAN's robot in the back.

INT. BLACKNESS

MOREVNA

I have no right to ask for forgiveness -- I hardly can be forgiven. But I've got a chance.

The way it came out, I saw enough bright moments in my life not to consider it useless or senseless. Even more -- I was happy. Happy in the way I wanted to be. Not everyone has that kind of luck. I can't understand how I earned that, I probably don't deserve it at all. I am so grateful for this life.

MAN-IN-BLACK listens attentively.

[ I've liked FELLOW-IN-BLACK much more--Liv ]

[ No matter how we mention him in screenplay - he's never called by name in dialog. --KonstantinDmitriev ]

["Fellow" just isn't in common use anymore. It's becoming archaic. People in the 1950s used it, but today people would probably say "guy" (this was "человек" in Russian? [No-guy is парень in Russian JuliaVelkova 12:27, 2 Aug, 2012 (UTC) )]. The phrase "Man in black" has some history. It conjures up a picture of a government agent in a black suit or of a preacher in a black suit with a roman collar (or no collar). Johnny Cash (a singer) was called "the Man in Black" because he always used to dress that way. The alien-fighting organization in a popular comic sci-fi film were the "men in black". But in the end, I mostly just want it to be consistent throughout the script. Digitante 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

MOREVNA

(tosses her head looking right at the MAN-IN-BLACK)

Now I madly want to live. But I'm ready to die.

MAN-IN-BLACK

For him?

EXT. NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE THE DAY

KOSHCHEI puts his foot on the body of the devastated robot, preventing it from rising, and lifts his hand for the final stroke.

INT. BLACKNESS

MOREVNA

For him.

MAN-IN-BLACK

Then let it be.

The MAN-IN-BLACK stretches his hand into MOREVNA's body and takes out a needle. MOREVNA yells as if being pricked, but in the next moment, a peaceful expression appears on her face.

EXT. DAY - NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE

At that very moment an enormous sword, remarkably resembling the needle, appears in the hands of IVAN's robot. IVAN pierces KOSHCHEI's body with this sword. For a couple of seconds, KOSHCHEI stands still not getting what has just happened, then the light of his eyes dies out and he falls from the edge into the water.

He drowns and his eyes are now closed forever.

Everyone looks down in astonishment.

IVAN'S ROBOT freezes motionless as there is no vital energy feeding him. IVAN gets out from the robot.

IVAN

Yes! We've won! You see? We've done it!

IVAN sees the lifeless body of MOREVNA, he stands dead in his tracks, the words stick in his throat. Abruptly he rushes to the robot and drags out MOREVNA's body. He puts her on the ground and presses his ear against her breast. People start gathering around him. Among them is PAYLAT.

[I assume you've noticed that "PAYLAT" sounds almost exactly like "pilot" in English. Digitante 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

IVAN

(finally forcing himself to speak)

How?

Again he presses his ear against MOREVNA's breast, and he takes her hand, attempting to palp the pulse. He looks into her face.

IVAN

But you've... We've...

(he gushes in tears pressing his head against MOREVNA's body)

The soldiers have surrounded IVAN. They stand feeling uncomfortable, exchanging glances and a mixed expression of confusion, guilt, and regret appears on their faces. Some of them look around awkwardly, some cast their eyes into the ground. IVAN's howl of desperation is heard from the center of the crowd.

IVAN lies cuddling up to MOREVNA's breast, he cries and he cannot stop crying.

MOREVNA's eyes open. She sees the sky high above -- exactly the same view seen previously by IVAN. She hears, as if from a distance, IVAN's crying. She puts her hand on IVAN's head and caresses his hair.

IVAN ceases sobbing. He raises himself (on his elbow?). And abruptly gets to his feet screaming and springs aside either in horror or in surprise.

IVAN

Aaaa-ah!

MOREVNA raises up on her elbow and looks around rubbing her head.

MOREVNA

(puzzled)

But why?

IVAN, having finally gotten a grip on himself after the repeated shock, rushes to MOREVNA, clasps her, turns her, and finally sinks together with her to the ground, embracing her tenderly.

The MAN-IN-BLACK passes by behind people's back.

MAN-IN-BLACK

Who do they think they are?

(with a light grin)

They think it's up to them to decide when it's time and when it's not.

MAN-IN-BLACK leaves.

MOREVNA:

Dear me, I am so happy!

And... I do not understand.

(she smiles)

IVAN

(he caresses her cheek)

Neither do I. But it's not important anymore.

They rise to their feet, watching as the remains of BUYAN ISLAND sinks into the water.

[I simply note in passing that actual islands do not, in fact, sink, no matter how much you bomb them. Digitante 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

Then they turn around and pass through the crowd of people which parts to let them pass. They go to the car parked nearby, in which the GENERAL arrived earlier.

GENERAL

Stop them! These people are enemies of the state!

The soldiers do not move. Then they start breaking up slowly in various directions.

PAYLAT

Ivan!

IVAN turns around. PAYLAT throws him the keys.

GENERAL

(in impotent rage, spitting mad)

You have just betrayed your Motherland!

IVAN and MOREVNA get into the car.

PAYLAT

(turns around)

Hey, looks like you see no difference.

"I so love my Motherland, but I hate the state."

[ It's far from literal translations, but gives the right idea very good. This is a quote "Я так люблю свою страну, и ненавижу государство". --KonstantinDmitriev 15:36, 24 April 2010 (UTC) ]

[There's nothing wrong with your "so much" version, but I put this back to something a little closer to the literal translation. "so + verb" occurs in English poetry. The best example is probably from the Bible: "For God so loved the world that he sent his only Son..." It's also used in colloquial expressions (California dialect) as in "I am _so_ loving this". Digitante 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]

IVAN

(looks attentively into General's eyes)

General...

(pause)

Go home to children.

General stands motionless moving his lower jaw silently, unable to force a word. A strange lost expression appears in his eyes. Behind his back, his soldiers are leaving in various directions.

MOREVNA

It's time for us...

They exchange glances.

IVAN

(starts the engine and leans back into the driver's seat)

Yes, time to go home.

IVAN pushes the throttle and they take off.

THE END

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Contents

Intro

Nazar's Visit

On the Road

Meeting Marya Morevna

Morevna's departure

Return of Koshchei The Deathless

A State Meeting

At the Old Ruins

Morevna's Flashback

Encounter at the old ruins

Sister-Doctor and The Little Sparrow

The Map

Crossing the bridge

First escape

First chase

Blow'em up

Second escape

Second chase

Revival

Despair

The Man in Black

Baba Yaga's automobile workshop

Final escape

The Last Chase

Flashback

Battle

Navigation menu

Page actions

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Personal tools

Navigation

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 EXT. IVAN'S HOUSE – DAY - ESTABLISHING
-Ivan's house is a small wooden building. Smoke coming out from the pipe on the roof.
+Ivan's home (log cabin). Rings of smoke come from the chimney  on the roof.
-INT. IVAN'S ROOM – DAY
+INT. IVAN'S HOUSE - IVAN'S ROOM – DAY
-IVAN, 18, sits in front of a computer, facing the camera. He wears a white jacket and light-colored jeans. Under the jacket is a green sweater.
+IVAN, 21, a red-haired guy is sitting at the table in front of a computer. Camera view is set as if the viewer is looking at him from a computer screen. IVAN is wearing a white jacket and light-colored jeans. A blue T-shirt is visible under the jacket.
 :::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+:: Once upon a time there lived a Tsarevich, named Ivan, who had three sisters. One sister was a mechanic, the other a doctor, and the third was a priestess.
-:: Once upon a time there lived a Tsarevich, named Ivan, who had three sisters. One sister was mechanic, the other a doctor and the third a priestess.
+First, the MECHANIC-SISTER, 22, runs behind IVAN's back carrying a wrench. Then the DOCTOR-SISTER, 24, runs through the room with  a first aid kit. Finally, PRIESTESS-SISTER, 28 slowly passes through deeply immersed in some magical book.
-SISTER-MECHANIC, 19, runs by behind Ivan, carrying a wrench. Then SISTER-DOCTOR, 21, runs through the room with the first aid kit. Finally, SISTER-PRIESTES, 23, slowly passes through, reading some magical book.
+:::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+:: On one beautiful sunny day a terrible thunder was heard, the wall split in two, and a car crashed into their house.
-:::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+The sun, seen through the window, gets hidden behind dark clouds.  A thunder occurs followed by a sound of crash, the ground starts shaking and pieces of plaster fall from the ceiling. IVAN turns his head to the left towards the source of the noise. MECHANIC-SISTER and PRIESTESS-SISTER run past in the same direction.
-:: One beautiful sunny day a terrible clap of thunder sounded, the wall split in two and a car crashed into their house.
+INT. IVAN'S HOUSE -  DOCTOR-SISTER'S ROOM - DAY
-The sun, seen out of the window, is covered by clouds. There is a thundering sound of a crash. The ground shakes, pieces of plaster fall from the ceiling. Ivan turns his head towards the source of the noise. Sister-Mechanic and Sister-Priestess run past in the same direction.
+A car with a broken front window sticks out of one of the room's walls. There is a person lying on the floor – the BUSINESSMAN - who has been thrown out of the car. DOCTOR-SISTER is leaning over him.
-INT. SISTER-DOCTOR'S ROOM – DAY
+:::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+:: A handsome young man appeared from the car.He took one of Ivan's sisters as his wife, and left with her to where he came from.
-A car with a broken windshield sticks out of one of the room's walls. Someone lies on the floor – a BUSINESSMAN - who seems to have been thrown out of the car as result of collision. Sister-Doctor is leaning over the Businessman.
+DOCTOR-SISTER injects something into the BUSINESSMAN, he jumps up  and invites her with a gesture to sit in the car. DOCTOR-SISTER gets in the car and they leave together.
 :::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+:: Ivan was left with only two of his sisters.
-:: A handsome young man was thrown from the car. He took one sister as his wife and returned to where he came from.
+IVAN and the two sisters are repairing the wall.
-Sister-Doctor gives the Businessman an injection. Businessman springs to his feet and with a gesture invites Sister-Doctor to sit in the car. Sister-Doctor enters the car and they leave together.
 :::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+:: Time passed. Then once again, the wall split in two, and another car crashed into their house.
-:: Ivan was left with the two sisters.
+Another car crashes into the opposite wall of the same room. From the front window of the car flies out the RAPPER. IVAN and the MECHANIC-SISTER step back in panic, while only  PRIESTESS-SISTER remains in place.
-Ivan and two sisters are rebuilding the broken wall.
+:::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+:: A handsome young rapper appeared from the car. He took the oldest sister as his wife, and left with her to where he came from.
-::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+The RAPPER jumps from the floor  in a break-dance style, runs towards IVAN, shakes cordially his hand, tells him something and points to the PRIESTESS-SISTER. She blushes. The RAPPER and the PRIESTESS-SISTER, hand in hand, get in the car and leave.
-:: Time passed. Then the wall split in two again after another car crashed into their house.
+INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – MECHANIC-SISTER'S BEDROOM  – MORNING
-Another car crashes into the opposite wall in the same room. From the car, breaking the windscreen, flies RAPPER. Ivan and Sister-Mechanic recoil, but Sister-Priestess stays in place.
+The sunrise is seen through the window. MECHANIC-SISTER is sleeping in her bed.
 :::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+:: A month passed and then Raven - the brave guy - crashed into their house with his car. He wore leather. A rocker so to say.
-:: A handsome rapper–young-man was thrown from the car. He took the younger sister as his wife, and left to where he came from.
+A car crashes into the wall. But nobody gets thrown out of it. The MECHANIC-SISTER wakes up and screams while trying to cover herself with a bedsheet. The  ROCKER inside of the car unfastens his seatbelt, turns off the car audio (no music is heard but one could see the peaks on the screen in the car) and steps out from the car. He stands right in front of the MECHANIC-SISTER and smiles.
-Rapper, springs from floor to his feet in a break-dance style. Then he runs to Ivan, shakes his hand, tells him something and points to the Sister-Priestess. She blushes. Rapper and Sister-Priestess, hand in hand, get into the car and leave.
+A door bursts open and IVAN appears at the doorstep. In a flash moment, the MECHANIC-SISTER turns to him. Then she gets enraged. She powerfully hits the ROCKER with a wrench that was hidden beneath her pillow (yes, indeed, she sleeps with a wrench under her pillow). The ROCKER gets knocked-out. MECHANIC-SISTER flings her working jacket on her nighty, drags his unconscious body into the car and takes off.
-INT. SISTER-MECHANIC'S ROOM – MORNING
+:::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+:: He took the last sister as his wife.
-The sun is seen rising up, through the window. Sister-Mechanic is sleeping in her bed.
+The camera shows a wall with photos from Ivan's sisters' weddings. He stares at them, then sighs, turns around and walks off, scratching his head.
 :::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+:: Ivan was left alone. Soon he felt miserable, but nothing could be done about it.
-:: A month passed by and then a Raven – handsome young man -  crashed into their house in his car. He was dressed in a leather like a rocker.
+= Nazar's Visit =
-A car crashes into a wall from outside and breaks through it. But no one flies out. Sister-Mechanic wakes up and shrieks, trying to cover herself with a bedsheet. ROCKER unfastens his seatbelt, turns off the car audio and steps out from the car.
-He stands right in front of the Sister-Mechanic and smiles.
-A door bursts open and Ivan appears on the doorstep. In a flash, Sister-Mechanic turns to him and becomes angry. She kicks the Rocker with a wrench that was hidden beneath a pillow. Rocker is out like a light. Then she flings her jacket right over her nightgown, drags his unconscious body to the car and takes off.
-:::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+INT.  IVAN'S HOUSE - BASEMENT – DAY
-:: He took the last sister.
+IVAN is in front of the computer chatting in Jabber.  On the table besides him there is a glass with an unknown liquid substance.
-Ivan stands looking at the wall with a photo of his sisters' weddings. Then he sighs, turns around and walks off, scratching his head.
+EXT. THE ROAD TO IVAN'S HOUSE – DAY
-:::: NARRATOR (V.O.)
+Semi-truck with a trailer rides the road, heading to the Ivan's house. Camera shows the side view of the front wheels.
-:: So Ivan is left alone. Soon he felt miserable, but nothing could be done about it.
+INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT – DAY
-= Visit of Nazar =
+Ivan keeps chatting.
-INT. IVAN'S HOUSE UNDERGROUND FLOOR – DAY
+The camera follows the road, side view, The truck with the trailer overtakes the camera. The trailer is notably big. The emblem on the back of it reads “M2 Motors”.
-Ivan sits in front of his computer and chats. There is a glass full of some liquid on the table near him.
+INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT – DAY
-EXT. ROAD TO IVAN'S HOME – DAY
+The camera shows Ivan from the side. The lower part of Ivan's face, as well as his hands typing on the keyboard are in focus. The liquid substance in the glass suddenly shakes. Ivan stops typing abruptly.
-Semi-truck with trailer appears on the road. Truck is heading right to the Ivan's house. An emblem on the trailer reads: “M2 Motors”.
+EXT. THE ROAD TO IVAN'S HOUSE – DAY
-INT. IVAN'S HOUSE UNDERGROUND FLOOR – DAY
+This time the camera shows the back wheels of the truck. They crash and throw asides dirt and garbage from the road.
-Vibration running through liquid in a glass. Ivan suddenly stops typing. He turns around and look behind. His eyes narrowed like in suspicion.
+INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT – DAY
-EXT. ROAD TO IVAN'S HOME – DAY
+Ivan stops typing and looks behind his back towards the viewer.  His eyes narrow with suspicion.
-The Truck is coming closer to the house. Its speed is not decreasing.
+EXT. THE ROAD TO IVAN'S HOUSE – DAY
-INT. IVAN'S HOUSE UNDEERGROUND FLOOR – DAY
+The truck appears from the nearest hill. The air on the horizon trembles. The noise from the truck engine increases.
-Ivan jumps out of his chair and runs upstairs to the outside.
+INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT – DAY
-EXT. IVAN'S HOUSE YARD - DAY
+Ivan jumps abruptly away from the computer pushing away his chair in such a way as if he is running away from death. He runs upstairs. The viewer can now see that he has been wearing only boxers.
-Ivan stands right in front of the house. He is facing the coming trailer and it seems, trying to shield his home with his body.
+EXT. IVAN'S HOUSE – YARD - DAY
+IVAN runs out of the house and stops in front of the door, placing his arms apart as if trying to shield the house behind him.
 :::: IVAN
 ::: (desperately waving hands)
 :: No-o-o-o! No-o-o-o!!!
-Screech of brakes. The Truck stops right in front of Ivan, pinning him to the house's wall. Ivan pants, his face covered with sweat. NAZAR THE BRAVE, 26, jumps out of the truck's cabin. He takes several steps forward, examining the surroundings.
+Screech of brakes. The truck stops right in front of IVAN, almost pinning him to the wall of the house . IVAN breaths heavily he is sweating with cold cold sweat. NAZAR (Nazar Brave), 26, jumps out of the truck's cabin. He takes several steps forward examining the surroundings.
 :::: IVAN
+::: (frightened)
-::: (timidly)
 :: Um... There is no one else left here!
-:::: NAZAR THE BRAVE
+:::: NAZAR BRAVE
-:: Don't panic, Ivan-tsarevich, it is you that I'm looking for.
+:: Don't panic Ivan Tsarevich, it is you that I'm looking for!
-Ivan is in a panic.
+IVAN panics.
-:::: NAZAR THE BRAVE (CONT'D)
+:::: NAZAR BRAVE
+::: (continuing)
-:: I was sent by my sister – the beautiful queen Marya Morevna. She want to meet you, Ivan Tsarevich. Come now.
+:: I was sent by my sister –  Marya Morevna the Beautiful Queen. She wants to meet you, Ivan Tsarevich. Go immediately.
 :::: IVAN
 ::: (still shocked)
 :: But how?
-Ivan Nazar stand, in front of the door to the trailer, their backs to the camera. The door slowly opens. There is a cool shiny sports car inside. Ivan stands motionless, awed by the sight. Then Nazar grabs his attention by jiggling a keyring in his hand. Ivan looks at the keys.
+IVAN and NAZAR stand in front of the door to the trailer of the truck, their backs to the camera. The door is opening slowly. There is a cool shiny sports car inside.  IVAN stands motionless, awed by the sight. Then NAZAR attracts Ivan's attention back by jiggling with a keyring in his hand. IVAN looks at the keys.
-INT. IVAN'S HOUSE UNDERGROUND FLOOR – DAY
+INT. IVAN'S HOUSE – BASEMENT -  DAY
-Computer is still turned on. There is a text “Fedora Home” on the desktop. A “New message” icon flashes in the tray. There are a few windows opened. One of them is a chat window containing the text:
+The room with the computer. The computer is still turned on. A lamp blinks. The camera zooms the screen. The text “Fedora Home” can be read on the desktop. A “New message” icon is flashing in the tray. In a few moments, the flashing window with the messages appears on the screen. The text reads:
 <pre>
-(11:12:32) TSAREVICH: moreover, this modification in suspension bracket will decrease whole system stability.
+(11:12:32) TSAREVICH: Moreover, this modification in the suspension bracket will decrease the stability of the whole system
-(11:13:00) М^2: Hey, you definitely should work on us! We need professionals like you.
+(11:13:00) М^2: Hey, maybe you can come and look at this by yourself? Then we could discuss all details with you in person.
 (11:13:12) * Personal vCard received from M^2*
-(11:13:18) TSAREVICH: Sounds interesting, but looks too far for me...
+(11:13:18) TSAREVICH: Sounds interesting, but it looks like it's too far for me...
-(11:14:40) М^2: Has my brother arrived there yet? ;)
+(11:14:40) М^2: Has my brother arrived there yet? ;)
 </pre>
-A text appearing on the screen: “File with new location received”. Then screen goes black and then progress bar appears with the text: “Loading...”
+At the bottom of the screen appears a text: “File with new location received”. Then the screen goes black and instead appears a progress bar with the text: “Loading...”
-= Titles =
+= On the Road =
 EXT. DAY - HIGHWAY
-Ivan drives his new car down the highway. The car's stereo is turned up to full volume. The sun sets and rises a few times.
+IVAN drives his new car down the highway. The car's stereo is turned up to full volume. The sun sets and rises a few times.
+The main credits are displayed over this.
 = Meeting Marya Morevna =
-EXT. ABANDONED TOWN – DAY
+EXT. TOWN STREET - DAY
-The road passes through the hills on the outskirts of a city. Along the road stands a fence covered with graffiti. Beyond the fence, an advertisement board is attached on a tall framework.
-By all appearances, a war/shooting recently occurred there - buildings nearby are damaged by explosions, some are destroyed. The road is covered by bodies of people in military uniforms, wrecks of motorcycles and other machinery, various street weapons... Here and there signs of grenade explosions are visible. Amidst the junk lying on the ground there are [pistols], machine guns, and various other weapons, but they were all destroyed or deformed by some unknown force. One tommy-gun lies crushed by someone's foot as if it was made from a foil. There are also street-fighting weapons – debris, clubs, metal pipes, chains and hammers.
+Silent and lonely town. By all appearances, a battle recently occurred there - buildings nearby are damaged by explosions, some are destroyed. The road is covered with bodies of people in military uniforms, wrecks of motorcycles, and other machines, various street weapons... Here and there, signs of grenade explosions are visible. Amidst the junk lying on the ground there are pistols, machine guns, and various other weapons, but they have all been destroyed or deformed by some unknown force. One tommy-gun lies crushed by someone's foot as if it were made of tin foil. There are also street-fighting weapons – debris, clubs, metal pipes, chains, and hammers.
-Ivan's car approaches. He can't drive any further because otherwise he will have to run over the bodies. Ivan gets out of the car and looks around in a daze. Then he closes the car door. A sound indicates that the car alarm system is turned on. Ivan carefully starts to go forward. His foot accidentally touches a bat on the ground. The bat rolls aside and stop near laying soldier.
+IVAN'S CAR approaches. He can't drive any further because he would otherwise need to drive on the lying bodies.  IVAN gets out of the car and looks around in a daze. He closes the car door, and the alarm is set (a sound indicates that). IVAN starts to walk forward very carefully. His foot accidentally touches a bat on the ground. The bat rolls aside with a typical sound and stops near a soldier lying on the ground.
-Ivan goes through the smoking remains and bodies.
-Hand of a soldier near the bat begins to move.
+IVAN walks, looking around among the smoking remains and bodies lying on the ground.
+The hand of the soldier lying near the bat starts to move unconfidently.
-There is a small rise at the road nearby. A gorgeous bike is at the top. Ivan starts climbing up to see that the bodies of soldiers form a circle around the body of a girl leaning across the bike – MARYA MOREVNA, 21. She sits on the ground, leaning her back against the bike. She has violet hair and wears a long black cape and high-platform boots. A strange amulet, part of which is broken, is tied on a cord around her neck.
+IVAN notices that there is a small rise at the road nearby on top of which there is a gorgeous motorbike. IVAN starts climbing upwards. Once on the top, he can see that the bodies of soldiers form a circle around the body of a girl leaning across the bike – MOREVNA (Marya Morevna, 26). She is lying unconsciously  on the ground, leaning her back against the bike. She has violet hair and wears a long black cape and high-platform boots. A strange amulet, part of which is broken, is tied on a cord around her neck.
-Ivan jumps to her side, shakes her shoulders.
+IVAN jumps towards her side, and shakes her shoulders.
 :::: IVAN
 :: Hey! Wake up! Are you alive?
-Ivan turns around, looking for help.
+IVAN turns around, looking for help.
 :::: IVAN
-:: Anyo-o-one! Is there is any one alive here?!
+:: Anyo-o-one! Is there is anyone alive here?!
-Ivan breaks off a rear-view mirror from the motorcycle and, after wiping it against his clothing, brings it to the girl's face. The mirror barely clouds from her breath.
-Ivan wipes the perspiration from his forehead, drops the mirror, carefully takes girl in his arms. He lifts her and as he turns, we see the logo of “M^2 motors” on her coat.
-Ivan bears Marya Morevna to his car. The girl's hand hangs down lifelessly. A katana, attached to her waist with some belts, drags along the ground behind her.
+IVAN breaks off one of the  rear-view mirrors from the motorcycle, and after wiping it against his clothing, brings it to the girl's face. The mirror barely clouds from her breath.
+IVAN wipes the sweat from his forehead, drops the mirror, and carefully takes the girl in his arms. He lifts her and as he turns, we see the logo of “M^2 Motors” on the back of her coat.
+IVAN bears MOREVNA to his car. The girl's hand hangs down lifelessly. A katana, attached with some belts to her waist drags along on the ground.
-Ivan stops at the foot of hill. The threatening group of people form and bars the way. Apparently, they were lying on the ground until now, and have just come to. Although they are in uniform, they more resemble bandits, than soldiers. THE GENERAL stands out from them. He has a fresh bruise under one eye. The rest also appear completely rumpled.
+A few meters before the car IVAN stops. A threatening group of people in soldier uniforms blocks their way. It seems as if they have been lying on the ground until now but have suddenly awaken.  and have just come to. Despite that they are in uniform their appearance resembles more of bandits rather than soldiers. One man stands out of the group - the GENERAL. He has a fresh bruise under his eye. The rest of the group  also appears quite rumpled.
 :::: GENERAL
-:: Stop, Sir, if you value your life.
+:: Do not move, boy, if you value your life.
-Ivan keeps silent, not knowing what to say. He takes the view in. The band are armed with weapons they had just picked up. Stressed pause. Soldiers stand still, holding weapons in their hands.
+IVAN keeps silent, not knowing what to say. He examines the gang. It is armed with weapons they had just picked up from the ground.  A moment of embarrassing silence.  The SOLDIERS stand still, holding the weapons in their hands.
 :::: GENERAL
-:: Return her to us.
+:: Give her to us.
 :::: IVAN
 ::: (surprised/wonderingly)
-:: Why is that?
+:: Why should I do that?
 :::: GENERAL
-:: All this mighty force
+::All this mighty force...
 ::: (gesturing with his hand)
-:: was slain by Marya Morevna aka the Beautiful Queen. We wanted to blow up her reign, but luck was not on our side.
+:: ...was slain by Marya Morevna aka the 'Beautiful Queen'. We wanted to sabotage her kingdom, but luck was not on our side.
-Ivan looks at the girl, who lies in his arms, with surprise. He recalls the “M^2 Motors” logo on her back. He looks at the soldiers. His eyes meet with the eyes of General. Ivan sighs, he lowers his eyes and carefully places Marya Morevna on the ground.
-The Soldiers relax a little. The General, with a creepy smirk on his face, steps forward. Suddenly, Ivan's hand picks up a pipe from the ground. Ivan steps in front of the crowd, shielding Morevna, who lies at some distance on the ground.
+IVAN looks surprised at the girl lying in his arms. He recalls the “M^2 Motors” logo on her back. He looks at the soldiers. His eyes meet with the eyes of the GENERAL. IVAN sighs,  lowers his eyes and carefully places MOREVNA on the ground.
+The SOLDIERS relax a little bit. The GENERAL, with a creepy smirk on his face steps forward. At the same moment IVAN picks up with his hand a pipe from the ground. IVAN steps in front of the crowd, shielding MOREVNA, who lies at some distance on the ground.
-:::: IVAN
+::::IVAN
-::: (his lips shaking)
+:::(his lips shaking)
-:: I do n... can not do that.
+::I cannot do that.
-General spits out viciously to one side.
+The GENERAL spits out viciously to one side.
 :::: GENERAL
 :: Son of a...
-The General makes a gesture and a very strong soldier moves forward - PAYLAT. Paylat approaches Ivan, heavily and smoothly, his steps making dull thumps as his feet hit the asphalt. Ivan squeezes the pipe in his hand. His other hand appears to be hold something in the fist.
+ The GENERAL makes a gesture and a strong soldier – PAYLAT - steps forward . PAYLAT approaches IVAN, slowly and threatening, his steps making dull thumps, his feet crack the asphalt. IVAN squeezes harder the pipe in his hand. His other hand  appears to be squeezing something in the fist.
+PAYLAT swings his bat. At the same moment IVAN activates the alarm of his car through the remote control hidden in his hand. The car behind the soldiers fires up its headlights and starts honking. The SOLDIERS turn around. PAYLAT gets also distracted for a short moment. IVAN seizes the chance, hits PAYLAT with the pipe in the hand knocking out the bat away to the side. IVAN quickly makes a step forward, ending up behind
-Paylat swings his cudgel. At this moment Ivan presses a button on his car remote, hidden in his hand. The car behind the soldiers fires up its headlights and honks its horn. The Soldiers turn around.  Paylat is also distracted for an instant. Ivan seizes the moment, hits Paylat in the hand and the cudgel flies away to the side. Ivan quickly makes a step forward, ending up behind the back of Paylat. He intends to hit Paylat in the knees from behind. But at this time he notices what one of the soldiers jumps, trying to grab him. Then Ivan sets foot back to the ground without kicking, and grabs Pilat by collar. Pilat, trying to catch Ivan, starts to turn, Ivan uses his motion to turn as well, such that once again he is behind Paylat. The jumping soldier flies by.
+PAYLAT's back. He intends to hit PAYLAT in the knees from behind. But at this moment he notices that one of the SOLDIERS is already approaching him jumping, trying to grab him. Without changing his position, IVAN puts his foot on the ground and grabs PAYLAT by the collar. In an effort to catch IVAN, PAYLAT starts turning around.  IVAN uses  turns around as well, in such a way that he  once again ends up behind PAYLAT. The jumping SOLDIER flies by.
-At the same time Ivan making a sudden movement by punching his fist right into the Pylat's face. Pylat tries to dodge back and falls. The two bodies fall at the same time - Paylat onto the ground and the jumping soldier into some garbage bins nearby.
+In the meantime IVAN makes a sudden movement, punching his fist right into PAYLAT's face. PAYLAT tries to dodge back and falls. The two bodies collapse at once on the ground– both PAYLAT's and  the jumping SOLDIER's  into some garbage bins nearby.
-Ivan lifts his hand from the ground, pinning Paylat's back with his knee. Ivan breathes heavily, his eyes wide open.  He cannot tear his eyes away from the prostrate enemy, not believing his success. Finally, he shifts his attention and sharply raises his head to the remaining crowd.
+IVAN presses the arm of PAYLAT pinning his back with his knee. IVAN breathes heavily, his eyes wide open. He cannot tear his eyes away from the prostrate enemy, not believing his luck. Finally, he shifts his attention and sharply raises his head to the remaining crowd.
 :::: IVAN
-:: Drop your weapons to the ground, and I won't break his arm...
+:: Drop your weapons to the ground or I will break his arm...
 ::: (he moves his knee from the back onto the neck)
 :: ...or his neck.
-Paylat looks up at the General. General raises an eyebrow. A strange contented smile appears on his face.
+PAYLAT looks up at the GENERAL. The GENERAL raises an eyebrow. A strange contented smile appears on his face.
 :::: GENERAL
 :: Take him.
-Soldiers carry out the order and they run to Ivan. Ivan looks at the General's smirk behind the crowd of the running soldiers. He lowers his eyes, the soldiers grab him, but he hads not yet done anything to Paylat.
+The SOLDIERS carry out the order and start running towards IVAN. IVAN looks at the GENERAL's smirk behind the crowd of the running SOLDIERS. He lowers his eyes and the SOLDIERS grab him without him managing to do anything to PAYLAT.
-Soldiers hold Ivan as they beat him, and the car remote control lays under their feet. They step on it as part of the rhythm of their impacts, and each time the car honks its horn sorrowfully. They do not pay it any attention.
-Ivan slips down to the ground and is dragged towards the General.
+The SOLDIERS hold IVAN as they beat him. The remote of the car is lying under their feet. They step on it as part of the rhythm of their impacts, and each time the car honks its horn sorrowfully. They do not pay it any attention.
-The General swings back for still one more punch, but a gust of wind blows by, and an unearthly ray of light illuminates his face (the reflection of the sun on Marya Morevna's katana). He raises his head upward and looks off in that direction. The remaining soldiers also turn around.
+IVAN slips down to the ground and is dragged to the GENERAL.
-Nearby Maria Morevna stands on her feet. Her raincoat and hair blow wildly in the wind. She holds a katana, tilting it to direct the reflected sunlight at face of General. The General's face is distorted by the expressions of distrust, spite and fear.
+The GENERAL swings back for one more punch, but a gust of wind blows by, and an unearthly ray of light illuminates his face - the reflection of the sun on MOREVNA's katana. He raises his head upwards and looks off in that direction. The remaining SOLDIERS also turn around.
+Nearby, MARYA MOREVNA stands on her feet. Her coat  and hair blow threatening in the wind. She holds a katana, tilting it to direct the reflected sunlight at the GENERAL. GENERAL's face is distorted by expressions of distrust, rage and fear.
-Top view of Ivan lying on the ground. The Soldiers leave his body and exit the screen as they rush off towards Maria Morevna, picking up weapons as they go. View pans smoothly back to lying Ivan.
+Top view of IVAN lying on the ground. The SOLDIERS leave his body and exit the screen as they rush off towards MOREVNA, picking up weapons as they go. The view pans smoothly back to IVAN, lying on the ground.
+IVAN looks at the sky. White fluffy clouds move on the blue sky. In front of the sky appears the inclined face of MARYA MOREVNA.
-Ivan looks into the sky. White fluffy clouds sail on the blue sky. In front of the sky appears the inclined face of Maria Morevna.
+:::: MOREVNA
-:::: MARIA MOREVNA
 :: What is your name?
-Cut to face of Ivan, with all his cuts and bruises, with wide smile.
+Cut to IVAN's face,  all covered with  cuts and bruises, but with a  smile of relief.
 :::: IVAN
-:: I am Ivan. Also known as “Tsarevich”.
+:: I am Ivan. The “Tsarevich” one.
-:::: MARIA MOREVNA
+:::: MOREVNA
-:: I know you then. I am Maria Morevna.
+:: I know you then. I'm Marya Morevna.
 :::: IVAN
 :: I know.
-:::: MARIA MOREVNA
+:::: MOREVNA
 ::: (laughs)
-:: That means we know each other!
+:: So, we we know each other!
-She gives him a hand. Ivan takes it and she helps him up.
-Ivan stands to his full height, covering the view of Maria Morevna. Morevna then moves onto the foreground, shoulder first, giving Ivan a smile.
-Ivan turns around; the two stand back-to-back. The camera circles around them, showing the soldiers getting up from the ground and starting to surround them.
+She gives him a hand. IVAN takes it and she helps him stand up.
-Fight begins. In the crowd Ivan only manages to dodge impacts, is finally hit and falls to the ground. At this moment Maria Morevna and blocks with her sword a blow aimed at Ivan. Ivan starts to stand up, but the crowd has encircled them. The bodies of people surround Maria Morevna and Ivan. Above the crowd flies the katana, hit out of her hands. In an instant their two bodies fly out of the crowd.
+IVAN stands to his full height, covering the view of MOREVNA. MOREVNA then moves forward  shoulder first, rewarding IVAN with a smile.
-Ivan and Maria Morevna fly in the air face up and parallel to each other. Time slows down as they turn their heads to each other. Morevna is surprised to see Ivan smiling at her.
+IVAN turns around; the two stand back-to-back. The camera circles around them, showing the soldiers getting up from the ground and  surrounding them. IVAN looks at them and flashbacks of the latest events appear to him – a picture of lifeless Morevna, leaning with her back on the motorcycle. IVAN sets his teeth.
-When they fall on the earth, Ivan uses inertia in order to rise immediately, not slowing his movements to give Morevna his hand. Ivan is pulling Morevna towards himself and they start to dance face-to-face amongst the soldiers, not forgetting to kick them off. As they dance they step on various objects under their feet, which, tossed up, fly to the sides and hit the bandits.
+The fight begins. In the crowd IVAN only manages to dodge a few of the hits before finally he is hit on the ground. At this moment MARYA MOREVNA jumps and blocks with her sword a blow aimed at IVAN. IVAN lifts up, but the crowd has encircled them. The bodies of the soldiers surround MOREVNA and IVAN. Above the crowd flies the katana, hit out of MOREVNA hands. At the next moment their two bodies fly out of the crowd.
-Morevna, not believing her eyes, looks at Ivan. The amulet on her neck starts to shine. Around them forms something like a vortex, which throws back the soldiers as it expands.
+IVAN and MOREVNA fly up into the air faces up  parallel to each other. Time slows down as they turn their heads to each other. MOREVNA sees with surprise that IVAN is smiling at her.
+When they fall back to the ground, IVAN uses his inertia in order to rise immediately and gives MOREVNA his hand not slowing down his movements. IVAN pulls MOREVNA towards himself and they start  dancing face-to-face amongst the soldiers, not forgetting to kick them off. As they dance they step on various objects under their feet, which, tossed up, fly to the sides and hit the bandits.
+MOREVNA, not believing her eyes, looks at IVAN who is hugging her towards himself. The amulet on her neck starts to shine. There forms something like a vortex around them, which throws back the SOLDIERS as it expands.
-The debris, pulled upward by the vortex, falls into advertising board attached on a tall framework, which immediately breaks apart into numerous pieces, which slowly begin to fall from the sky similar to rose petals.
+A wrack pulled upward by the vortex falls on the advertisement billboard which immediately breaks apart into a thousand pieces which  slowly falls down from the sky as rose petals.
+MOREVNA and IVAN remain alone among the devastated opponents. They keep dancing.
+Military helicopters with search lights appear from behind the roofs of the buildings. The searchlights focus on the "rose petals" circling in the air which as a result changes color, and illuminates everything around. Under these iridescent (rainbow) rays MOREVNA and IVAN continue dancing.
-Morevna and Ivan remain alone among the devastated opponents. The sun is already setting.
+One of the people, peering out from a helicopter.
-Military helicopters with the searchlights appear from behind the tops of buildings. The searchlights refract through the "petals" circling in the air, as a result acquiring color, and illuminating all around. Under these iridescent (rainbow) rays Morevna and Ivan continue to dance.
+:::: SOLDIER IN HELICOPTER
+::: (shouts)
+:: Fire!
-One of the people, peering out from a helicopter, shouts “fire!”
+MOREVNA and IVAN run, holding hands beneath the hail of shots, to the motorcycle and ride it The motorcycle rears up and takes off. They rush along the road.
-Morevna and Ivan run, holding hands beneath the hail of shots, to the motorcycle and sit on it. The motorcycle rears up and takes off. They rush along the road.
+EXT.  HIGHWAY - EVENING
-EXT. HIGHWAY - NIGHT
+MOREVNA and IVAN ride on the motorcycle along the night road. NAZAR overtakes them in his truck; they wave at him.
-Morevna and Ivan ride on the motorcycle along the night road. Nazar the Brave passes them in his trailer; they wave to him.
+INT. BAR - EVENING
-INT. BAR - NIGHT
+MOREVNA and IVAN are dancing again. (This time normally.)
-Maria Morevna and Ivan again dance together. (This time normally.)
+EXT. MOTORCLUB -  DAY
-EXT. MOTOCLUB - DAY
+MOREVNA and IVAN's wedding. The wedding is held in the motor club. IVAN's SISTERS, their husbands and NAZAR are present. Above the newly-weds flies a SPARROW with a flower in its beak.
-Wedding of Morevna and Ivan. The wedding is in the motoclub. Ivan's sisters and Nazar the Braze are present. Above the newly-weds flies a sparrow with a flower in the beak.
 = Morevna's departure =
-EXT. THE ESTATE OF MARYA MOREVNA - DAY
+EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE
-Marya Morevna's estate consists of a palace on the hill, two garages, and around them a garden, something like a small grove. The palace is enclosed by a wall.
+MOREVNA's estate consists of a palace on a hill, two garages, and around them a garden, something like a small grove. The palace is enclosed by a wall.
 A howl is heard, and a howling body flies out of the grove, launched into the air by an invisible force.
-EXT. THE ESTATE OF MARYA MOREVNA - GROVE - DAY
+EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - GROVE
-AGENT sits in the brushwood near the wall of house and follows the body with  a horrified gaze. The wall of house is rigged with a large quantity of explosives. Agent wipes the sweat from his forehead and lowers his eyes to the cord stretching from the explosives. With shaking hands he takes out a matchbox. He strikes a match on the box.
+AGENT sits in the brushwood near the wall of the house, following the body with a horrified gaze. The wall of the house is rigged with a large quantity of explosives. The AGENT wipes sweat from his forehead and lowers his eyes to the cord stretching from the explosives. With shaking hands he takes out a matchbox. He strikes a match on the box.
-Behind his back, from somewhere above, Ivan hangs face down on a rope. A puff of air resulting from this motion puts out the match. But Agent does not notice Ivan behind him and takes out a new one. Ivan looks at his actions with interest. With shaking hands, the Agent moves the match near the fuse.
+Behind his back, from somewhere above, IVAN hangs face down on a rope. A puff of air resulting from this motion puts out the match. But AGENT does not notice IVAN behind him and takes out a new one. IVAN looks at his actions with interest. With shaking hands, the AGENT moves the match near the fuse.
 :::: IVAN
-:: What did forget here, |good person|?
+:: Whatcha doing here, friend?
+<!--
+Slang contraction of "What are you doing here, friend?" [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:10, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+-->
-Agent shouts and jumps up out of surprise. Ivan [disattaches his harness from the rope] and puts his feet on the ground.
+AGENT shouts and jumps up out of surprise. IVAN detaches his harness from the rope and puts his feet on the ground.
-Agent snatches out knife. Then, after some thinking, his other hand takes his identification from his breast pocket.
+AGENT snatches out a knife. Then, after some thinking, his other hand takes his id from his breast pocket.
 :::: AGENT
-:: I'm government agent!
+:: I'm a government agent!
 :::: IVAN
@@ Line 342: / Line 342: @@
 :: Yes, I know- I know... And I am the owner of this house.
-EXT. THE ESTATE OF MARYA MOREVNA - COURT - DAY
+EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - COURT
-Ivan leaves the grove, dragging Agent by the foot.  There is an enormous lump on the head of Agent. In his other hand Ivan carries a large bundle of explosives, which were previously used to rig the wall. In the very center of the court stands a threatening catapult. Agent desperately scrapes his fingers on the earth, but Ivan confidently takes step after step forward in the direction of the catapult. Marya Morevna appears from one of the doors of the house.
+IVAN leaves the grove, dragging AGENT by the foot. There is an enormous lump on the AGENT's head. In his other hand, IVAN carries a large bundle of explosives, which were previously used to rig the wall. In the very center of the court stands a threatening catapult. AGENT desperately scrapes his fingers on the earth, but IVAN confidently takes step after step forward in the direction of the catapult. MOREVNA appears from one of the doors of the house.
 :::: IVAN
 ::: (still walking)
-:: Ah, Marya Morevna, here's what I can't make sense of - |Is this place, like, covered in honey?| We don't really live that richly, but they just keep coming here! [Rotten Extremists!]
+:: Ah, Marya Morevna, here's what I can't make sense of.
+:: Is this place, like, covered in honey? We don't really live all that wealthily, but they just keep coming here! Lousy extremists!
+<!--
+Or maybe "Damned wingnuts!" [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:10, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+   I like "lousy" very much! ^___^ --KD
+-->
-Ivan places Agent in the catapult.
+IVAN places Agent in the catapult.
 :::: IVAN
-:: … As if there are no other houses around!
+:: ... As if there are no other houses around!
-Ivan presses on the [trigger] and the catapult throws the howling agent into air, far beyond the wall of estate.
+IVAN presses the trigger and the catapult throws the howling agent into the air, far beyond the wall of the estate.
-:::: MARYA MOREVNA
+:::: MOREVNA
 :: As if this entertainment doesn't make you happy.
 :::: IVAN
-:: Of course! But say, why did you throw my 32-inch monitor on his head?
+:: Of course! But say, what point did you try to make by throwing my 32-inch monitor on his head?
-EXT. THE ESTATE OF MARYA MOREVNA - GROVE - DAY - FLASHBACK
+EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - GROVE - FLASHBACK
-Chibi-style animation. Agent stands opposite Ivan holding a knife and his identification. From the window above, Marya Morevna throws a monitor on Agent's head. Ivan jumps up from surprise and shakes his fists.
+Chibi-style animation. AGENT stands opposite IVAN, holding a knife and his identification. From the window above, MOREVNA throws a monitor on AGENT's head. IVAN jumps up from surprise and shakes his fists.
-EXT. THE ESTATE OF MARYA MOREVNA - COURT - DAY
+EXT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - COURTYARD
-:::: MARYA MOREVNA
+:::: MOREVNA
-::: (spreads her hands)
+::: (shrugs)
-:: It's all right. We'll sell the explosives and purchase you a 33-inch one.
+:: It's all right. We'll sell the explosives and buy you a 33-inch one.
 :::: IVAN
-:: At his rate I may soon open a TNT trade! I wonder, when will they [realize] that we have webcams set up everywhere?
+:: At his rate I may soon open a TNT trade! I wonder, when will they realize that we have webcams set up everywhere?
-Marya Morevna walks a motorcycle from the garage.
+<!--
+"webcam" isn't strictly accurate of course. He really means "security cameras". But it's plausible that he'd say this. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:10, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+-->
-:::: MARYA MOREVNA
+MOREVNA walks a motorcycle from the garage.
-:: I'm going to a biker gathering. It's far away, I won't return until tomorrow.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: I'm going out to a biker gathering. It's pretty far away, so I won't return until tomorrow.
 :::(Takes out keys)
 :: Here are the keys to all the doors in the house. Feel free to go anywhere, but don't touch this key and don't unlock the door it opens.
@@ Line 387: / Line 397: @@
 :: Why?
-:::: MARYA MOREVNA
+:::: MOREVNA
 ::: (stomps her foot)
-:: You shouldn't, I said!
+:: You just shouldn't, I said!
-Ivan shrugs with a smile, as if saying “fine, fine”.
-::::MARYA MOREVNA
+IVAN shrugs with a smile, as if saying “fine, fine”.
-:: Well, bye…
-She sits down on the motorcycle and leaves. Ivan waves after her.
+::::MOREVNA
+:: Well, bye...
+She sits down on the motorcycle and leaves. IVAN waves after her.
+<!--
 TL Note: I translate заминировать/zaminirovat' as "to rig with explosives". Please edit if you have a better translation. --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 23:00, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
+   Sounds accurate to me. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:10, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+-->
 = Return of Koshchei The Deathless =
+<!--
+TL Note: Possible naming alternatives are: Koschei/Koshchei/etc.; "The Deathless", "The Immortal". Any preferences? (I'd prefer "Koschei", it's shorter as well as the version used by Wikipedia) --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 00:37, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
+I prefer Koshchei the Immortal - to me "The Deathless" feels clumsier, and more seldom used.
+[[User:konfeta|konfeta]] 20:02, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
+   Still, let's stick with "The Deathless". I have two reasons. First - the "death" + "less" combination is important, because it's references Koshchei as "someone who have no death with him (as some thing)", and the story indirectly refers to Morevna as his "death". The second reason is that lips movement for "Бессмертный" word is closer to "Deathless", than "Immortal" (we will have less lipsync issues). --KD
-TL Note: Possible naming alternatives are: Koschei/Koshchei/etc.; "The Deathless", "The Immortal". Any preferences? (I'd prefer "Koschei", it's shorter as well as the version used by Wikipedia) --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 00:37, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
+   I prefer "Koshchei The Deathless" or just "Koshchei", because it's sounds closer to original pronounce. Though, I could mistaken. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]]
+      I suggest we use "KOSHCHEI" as the label, and identify him fully as "Koshchei the Deathless". [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:36, 20 May 2010 (UTC)]
+          OK. --KD
+-->
-I prefer "Koshchei The Deathless" or just "Koshchei", because it's sounds closer to original pronounce. Though, I could mistaken. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]]
+INT. DAY - MOREVNA ESTATE - ROOM
-INT. ESTATE OF MARYA MOREVNA - ROOM - DAY
+IVAN sits at his computer. The screen displays the "Fedora Castle" desktop operating system. Next to IVAN stands a can with some beverage. IVAN lifts it to take a sip, but the jar is empty. IVAN sighs and rises from the table.
-Ivan sits at his computer. The screen displays the desktop of the OS Fedora Castle. Next to Ivan stands a can with some beverage. Ivan lifts it to take a drink, but jar it is empty. Ivan sighs and rises from the table.
+<!--
+I take it from "now sober" below that this is an alcoholic beverage? We might want to mention in the stage directions that IVAN is at least a little drunk here. Which helps explain his transgression. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:36, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+   Yeah, all Ivan's following actions are allusion that beverage is alcoholic. Maybe we really should clarify that in screenplay, I just thought that it's obvious. ^_^'' Talking about beverage type, what else can be stored in cellar of a big mansion? ^___^ --KD
+-->
-INT. ESTATE OF MARYA MOREVNA - CORRIDOR - NIGHT
+INT. NIGHT - MOREVNA ESTATE - CORRIDOR
-Ivan, holding a candle, walks up to the door of cellar, unlocks it and goes in.
+IVAN, holding a candle, walks up to the door of the cellar, unlocks it, and goes in.
-INT. ESTATE OF MARYA MOREVNA - CELLAR - NIGHT
+INT. NIGHT - MOREVNA ESTATE - CELLAR
-Door into the cellar opens with a squeak. Ivan goes down the stairs.
+The door into the cellar opens with a squeak. IVAN goes down the stairs.
-Legs of Ivan, walking on the cellar floor.
+We see IVAN's legs, walking on the cellar floor.
-Ivan looks around, as if searching for something. In the cellar there are many barrels, bottles, some |foodstuffs| as well as the explosives taken from the extremists.
+IVAN looks around, as if searching for something. In the cellar there are many barrels, bottles, and foodstuffs, as well as the explosives taken from the extremists.
-Ivan passes by a massive [|forged|] door with and enormous lock and finally stops next to a shelf with bottles.
+IVAN passes by a massive iron door with with an enormous lock, and finally stops next to a shelf with bottles.
 :::: IVAN
 :: Aha… Here!
-Ivan extends his hand towards the bottle. The sound of a bubbling liquid is heard.
+IVAN extends his hand towards the bottle. The sound of a bubbling liquid is heard.
 :::: KOSHCHEI
@@ Line 435: / Line 458: @@
 :::: IVAN
-::: peering from around the corner)
+::: (peering from around the corner)
 :: Huh? What?
@@ Line 442: / Line 465: @@
 :: Hee-eeee-eelp me-e-e...
-Ivan looks at the lock, then to the keyring. |Instantaneous flashes in his subconsciousness|, which show Morevna and Koshchei. They battle in some cave. The appropriate key falls from the ring by itself.
+IVAN looks at the lock, then to the keyring. Memories flash through his subconscious, which show MOREVNA and KOSHCHEI. They battle in some cave. The appropriate key falls from the ring by itself.
 :::: IVAN
@@ Line 449: / Line 472: @@
 :: Well, let's see...
-Ivan opens the door slightly and carefully peers in. |Again a flash.| Ivan shouts out of fright, shock and surprise.
+IVAN opens the door slightly and carefully peers in. Again there is a flashback. IVAN shouts out of fright, shock, and surprise.
-In the closet on 12 chains hangs KOSHCHEI (who resembles a robot-transformer). Ivan enthusiastically examines him.
+In the closet, on 12 chains, hangs KOSHCHEI (who resembles a robot-transformer). IVAN enthusiastically examines him.
-:::: Ivan
+:::: IVAN
 ::: (awed, in a whisper, almost about itself)
-:: [Such amazing tuning...]
+:: Such amazing tuning...
+<!--
+Or perhaps "What amazing technology..." [[User:Digitante|Digitante]]
+-->
-The eyes of Koshchei open, his view passing over the figure of Ivan.
+The eyes of KOSHCHEI open, his view passing over the figure of IVAN.
 :::: KOSHCHEI
@@ Line 466: / Line 493: @@
 :::: KOSHCHEI
-:: Ivan-Tsarevich! How good it is that you are here. Give me a drink...
+:: Ivan-Tsarevich! How good it is that you are here. Give me something to drink...
-Ivan readily hands Koshchei his bottle.
+IVAN readily hands KOSHCHEI his bottle.
 :::: KOSHCHEI
-:: … some gasoline.
+:: ...some gasoline.
-Ivan runs away and returns with the canister of gasoline. Koshchei drinks. His eyes light ablaze, and he laughs with sinister laughs. Koshchei tears apart the chains and stands up to his full height, towering above Ivan.
+IVAN goes away and returns with a gas can. KOSHCHEI drinks. His eyes light ablaze, and he laughs a sinister laugh. KOSHCHEI tears apart the chains and stands up to his full height, towering above IVAN.
 :::: KOSHCHEI
-:: Thanks, Ivan-Tsarevich. You helped me. Now you won't see Marya Morvna. |Like your own ears!| [TL Note: In Russian, this is an idiom]
+:: Thank you, Ivan-Tsarevich. You have helped me.
+:: From now on, you won't be able to see Marya Morevna any more than you can see your own ears!
-Koshchei's engines flare, he transforms into a flight vehicle and flies away after breaking a few beams in the ceiling, as well as the window in the wall.
+<!--
+TL Note: In Russian, this is an idiom
+   It's not in English, but it does make sense. It just gives the story a little of the original flavor. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:36, 20 May 2010 (UTC)]
+-->
-Slow-Motion effect: Koshchei flies out, fragments from the broken in window flying to all sides. Then the camera quickly returns into the cellar through the holes made by Koshchei. Now sober, Ivan is in panic. He quickly runs out of the cellar, runs to the garage, sits in a car and rides out in pursuit.
+KOSHCHEI's engines flare, he transforms into a flight vehicle and flies away after breaking a few beams in the ceiling, as well as the window in the wall.
-EXT. ROAD - NIGHT
+There is a slow-motion effect: KOSHCHEI flies out, fragments from the broken window flying to all sides. Then the camera quickly returns into the cellar through the holes made by Koshchei. Now sober, IVAN is in a panic. He quickly runs out of the cellar, runs to the garage, sits in a car and rides out in pursuit.
-Along the road Ivan hastily tries to call Morevna on her cell. Subscriber is temporarily inaccessible.
+EXT. NIGHT - ROAD
-EXT. CLEARING WITH MOREVNA'S BROKEN MOTORCYCLE - NIGHT
+Along the road IVAN hastily tries to call MOREVNA on her cell phone. It reports "The subscriber is temporarily unavailable."
+EXT. NIGHT - CLEARING WITH MOREVNA'S BROKEN MOTORCYCLE
-Ivan sees Marya Morevna's broken motorcycle on the road, all in flame. Morevna's sword is thrust into the ground nearby, and near it lies a wounded bird - VOROBUSHEK (SPARROW). Ivan sharply brakes, as result of which his car drifts and stops perpendicular to road. Ivan jumps out and runs to the motorcycle, but the nearer he goes, the more he slows down, finally slowing to a walk. He bends to his knees, taking VOROBUSHEK in his hands.
+IVAN sees MOREVNA's broken MOTORCYCLE on the road, all in flames. MOREVNA's sword is thrust into the ground nearby, and near it lies a wounded bird - SPARROW. IVAN sharply brakes, as result of which his car drifts and stops perpendicular to road. IVAN jumps out and runs to the motorcycle, but the nearer he goes, the more he slows down, finally slowing to a walk. He bends to his knees, taking the SPARROW in his hands.
 :::: IVAN
 :: What happened here?
-:::: VOROBUSHEK:
+:::: SPARROW
 :: What misfortune! An evil robot-transformer kidnapped Marya Morevna. And it hooked me. Good-bye, Ivan-Tsarevich.
-Vorobushek dies.
+The SPARROW dies.
 :::: IVAN
 :: No!
-:::: VOROBUSHEK
+:::: SPARROW
 ::: (raises its head)
 :: And tell my family that I loved them all dearly.
-Ivan pulls Marya Morevna's katana from the ground and puts it behind his back.
+IVAN pulls MOREVNA's katana from the ground and puts it behind his back.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (tearfully shaking his fist)
+:: I will tell them, I will definitely tell them. And I will save Marya Morevna as well! Farewell.
-:::: Ivan
+<!--
-::: (with the tears and shaking his fist)
+TL: I assume this is directed towards Vorobushek --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 00:37, 3 March 2009 (UTC)]
-:: I will tell them, I will definitely tell them. And I will save Marya Morevna as well! Farewell. [TL: I assume this is directed towards Vorobushek --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 00:37, 3 March 2009 (UTC)]
+   I just changed the character's name to "SPARROW" -- if that's all it means, it seems simpler to just use that. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:36, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+-->
-Ivan runs to the car, sits down, and drives away.
+IVAN runs to the car, sits down, and drives away.
 While he drives, pictures blink on the screen, showing him visiting his sisters.
-Encounter with the first sister. Sister-Doctor walks towards him with the Businessman. She hugs Ivan. They talk. Sister-Doctor runs out of the frame and then runs through the background with a first-aid kit, in the direction of her car.
+Encounter with the first sister. DOCTOR-SISTER walks towards him with the BUSINESSMAN. She hugs IVAN. They talk. DOCTOR-SISTER runs out of the frame and then runs through the background with a first-aid kit, in the direction of her car.
+Encounter with the PRIESTESS-SISTER. IVAN sits at the table. He eats and tells them. They are sad and remain silent. Then IVAN suddenly smiles and says something about the food. PRIESTESS-SISTER looks happy.
-Encounter with the Sister-Nun. Ivan sits at the table, he eats and tells them. They are sad and remain silent. Then Ivan suddenly smiles and says something about the food. Nun looks happy.
+Encounter with the MECHANIC-SISTER. IVAN asks her husband and her about something, they think, but contritely shake their heads. ROCKER opens a briefcase before IVAN. IVAN nods and takes it.
-Encounter with the Sister-Mechanic. Ivan asks her husband and her about something, they think, but contritely shake their heads. Rocker opens a briefcase before Ivan. Ivan nods and takes it.
+= A State Meeting =
+<!--
+TL Note: Actual Russian title translates as "Meeting" (or "Conference") --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]]
-= Government =
-[TL Note: Actual Russian title translates as "Meeting" (or "Conference") --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]]]
+In the conversation below, I've changed it so that the GENERAL is using correct military jargon (at least for the US military). Thus: 'air support', 'armored division', 'pilot error', etc. This makes him sound more authentic. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 18:28, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+   It's hard to judge for me, but it sounds great. --KD
+-->
-INT. COMMAND CENTER - DAY
+INT. DAY - COMMAND CENTER
-Luxurious hall with high windows. There is a long table in the middle. At the table sit the General, MINISTER OF FINANCE, ADVISER, MINISTER OF SCIENCE, MINISTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH, MINISTER OF CULTURE. At the head of the table sits the President - OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH, 38. The General's face is completely covered with plasters (band-aids). All in all, everyone present resembles patients of a psychiatric hospital - enormous bags under their eyes, tic, shaking hands, mimic spasms, shaking lips, and shifty glances.
+A luxurious hall with high windows. There is a long table in the middle. At the table sit the GENERAL, MINISTER OF FINANCE, ADVISER, MINISTER OF SCIENCE, MINISTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH, and MINISTER OF CULTURE. At the head of the table sits the President - OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH, 38. The GENERAL's face is completely covered with plasters (band-aids). All in all, everyone present resembles a patient in a psychiatric hospital - enormous bags under their eyes, tics, shaking hands, spasms, shaking lips, and shifty glances.
-Photographs of Koshchei the Deathless flying with Marya Morevna's body on his shoulders are scattered across the table.
+Photographs of KOSHCHEI flying with MOREVNA's body on his shoulders are scattered across the table.
-Church chorus stands behind the back of the President.
+A CHURCH CHOIR stands behind the back of the President.
 :::: ADVISER
@@ Line 537: / Line 580: @@
 :::: GENERAL
-:: I repeat: without the aircraft forces any of our actions are doomed to failure.
+:: I repeat: without air support, any of our actions are doomed to failure.
 ::: MINISTER OF FINANCES
-:: General, you like to war, don't you? Do you understand how much each helicopter costs the government? I am frightened to even remember how the last encounter of our armored vehicles formations with Marya Morevna ended.
+:: General, you like war, don't you?
+:: Do you understand how much each helicopter costs the government? I'm afraid even to recall how the last encounter of our armored division with Marya Morevna ended.
+<!--
+"War" could be a verb. Or am I wrong here? --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 03:48, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
-["War" could be a verb. Or am I wrong here? --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 03:48, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
+   Yes, "war" could be a verb. I changed it based on sounds-good philosophy (which is just my personal opinion). --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 05:08, 19 March 2009 (UTC)]
-Yes, "war" could be a verb. I changed it based on sounds-good philosophy (which is just my personal opinion). --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 05:08, 19 March 2009 (UTC)]
+      Technically, "war" can be a verb, but it's rare to use it that way, and never in this context. It's more common as an abstract noun. One "makes war", "wages war", "fights a war", etc. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 18:28, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+         Then "make war" probably will suits better. But "General, you like war" can be double-read as he "likes war", and as he "likes to war".
+-->
 :::: GENERAL
-:: I repeat, this was the pilot's mistake!
+:: I repeat, this was pilot error!
 :::: MINISTER OF FINANCES
 ::: (sarcastically)
-:: Of course, and the legendary attack on our research center was also the pilot's mistake!
+:: Of course, and the legendary attack on our research center was also 'pilot error'!
 :::: MINISTER OF SCIENCE
 ::: (in the background, with disgust)
-:: Eeek!
+:: Ugh!
 :::: MINISTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH
 ::: (in the background, simultaneously)
-:: Don't mention it!
+:: Don't bring that up!
 :::: GENERAL
-:: If our respected minister
+:: If our respected Minister
 :::(points in the direction of the Minister of Science)
-:: had immediately reported the incident with Yaga, we would not have simply dismissed her, but would have coop her up in the right place. And then...
+:: had immediately reported the incident with Yaga, we would not have simply dismissed her, but would have locked her up in the right place. And then...
 :::: MINISTER OF SCIENCE
-:: Yaga was outstanding specialist. If there had been proper control over the criminal gangs during that period, then such an incident simply could not have occured at all and EVNN would have been completed.
+:: Yaga was an outstanding specialist. If there had been proper control over the criminal gangs during that period, then such an incident simply could not have occured at all and the EVNN project would have been completed.
+<!--
+TL Note: EVNN is a reference to the war machine which was developed by government. Criminal gangs were involved into the attack on main research center. As result the EVNN was activated before completion and gone mad and outta control. EVNN is Koshchey himself. Minister of science saying what if the gangs were under control during that period, then the attack to lab could not happen. If no attack would happen, then EVNN would be completed. I know, it's a bit confusing and kind of "out of story", but it's important to mention that in screenplay. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 03:48, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
+   Do you want us to spell it out "Eee-Vee-En-En" or try to pronounce it (as "Even")? [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 18:28, 20 May 2010 (UTC)]
+      "Eee-Vee-En-En" --KD
+-->
-[TL Note: EVNN is a reference to the war machine which was developed by government. Criminal gangs were involved into the attack on main research center. As result the EVNN was activated before completion and gone mad and outta control. EVNN is Koshchey himself. Minister of science saying what if the gangs were under control during that period, then the attack to lab could not happen. If no attack would happen, then EVNN would be completed. I know, it's a bit confusing and kind of "out of story", but it's important to mention that in screenplay. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 03:48, 19 March 2009 (UTC)]
 :::: GENERAL
-:: I am putting forth my best efforts, but I don't have enough people. If you had granted me helicopters earlier, we would finish with Marya Morevna and this entire farce.
+:: I am putting forth my best efforts, but I don't have enough people. If you had granted me helicopters earlier, we would've already finished Marya Morevna and her entire farce.
+<!--
+Did you mean "farce" or "force"? [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 18:28, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+   I mean't "farce". --KD
+-->
 :::: MINISTER OF FINANCES
-:: I completely understand your desire to singlehandedly destroy Marya Morevna. Indeed, it was you who aimed to be  “the carrier of death”.
+:: I completely understand your desire to singlehandedly destroy Marya Morevna. After all, it was you who aimed to be the “Death Carrier”.
 :::: GENERAL
@@ Line 589: / Line 653: @@
 :::: MINISTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH
 ::: (suddenly awake)
-:: Of course we would have sent you medical helicopters, but, as you remember, our budget was cut and we could not make even one flight!
+:: Of course we would have sent you medical helicopters, except, as you remember, our budget was cut so that we could not make even one flight!
 All begin to speak simultaneously, an uproar rises.
 :::: ADVISER
-:: Is it for this reason that the minister has arrived in a private jet?
+:: Is it for this reason that the Minister has arrived in a private jet?
 :::: MINISTER OF FINANCES
@@ Line 600: / Line 664: @@
 :::: MINISTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH
-:: I like no other am concerned about the President's health!
+:: No one is more concerned about the President's health than I!
+<!--
-[TL: Does "like no other" refer to the minister or the president? Your version creates some ambiguity. Compare "I am the one most concerned over his health" (my version) vs "I am more concerned about the President's health than anyone else's (a possible understanding of your version). --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 22:23, 18 March 2009 (UTC)]
+TL: Does "like no other" refer to the minister or the president? Your version creates some ambiguity. Compare "I am the one most concerned over his health" (my version) vs "I am more concerned about the President's health than anyone else's (a possible understanding of your version). --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 22:23, 18 March 2009 (UTC)]
-[TL: Agree. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 03:48, 19 March 2009 (UTC)]
+  Agree. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 03:48, 19 March 2009 (UTC)]
-[TL: I'll change it to "I like no other am..." (my original) rather than "I am like no other..." --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 05:08, 19 March 2009 (UTC)]
+    TL: I'll change it to "I like no other am..." (my original) rather than "I am like no other..." --[[User:Nikitakit|Nikitakit]] 05:08, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
+      Sorry, but this is a much more natural idiom. I heard this exact idiom in real speeches earlier this year. :-) [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 18:28, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
+         OK. --KD.
+-->
 :::: GENERAL
-:: But where is this cathedral? Money has already been allocated four times!
+:: But where is this cathedral? The money has already been allocated four times over!
 :::: MINISTER OF CULTURE
-:: Yes, the people need religion; we need something to have their minds occupied!
+:: Yes, the people need religion; we need something to keep their minds occupied!
 President bangs his fist on the table out of fury.
@@ Line 622: / Line 693: @@
 :::: OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH
-:: We know the location, we know the situation. All the maps are still in our hands. Use helicopters to strike.
+:: We know the location. We know the situation. All the maps are still in our hands. We will make a helicopter strike.
 General looks victoriously at the minister of finances.
 :::: OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH
-:: In case of failure, mine and blow up the entire island along with both of them to hell.
+:: Should that fail, we will mine the entire island and blow it and the both of them to hell.
 The eyes of General flare up still brighter.
@@ Line 640: / Line 711: @@
 ::God save you,
 ::Your family, friends, relatives.
-::Lord, save the tsar!
+::Lord, save the Tsar!
-Accompanied by the sounds of their voices, Oroshay Polivayevich leaves the room with the blissful smile on his face.
+Accompanied by the sounds of their voices, Oroshay Polivayevich leaves the room with a blissful smile on his face.
 = At the Old Ruins =
@@ Line 652: / Line 723: @@
 It begins to drizzle.
-Ivan's car drives past the ruins, but then stops. Ivan looks at the ruins.
+IVAN's car drives past the ruins, but then stops. IVAN looks at the ruins.
 The rain picks up.
-Ivan brushes his fingers around his red, bruised, eyes and puts his car into reverse. He drives into the courtyard and hides the car under a canopy near the building. Ivan turns off the engine, reclines his seat, and lies back in it. He closes his eyes.
+IVAN brushes his fingers around his red, bruised, eyes and puts his car into reverse. He drives into the courtyard and hides the car under a canopy near the building. IVAN turns off the engine, reclines his seat, and lies back in it. He closes his eyes.
-The moon peeks out through the clouds. The rain drums on the roof of the car, drops running down the windshield. The ruins seem absolutely lifeless. Ivan is asleep.
+The moon peeks out through the clouds. The rain drums on the roof of the car, drops running down the windshield. The ruins seem absolutely lifeless. IVAN is asleep.
 = Morevna's Flashback =
@@ Line 676: / Line 747: @@
 In the darkness, some fluff begins to fall from above. But in reality it is gray fur. It spins in the air, appearing from nowhere and falling downward.
-:::: MARYA MOREVNA (V.O.)
+:::: MOREVNA (V.O.)
 :: Yes, I knew... I came to destroy her…
 Instead of the fluff, duck feathers begin to spin in the air.
-:::: MARYA MOREVNA (V.O.)
+:::: MOREVNA (V.O.)
 :: But at that moment she became my only way to... my only source of the power. The only source. And I've taken her...
-A luminous girl hovers in air among the feathers. It is possible to recognize her as Marya Morevna. In the center of her body a shines a thin gold line that is similar to the needle.
+A luminous girl hovers in air among the feathers. It is possible to recognize her as MOREVNA. In the center of her body a shines a thin gold line that is similar to the needle.
-In front of Marya Morevna an amulet hangs in the air, surrounded by a white substance.
+In front of MOREVNA an amulet hangs in the air, surrounded by a white substance.
-:::: MARYA MOREVNA (CONT'D)
+:::: MOREVNA (CONT'D)
 :: ...and I became her.
@@ Line 694: / Line 765: @@
 EXT. STONY WASTELAND - DAY - FLASHBACK
-Figure of Morevna walking away from the oak. There is the amulet on her neck. When she walks away up to a decent distance, far away, on the horizon, on the other side of the sea, a fortress (the laboratory) flies apart into smithereens.
+Figure of MOREVNA walking away from the oak. There is the amulet on her neck. When she walks away up to a decent distance, far away, on the horizon, on the other side of the sea, a fortress (the research centre) flies apart into smithereens.
 Darkness.
@@ Line 704: / Line 775: @@
 Drizzle. The moon is visible through moving clouds. IVAN is still asleep in his car.
-Headlights suddenly shine brightly through his windshield. Ivan wakes with a start and looks around in confusion.
+Headlights suddenly shine brightly through his windshield. IVAN wakes up with a start and looks around in confusion.
 A tractor-trailer truck, similar to NAZAR's, enters the yard. It turns in the yard and stops. A figure in a raincoat jumps down out of the cab onto the damp earth. This is BABA-YAGA, but the camera does not reveal her face as she walks through the ruins.
-IVAN's car is shadowed by a shed and so she doesn't notice it. She walks rapidly over the mud toward the gates in front of the main building. IVAN watches her. Once she passes out of sight inside of the building, he jumps out of his car to follow her.
+IVAN's car is shadowed by a shed and so she doesn't notice it. She walks rapidly over the mud towards the gates in front of the main building. IVAN watches her. Once she passes out of sight inside of the building, he jumps out of his car to follow her.
-INT. NIGHT - RESEARCH CENTER RUINS
+INT. NIGHT - RESEARCH CENTER RUINS, MAIN RECEPTION
-IVAN follows carefully. He looks around uncertainly, not knowing where he needs to go. He comes to a large double door. On it, half-eroded capital letters "EVNN" can be made out, and below them smaller text, reading "Electronic Versatile Nanodevice Network". The doors are ajar. IVAN stands near them in indecision. Through them he hears a sound like something heavy falling onto the stone floor. IVAN goes through the doors and down a long dark corridor. In it there are many doors, almost all of which bear a logo with the abbreviation "EVNN".
+IVAN follows carefully. He looks around uncertainly, not knowing where to go. He comes to a large double door. On it, half-eroded capital letters "EVNN" can be made out, and below them smaller text, reading "Electronic Versatile Nanodevice Network". The doors are ajar. IVAN stands near them in indecision. Through them he hears a sound like something heavy falling onto the stone floor. IVAN goes through the doors and down a long dark corridor. In it there are many doors, almost all of which bear a logo with the abbreviation "EVNN".
-IVAN passes through some laboratories, where various technological debris is left behind: computers and electro-mechanical equipment. A ray of light leaks into the room from one door. Ivan sneaks towards it.
+IVAN passes through some laboratories, where various technological debris is left behind: computers and electro-mechanical equipment. A ray of light leaks into the room from one door. IVAN sneaks towards it.
 INT. NIGHT - RESEARCH CENTER RUINS, LABORATORY
@@ Line 720: / Line 791: @@
 The room resembles a computer server farm. There are rows of rackmount frames with various computer components in them. In the walls there are fans. A pair of working tables stand in the middle. To one side are prototype mechanical arms and other equipment.
-IVAN moves stealthily into the room. The light of a lantern moves around somewhere behind the cabinets. IVAN happens to knock a photograph in a broken frame off of the table towards the floor, but he snatches it out of the air before it smashes into the ground.
+IVAN moves stealthily into the room. The light of a lantern moves around somewhere behind the cabinets. IVAN happens to knock a photograph in a cracked frame off of the table towards the floor, but he snatches it out of the air before it smashes into the ground.
 IVAN looks at the photograph. In it, two smiling girls are sitting at a table, apparently in this office. Behind them stands a somewhat older woman with white hair in a dressing gown (this is BABA-YAGA in her youth).
@@ Line 726: / Line 797: @@
 IVAN returns the photograph to the table and hides behind one of the racks. The raincoated figure has turned one of the cabinets around. This one is taken up by a large tank in which some liquid gurgles. The tank walls are heavily insulated. BABA-YAGA intently studies the tank. She coughs. IVAN looks intently at her. BABA-YAGA suddenly raises her head as if feeling his gaze.
-IVAN stands still, hiding after the corner, out of the BABA-YAGA's field of sight. It is not clear, did he manages hide himself in time or not. The rustle and the sound of the steps reaches. Then complete silence. Ivan waits. Then he carefully attempts to look out of his hiding place. Silhouette of BABA-YAGA appears at this moment right after his back from the shadow and she grabs IVAN for the neck.
+IVAN stands still, hiding behind of one of the cabinets, out of the BABA-YAGA's field of view. It is not clear whether he managed to hide himself in time or not. There is a rustle and the sound of footsteps. Then complete silence. IVAN waits. He carefully attempts to look out of his hiding place. At this moment, the silhouette of BABA-YAGA appears right behind him in the shadows. She grabs for IVAN's neck.
-IVAN grunts and turns to flee, after pushing BABA-YAGA aside. But BABA-YAGA tripped him and IVAN noisily falling into a heap of debris and trips. IVAN scramble to turn and draw his sword, but BABA-YAGA's sword (just like MOREVNA'S SWORD!) is already in his face. The lamp light reflects off the blade into his eyes.
+IVAN grunts and turns to flee, after pushing BABA-YAGA aside. But BABA-YAGA tripps him and IVAN noisily falls into a heap of debris and trips. IVAN scrambles to turn and draw his sword, but BABA-YAGA's sword (just like MOREVNA'S SWORD!) is already in his face. In the same moment he is blinded by the light of the lantern.
 IVAN lifts his hand to block the light. BABA-YAGA, after looking him over, returns her sword to its scabbard and reaches out her hand. IVAN looks with distrust at the raincoated figure.
@@ Line 736: / Line 807: @@
 EXT. NIGHT - CLEARING WITH MOREVNA'S BROKEN MOTORCYCLE
-SPARROW lies on a tilted stump. SISTER-DOCTOR's car is nearby. SISTER-DOCTOR attempts to resuscitate SPARROW. MAN-IN-BLACK approaches.
+SPARROW lies on a tilted stump. DOCTOR-SISTER's car is nearby. DOCTOR-SISTER attempts to resuscitate SPARROW. MAN-IN-BLACK approaches.
-:::: SISTER-DOCTOR:
+:::: DOCTOR-SISTER
 ::: (without turning, angled away from MAN-IN-BLACK)
-:: Is it his time already?
+:: Is it really his time already?
-[In the original text there's more doubt in the question. This asking is closer to a prayer, she can't believe that it's time to die for SPARROW. She asking herself, but it equally can be addressed to a MAN-IN-BLACK. And the meaning is like "Can't be it's his time already?", "Surely his time has come?",  "Is it really his time already?", "Is it his time has come?" That's the dual-meaning of the scene - it's not clarified to the viewer is SISTER-DOCTOR really see and hear MAN-IN-BLACK or not, but at the both cases scene remains sane. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:21, 30 January 2010 (UTC) ]
+[In the original text there's more doubt in the question. This asking is closer to a prayer, she can't believe that it's time to die for SPARROW. She asking herself, but it equally can be addressed to a MAN-IN-BLACK. And the meaning is like "Can't be it's his time already?", "Surely his time has come?",  "Is it really his time already?", "Is it his time has come?" That's the dual-meaning of the scene - it's not clarified to the viewer is DOCTOR-SISTER really see and hear MAN-IN-BLACK or not, but at the both cases scene remains sane. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:21, 30 January 2010 (UTC) ]
 [Okay, this has the double meaning you wanted [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] ]
+[Added "really" in order to increase the doubt [[User:JuliaVelkova|JuliaVelkova]] ]
-:::: MAN-IN-BLACK:
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
 ::: (smiling faintly)
 :: No, no. I only stopped in passing...
@@ Line 756: / Line 827: @@
 [Okay, "stopped in passing" avoids the unimportant detail and emphasizes motion -- pausing and then leaving without doing anything. Of course MAN-IN-BLACK is "Death", so SPARROW is spared. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 03:45, 31 January 2010 (UTC)]
-MAN-IN-BLACK passes by behind SISTER-DOCTOR.
+MAN-IN-BLACK passes by behind DOCTOR-SISTER.
-SPARROW opens eyes. From his point of view we see a cloudy image of SISTER-DOCTOR. There is no one behind her.
+SPARROW opens its eyes. From his point of view we see a cloudy image of DOCTOR-SISTER. There is no one behind her.
-= Getting the map =
+= The Map =
+<!-- In the original script there is no "Getting" in the title, so I left only "The Map".  JV-->
 INT. NIGHT - RESEARCH CENTER RUINS, LABORATORY
@@ Line 775: / Line 847: @@
 ::: (continuing)
 :: What does it look like? Who's controlling it?
+<!-- Is Koschei a robot? JV -->
 She takes the solid form out of the container and holds it up to her eyes.
@@ Line 781: / Line 854: @@
 :: No one...
-BABA-YAGA raises her head, dropping the object on the floor.
+BABA-YAGA raises her head in worry, dropping the object on the floor.
 :::: BABA-YAGA
@@ Line 792: / Line 865: @@
 :::: BABA-YAGA
-::: (looking at Ivan in shock)
+::: (looking at IVAN in shock)
-:: He escaped after all...
+:: So, he escaped after all...
 :::: IVAN
@@ Line 799: / Line 872: @@
 :::: BABA-YAGA
-:: The robot you are looking for. Koshchei. Oh, dark times are coming.
+:: The robot you are looking for. He is named Koshchei. Oh, dark times are coming.
+<!-- I added "He is named" to only Koschei - it feels to me as if it sounds more poetic like that, closer to the script. JV-->
 BABA-YAGA gets up off of the floor.
@@ Line 809: / Line 883: @@
 :::: BABA-YAGA
-:: Go home, young man. No time for that now.
+:: Go home, young man. I have no time for that now.
 :::: IVAN
@@ Line 818: / Line 892: @@
 :::: BABA-YAGA
-::: (coughs)
+:: You don't need to know about this.
-:: You don't need to know about this. Don't search for your death.
+:::(She coughs)
+:: Don't search for your death.
 :::: IVAN
-::: (runs up to her)
+::: (runs up to her begging)
-:: Please! This is very, very important to me!
+:: Please, tell me! This is very, very important to me!
 :::: BABA-YAGA
@@ Line 836: / Line 911: @@
 :::: BABA-YAGA
-:: Here, take this. Koshchei is on Buyan Island.
+:: Here, take this. Koshchei's castle is on Buyan Island.
 ::: (points out a road on the map)
 :: This is the way to get there.
@@ Line 860: / Line 935: @@
 too close. SOLDIERS run confused.
-:::: A SOLDIER:
+:::: A SOLDIER
-:: Stop! Not this way! It's blocked!
+:: Stop! Not this way! It's prohibited territory!
 IVAN'S CAR crashes through the barricades and over the bridge. Two POLICE CARS chase after him. Pursuit continues briefly, but then IVAN makes a high-speed sharp turn which the POLICE CARS can't follow. They crash into bushes on the side of the road and get stuck.
@@ Line 867: / Line 942: @@
 A POLICEMAN comes out of one car, looking towards IVAN'S CAR departing.
-:::: POLICEMAN:
+:::: POLICEMAN
 :: That guy is out of his mind...
+<!-- Very difficult to translate into English "там же...", but just "That guy is out of his mind" does not give the feeling that there is something where IVAN's going. Not sure how to add the "там же"...JV-->
 POLICE CARS leave in disarray, returning back to the bridge.
@@ Line 885: / Line 961: @@
 :: Take that, Koshchei, you bastard!
-KOSHCHEI flies away, but is concerned about damage to his shell (from the missile). He continues the battle.
+KOSHCHEI flies away, but his shell immediately recovers from the damage made by the missile. He continues the battle.
 :::: PILOT 1
-:: Damn it! Is that so?
+:: Damn it! How could it be?
 :::: PILOT 2
-:: Water of Death...
+:: The Water of Death...
 [I'm pretty clueless as to what that was about. But I learned some Russian cuss words. I get that "Water of Death" is significant from the fairy tale, but how is it being used here? An invocation/expletive? Or is he concerned that Koshchei is about to use the Water of Death or something? Also not sure about "Is that so?" -- is Pilot 1 supposed to be taunting Koshchei for running away?[[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]
+[In brief: Koshchei is recovering and pilot 1 wonders how is it possible. Pilot 2 drops in reply: "Death Water", meaning that Koshchei is made of Death Water. But he is to concentrated on the battle to explain that in detail. Death Water concept is briefly described here: http://synfig.org/forums/viewtopic.php?p=458#p458 --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]
+[I knew what the "Water of Death" was, but I wasn't sure how it related to the conversation (mainly because I misinterpreted the sentence before it) -- thanks for clarifying. I restored this to "Water of Death" which I think you should adopt, because: 1) it's the formula used in the fairy tale, 2) it has been used in a similar way in English stories and science fiction books (particularly your nanomachine explanation occurs in "The Snow Queen" and "The Summer Queen" by Joan Vinge), 3) "Death Water" sounds mundane and boring while "Water of Death" has 'weight' (it sounds archaic, but that's good in this situation), and 4) it is symmetric with "Water of Life", which of course, has a _long_ history in English-language stories and will be immediately understood. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 04:23, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
+[You convinced me. ^___^ --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 07:23, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
 KOSHCHEI, running low on fuel, returns to hide inside the FORTRESS.
 :::: PILOT 1
-:: What's going on? Where's he going?
+:: What's going on? Where's he gone?
 :::: PILOT 2
-:: He must be out of fuel. [Has to visit the 76]
+:: He must be out of fuel. He can't last long. Still using A-76, eh?
 [I'm guessing this is some kind of reference to the gas station company "76"? [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]
-:::: PAYLAT:
+[Here's A-76 gasoline referenced, a very low grade kind of gasoline. I don't know is it related to http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/76_%28Conoco_Phillips%29 or not. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]
+:::: PAYLAT
 :: Hey, it's a good bargain!
 [If this was a word play, you're going to have to explain it to me. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]
-:::: PILOT 1:
+[That fits very well! ^__^ --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]
+:::: PILOT 1
 :: Cut the chatter! Our priority is killing the target. Concentrate your fire on the central tower!
 It's at this moment that IVAN'S CAR arrives at the FORTRESS. IVAN gets out of the car. PAYLAT sees him and takes his helicopter down.
-:::: PILOT 2:
+:::: PILOT 2
 :: Paylat!
-:::: PILOT 1:
+:::: PILOT 1
 :: Hell with it, follow the order!
@@ Line 928: / Line 1,014: @@
 [I'm assuming this is meant to imply torture rather than dental hygiene [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]
+[LOL --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]
 EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER
@@ Line 940: / Line 1,028: @@
 EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER
-Rockets fly from the HELICOPTERS. They go towards the CENTRAL TOWER, but explode several meters short. The tower is unharmed.
+Rockets fly out from the HELICOPTERS. They go towards the CENTRAL TOWER, but explode several meters short. The tower is unharmed.
-:::: PILOT 1:
+:::: PILOT 1
-:: There's a force field! Damn!
+:: There's a force field! He is clever, damn!
-:::: PILOT 2:
+:::: PILOT 2
 :: The source must be...
 ::: (cut off)
@@ Line 951: / Line 1,039: @@
 Now, GUNS on the walls and outer towers open fire on the HELICOPTERS.
-:::: PILOT 1:
+:::: PILOT 1
 :: It's a trap!
@@ Line 963: / Line 1,051: @@
 [God this is cheesy. He needs to have a nice metallic filtered laugh. Would be awesome. Still cheesy though. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]
-With relish |lashes [benzinchik] from circles| [Sprays gasoline in circles] [?]
+[^__^'' --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]
+[I'm auditioning for that part when the time comes to find voices. ;-) [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 04:23, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
-:::: KOSHCHEI:
+With relish swallows gasoline from the mug in his hand.
+:::: KOSHCHEI
 :: Bwa-ha-ha-ha!
@@ Line 973: / Line 1,065: @@
 HELICOPTERS, maneuvering between the towers, are trying to avoid the guns and escape. Above them flies PAYLAT'S HELICOPTER. Guns shoot down one HELICOPTER and heavily damage another.
-:::: PILOT 1:
+:::: PILOT 1
 :: Retreat! Retreat!
@@ Line 980: / Line 1,072: @@
 INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, LABORATORY
-Points on the radar screen fly away to the edges, away from the fortress. KOSHCHEI looks with satisfaction at the screen, gulps from |circles| and stands up in front of the control panel.
+Points on the radar screen fly away to the edges, away from the fortress. KOSHCHEI looks with satisfaction at the screen, swallows from a mug and stands up in front of the control panel.
 The camera exits through the LABORATORY window and tracks to the ROOF of the CENTRAL TOWER.
@@ Line 986: / Line 1,078: @@
 EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER ROOF
-Ivan hangs on the roof, with his arms stretched out to hold on. He shifts. A rope is tied to his belt. IVAN jumps from the roof downward, swinging Tarzan-style. He hovers directly outside the window of the UPPER ROOM. He can see MOREVNA through the window.
+IVAN stands on the roof. A rope is tied to his belt. IVAN jumps from the roof downward, swinging Tarzan-style. He hovers directly outside the window of the UPPER ROOM. He can see MOREVNA through the window.
 IVAN reachs back and pulls his sword out.
@@ Line 994: / Line 1,086: @@
 [This was in English originally. We could also do it in Russian in the English version (but I'm not sure what would fit) [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)]
+[Let's leave it English. IVAN uses slang, but I'm really not sure that any English-speaking person would use Russian words as a slang in that kind of situation. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 05:33, 3 February 2010 (UTC)]
 INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER, UPPER ROOM
@@ Line 1,001: / Line 1,095: @@
 EXT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, LABORATORY
-The fortress gates burst open in an explosion and IVAN runs out, carrying MOREVNA. He runs to the car. KOSHCHEI, hearin the explosion looks out the window to see them.
+The fortress gates burst open in an explosion and IVAN runs out, carrying MOREVNA. He runs to the car. KOSHCHEI, hearing the explosion looks out the window to see them.
-:::: KOSHCHEI:
+:::: KOSHCHEI
-::: (подофигев [no idea what this is [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:29, 2 February 2010 (UTC)])
+::: (enraged)
 :: What?!
@@ Line 1,013: / Line 1,107: @@
 EXT. NIGHT - BUYAN ISLAND ROAD
-Koshchei is chasing Ivan (Pursuit in the style "Need For Speed Underground", http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Need_For_Speed_Underground).
+Koshchei is chasing IVAN (Pursuit in the style "Need For Speed Underground", http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Need_For_Speed_Underground).
 IVAN tries as hard as he can to escape the pursuit, but he doesn't succeed. KOSHCHEI'S BELAZ is a really souped up machine with modifications.
@@ Line 1,023: / Line 1,117: @@
 KOSHCHEI gets out of the BELAZ and approaches IVAN'S CAR. He tears the window off of the passenger side of the car and pulls MOREVNA out, completely ignoring IVAN. IVAN jumps out of the car in a rage to confront KOSHCHEI, but he's brought up short as KOSCHEI turns to him.
-:::: KOSHCHEI:
+:::: KOSHCHEI
 :: A word of advice, Ivan. Forget Marya Morevna. I'll let you escape this once, but next time there will be no mercy!
@@ Line 1,035: / Line 1,129: @@
 :::: OROSHAY POLIVAYEVICH
-::: (nods):
+::: (nods)
 :: Set them off.
@@ Line 1,046: / Line 1,140: @@
 From the central tower we hear MOREVNA's cries.
-:::: MOREVNA:
+:::: MOREVNA
 :: Let me go! Let me go, damn it! Or I'll tear you apart!!!
 INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, TOWER ROOM
-KOSHCHEI stands facing MOREVNA, who is tied up with ropes. She strains
+KOSHCHEI stands facing MOREVNA, who is tied up with ropes on the dentist-like chair. She strains
 against the ropes, trying (unsuccessfully) to get loose. KOSHCHEI reaches
 and takes the AMULET from around her neck, and tosses it idly in his
 hand.
-:::: KOSHCHEI:
+:::: KOSHCHEI
-:: I'll be in my laboratory. But you will stay here!
+:: I'll be in my laboratory. You sit here!
-KOSHCHEI leaves with the AMULET. Rustling is heard at the window. MOREVNA looks through the window, where Ivan is hanging on the rain gutter.
+KOSHCHEI leaves with the AMULET. Rustling is heard at the window. MOREVNA looks through the window, where IVAN is hanging on the rain gutter.
-:::: IVAN:
+:::: IVAN
 :: All right, let's go?
-:::: MOREVNA:
+:::: MOREVNA
 :: Ivan Tsarevich!
@@ Line 1,071: / Line 1,165: @@
 IVAN and MOREVNA run out through the open gates and into the car. As KOSHCHEI passes by the window, he looks through and sees them.
-:::: KOSHCHEI:
+:::: KOSHCHEI
 ::: (totally enraged)
 :: What?!
@@ Line 1,081: / Line 1,175: @@
 = Second chase =
-EXT. ISLAND IS THE BRAWLER OF HIGHWAY THE NIGHT
+EXT. NIGHT - BUYAN ISLAND, HIGHWAY
+IVAN and MOREVNA are in IVAN'S CAR, running away from KOSHCHEI'S BELAZ.
+:::: IVAN
+:: Faster! Go faster!
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: What are we going to do?
-Ivan and Maria [Morevna] in the machine flee from [BelAZa] Of [koshcheya].
+:::: IVAN
+:: I don't know! I just want to get you back!
-Ivan: It is more rapid, whereas well it is more rapid.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: But what can we do about Koshchei?
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: What we will make?
+:::: IVAN
+:: If we can't shake him, we might have to find a way to finish him off.
-Ivan: I do not know! I simply want to return you back!
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: But there's no way. He's immortal.
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: But what is to be done [Koshcheem]?
+:::: IVAN
+:: How do you know that?
-Ivan: If it is not disentangled, it is necessary to find the method to finish off it.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: His death - is...[me].
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: This will not come out. It immortal.
+The BELAZ rams the back of the car and her last words drown in the sound of crashing metal, but we can see MOREVNA's lips pronouncing "me."
-Ivan: From where you do know?
+[Yes, the sentence is incomplete. She should say "His death - this is me" --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 07:59, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: Its death this…
+[Okay, if I understood the treatment, this should now make sense. We're referring to the nanomachine connection between MOREVNA and Koshchei. The word should be in the screenplay since the actor and animator need to know it to get this right. I used "in me" instead of "is me" because I think we're talking about the nanomachines being in her body (this would be Water-of-Death technology jargon, so it would be understood by Ivan only under the assumption that he is familiar with the technology -- which I _think_ is true in your story). Another possibility is "is mine" -- as in "if he dies, so do I". Ivan would probably understand that even if he hadn't heard of the Water of Death, even though it's a weird sympathetic-magic idea. It doesn't seem to be important whether the audience understands this connection at this point in the story(?). Notably, the lips will look very different for "me" versus "mine". [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 14:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
-[BelAZ] from behind rams machine and the crash of [skrezheshchego] threw it muffles last word. Are visible only the lips Of [morevny], that pronounces it.
+[Still it's better to stick to "is me" version, because the exact meaning here is "if I die - then he dies". Nanomachines are not referenced directly as being inside of her body, instead of that Morevna is treated as Koshchei's death herself - that' s closer to original meaning.  And yes, it doesn't important whether the audience understands this connection at this point in the story. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan from all forces turns control, attempting to even machine on the road. But in its eyes surprise, shock from the fact that it only that chilled heard. It looks not for the road, but to [Morevnu].
+[BTW: "treatment" is screenwriters' jargon for what you titled "story plot" on the Synfig forum, that is "an informal description of a plot" it can be either a "short" or "summary" treatment (like what you wrote) or it can be a "detailed" treatment, which usually has one paragraph to describe each scene in the final screenplay. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 14:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
-The monochromatic pictures flicker in this time:
+[Oh, that's good to know for me! ^___^ --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
-•Shows the opened trunk, which stands inside the cave.
+IVAN [desperately] turns the steering wheel, trying his best to keep the car on the road. But his eyes are filled with surprise at what he just heard. He's looking at her instead of the road.
-•The shell of the broken egg lies on the stones of those covered by feathers.
+Pictures flash by in black-and-white:
-Ivan: God…
+* An opened chest standing inside a cave.
-[Koshchey] it laughs loud and acceleration is included. [BelAZ] collides by right wheel along the left side of machine (where sits Ivan) and, after pressing machine under himself, after imprinting it into the asphalt it crushes entire left side together with Ivan.
+* A broken egg shell on the stones, covered by feathers.
-[Morevna] in the right side remains entire. Its eyes in the horror are enlarged, the first instants it cannot press from itself not sound, is then finally torn up by hysterical cry. The picture of recently talking Ivan and wheel flashed in the fragments passes before its eyes. It continues to shout, it is stronger, tearing away voice. Window on the side is divided off and the metallic hands Of [koshcheya] take out it of the machine. It unsuccessfully escapes, pulls hands to the mutilated machine, but [Koshchey] it takes away all its further and it is further away.
+:::: IVAN
+:: God...
-In [Morevny] before the eyes flicker the pictures of recollections.
+KOSHCHEI laughs out loud and accelerates. The BELAZ'S right wheel hits the
+left side of IVAN'S CAR (where IVAN is sitting), and rolls right over, crushing the entire left side of the car into the asphalt, along with IVAN himself.
+MOREVNA, in the right side of the car, remains intact. Her eyes are wide with horror and she cannot speak at first. Then she cries out hysterically.
-•Ivan [Morevna] they cost on [polyanke] near the house. [Morevna] placed its head to it on the arm.
+An image of IVAN talking just now flashes before her eyes and wheel of the BelAz crushing the car with him. [cutaway?][flashback?].
-•Ivan and [Morevna] will go by a sunny day on the motorcycle. Ivan contented sits on the baggage carrier.
+[My issue here was only that the direction seems to say what _Morevna_ sees, but we need to know what the _camera_ sees. I'm assuming we're cutting either to a still image or a moving image of Ivan talking. Does the flashback include seeing him die? (the machine translation mentions a "wheel", but that could be either the "steering wheel" or the "wheel of the BelAz crushing the car+Ivan" (Eww). [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 14:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
-•Ivan and [Morevna] jump together with [tarzanki]. [Morevna] squeals from the fear, and to Ivan, similarly this pleases itself.
+[Yes, the camera shows event from the Morevna's point of view. Distracting moment, eh? --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:24, 5 February 2010 (UTC)]
-•Ivan and [Morevna] on the beach war with the shark.
+She continues to scream, even louder. The window behind her (on the right side of the car) is torn away, and KOSHCHEI'S metal hands pull her out of the car. She tries to escape, holding on to the mutilated car, but KOSHCHEI simply pulls her away and carries her off.
-[BelAZ] leaves far, [Morevna] all still pulls hands from the window back. Road. Shock then begins. With darkened face Of [morevna] apathetic it sits in the armchair. [Koshchey] it conducts machine.
+Before MOREVNA's eyes flicker images of her memories:
+MONTAGE
+* IVAN and MOREVNA in a clearing near the house. MOREVNA'S head on IVAN'S shoulder.
+* IVAN and MOREVNA on the motorcycle driving on a sunny day. IVAN is sitting on the baggage carrier [isn't trunk a better word?].
+[A car has a "trunk". Motorcycles don't. "Saddle bags" might be more common (mounted left and right), but they would be hard to sit on. "Baggage carrier" would be a rack on the back of the cycle, centered on top, allowing bags to be strapped to it. You could sit on that, so it made sense to me. Of course, most bikes are designed for two people. BTW, I don't see anything like this on the computer model -- in fact it looks like he'll have a hard time not getting burned on those tailpipes! [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 08:38, 7 February 2010 (UTC)]
+* IVAN and MOREVNA swinging on a rope together. MOREVNA screams, but IVAN appears to be enjoying himself.
+* IVAN and MOREVNA on the beach, fighting a shark.
+The BELAZ is riding away. MOREVNA holds onto the window looking back. We see the road. MOREVNA, going into shock, sits depressed and listless in the seat. KOSHCHEI drives the truck without looking at her.
 = Revival =
-EXT. ISLAND IS THE BRAWLER OF HIGHWAY THE PLACE FOR DEATH OF IVAN THE MORNING
+EXT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND HIGHWAY (WRECKAGE WHERE IVAN DIED)
-The mutilated machine of Ivan costs in the puddle of the blood. It dawns.
+IVAN's mutilated car lies in a puddle of blood. The sun rises.
-The machines of the sisters of Ivan drive up from three sides to the machine. From them first crawl out their husbands, and then also sisters themselves.
+IVAN'S SISTERS' cars drive up from three sides. First their HUSBANDS get out, then the SISTERS get out themselves.
-Sister- doctor snatches out syringe and with the medical cart and the first-aid kit departs for the sequence to the machine. Because of the sequence begin to throw out the fragments, boots, bottles and so forth. junk.
+DOCTOR-SISTER takes out a syringe into hand and with a medical cart and first-aid kit goes out of the camera view to the wreck. She starts to throw debris, boots, bottles and other junk out of frame border.
-Sister- mechanic then approaches. It obtains open-end wrench and begins something to sculpture, unscrewing something, welding and the like.
+|Because of the sequence begin to throw out the fragments, boots, bottles and so forth. junk|
-Then the turn of Sister- nun begins. It obtains cross and it begins to read incantation according to the magic book. In this time other two sisters all around run sprinkling all by living water. The glow begins to go from the book.
+[The original says "boots, bottles, and so forth", but why should those be there? Shouldn't it just be broken pieces of car? Or is this intentional comedy? [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC)]
-The post of light escapes from the broken machine, after tossing up several fragments into air. Light becomes all brighter.
+[Intentional comedy. ^___^ --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]
-Husbands, who stand at some distance, put on black glasses. Everything, except businessman - it thus entire [mult] in the black glasses.
+MECHANIC-SISTER approaches. She takes out a wrench and begins to work, unbolting something, welding, and so on.
-The dark figure , which resembles the figure of Ivan, appears from the light. Left eye catches fire by red flame. Becomes evident that this Ivan, but his head is surrounded by metallic hoop with the stone, left eye artificial, right hand and left leg mechanical.
+[BTW, a wrench normally implies "open-end", the closed kind is called a "box wrench" [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC)]
-Husbands in the shock.
+["Open-end" one meant here. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan opens his eyes, he rocks, sisters support him. It looks with the horror at its hands, looks into the sky and [izdaet] howl.
+Then it is PRIESTESS-SISTER's turn. She takes a cross and begins to read an incantation from a magic book. The other sisters help her by sprinkling Water of Life all around. A glow comes from the book.
-Sky grows dark, find clouds, it begins to drizzle shower.
+A beam of light emerges from the wreckage. After tossing fragments out of the way, it becomes brighter.
-It sits on the stone- near the fragments of its machine, [prigoryunivshis], Ivan. They near cost the machine of sisters.
+The HUSBANDS, who are standing away from the wreckage, put on dark sunglasses -- except of course for the BUSINESSMAN, because he's always wearing dark sunglasses.
-Sister- mechanic sits in the salon. Next to it [Roker]. They keep silent, they look at the figure of Ivan. Yard-keepers work. Sister sighs, and he leaves from the machine.
+A dark figure, resembling IVAN appears in the light. His left eye reflects an image of red flame. It becomes clear that this is IVAN, but his head is surrounded by a metal hoop [with a gemstone]. His left eye is artificial. His right hand and left leg are mechanical.
-It approaches Ivan, but it is not decided to address. Remaining two sisters from behind approach.
+[I'm not sure I understand the "stone" -- like a gemstone in a ring? [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC)]
+[Yeah! ^___^ --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]
-SISTER- MECHANIC: Let us go into the machine. We worry about you.
+The HUSBANDS are shocked.
-Ivan a little compresses and unclenches metallic hand. It [poskripyvaet] in the rain.
+IVAN opens his eyes. He rocks, while supported by his sisters. He looks with horror at his own hands, looks up into the sky, and lets out a howl.
-Ivan: ( without raising head) why all this?
+The sky grows dark and cloudy. It begins to drizzle.
-SISTER- MECHANIC: I… I do not know. (pause) that you do intend to make?
+IVAN is depressed. He sits on the stone, near what's left of the car. Nearby wait the SISTERS' cars.
-Ivan: To make… What I can make?
+MECHANIC-SISTER sits in the car. Next her is ROCKER. They remain silent, looking at the figure of IVAN. Windshield wipers scroops. MECHANIC-SISTER sighs and she gets out of her car again.
-Flickers the sequence of speaking [Morevny] “its death this… “, but without the sound.
+She approaches IVAN, but is hesitant to talk to him. The other SISTERS come up from behind.
-Ivan: I myself. All destroyed by its hands… I cannot make anything.
+:::: MECHANIC-SISTER
+:: Let's get into the car. We're worried about you.
-SISTER- DOCTOR: (sorrowfully) but you must save Maria [Morevna]!!!
+IVAN clenches and unclenches his metal hand. It creaks in the rain.
-Ivan: (it jumps up) it must?!! I MUST? How? No! There is no to me method! (heavily it does breathe) why, why it was return? There to me and road! Now I… (raises my upward metallic hand) now I entirely as… (it brings down it to the nearest [torchashchuyu] from the earth cliff, cliff it flies away)
+:::: IVAN
+::: (without raising his head)
+:: Why is all this happening?
-Ivan lies on the splinters quietly sobbing.
+[In other words, is "this" the whole plot, or just the revival? [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 22:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan: (in a whisper) also monster…
+[The whole plot. "What all this for?" --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]
-SISTER- DOCTOR: (it approaches it) listen to, Ivan…
+:::: MECHANIC-SISTER
+:: I... I don't know.
+::: (pause)
+:: But if you're still here...
+::: (breathes shakily)
+:: Surely it's meant to be.
+:: (pause)
+:: What do you plan to do?
-Sister- doctor concerns by the hand of his arm but it with the wild view it repulses it.
+:::: IVAN
+:: To do...? What can I do?
-Ivan: Do not touch! Leave me!
+Flashback to the shot of MOREVNA saying "His death is...", but without sound. In the same sequence, KOSHCHEI, saying "Give me a drink...."
-Sister- doctor falls on the earth. Ivan here itself jumps aside as scalded. With the horror it looks at the sister lying on the earth, catches its view. It looks at its mechanical arm.
+:::: IVAN
+:: I, myself. I totally destroyed everything with my own hands. How can that be 'meant to be'?
-Repulsing by hands air, makes one step back, another, it stumbles and runs away for the shroud of rain. Sister- doctor makes step after it, but Sister- mechanic stops.
+[Thumbs up for the last sentence! --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]]]
-SISTER- MECHANIC: We made all that they could.
+:::: DOCTOR-SISTER
+::: (sorrowfully)
+:: But you must save Marya Morevna!!!
-It looks to it after.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (jumps up)
+:: Must?!
+:: I MUST? How?
+:: Why, why did you bring me back? I'm meant to be there, dead!
+::: (breathes heavily)
+:: Even if I could, just look at me...
+::: (raises his metal hand)
+:: Now I'm just like...
+[..just like him - Koshchei. (unsaid words) --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:38, 12 February 2010 (UTC)]
+IVAN brings down the metal hand against the stone nearby. A stone breaks into pieces.
+IVAN lies on the debris, quietly sobbing.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (whispered)
+:: A monster...
+:::: DOCTOR-SISTER
+::: (approaching)
+:: Listen, Ivan...
+DOCTOR-SISTER tries to put her hand on his arm, but with a wild look, he pushes her away.
+:::: IVAN
+:: Don't touch me! Leave me alone!
+DOCTOR-SISTER falls down to the ground. IVAN himself jumps aside as if scalded. With horror, he looks at his sister lying on the ground. He looks at his mechnical arm.
+Waving his arms in a shunning motion, he steps back, then again. He stumbles, then runs away into the rain. DOCTOR-SISTER takes a step after him, but MECHANIC-SISTER stops her.
+:::: MECHANIC-SISTER
+:: We've done all that we could.
+She looks after the departing IVAN.
 = Despair =
-EXT. ISLAND IS BRAWLER STONY WASTE LAND THE DAY
+EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, STONY WASTELAND
-Ivan runs. It passes to the step. It shaves on the stony earth, without investigating road. Head is omitted, it does not look where it goes, drops drip from the wet hair.
+IVAN runs. Then slow downs. He is walking on the stony earth, not paying attention to the road. His head is down, not looking where he is going. Drops of water drip from his wet hair.
-EXT. SOAKED [KOSHCHEYA] COURT THE DAY
+EXT. DAY - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, YARD
-Soaked [Koshcheya]. In the court it costs [BelAZ]. [Koshchey] of [volochet] after itself absolutely [ponikshuyu], not being resisted [Morevnu].
+The BelAZ is parked in the yard. KOSHCHEI pulls a completely unresisting MOREVNA out of it.
-EXT. BRIDGE TO THE ISLAND BRAWLER IS THE DAY
+EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND BRIDGE
+Soldiers set mines on the bridge and on the island landing. [i.e. "where the bridge meets the island" [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 01:57, 19 February 2010 (UTC)]
-Soldiers mine bridge and base of island.
+EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, HIGHWAY, WRECKAGE WHERE IVAN DIED
-EXT. ISLAND IS THE BRAWLER OF HIGHWAY THE PLACE FOR DEATH OF IVAN THE DAY
+The SISTERS are still standing in the rain. In the foreground, ROCKER-HUSBAND dials his cell phone.
-Sisters stand all under the rain. On the foreground Of [roker] it rings on the cell phone.
+EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, STONY WASTELAND
-EXT. ISLAND IS BRAWLER STONY WASTE LAND THE DAY
+IVAN'S cell phone shows an incoming call. IVAN looks, then throws the cell phone down on the ground. He continues walking.
-The bell luminesces on the cell phone of Ivan. Ivan looks, and rejects cell phone to the stones. It goes further.
+EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, HIGHWAY, WRECKAGE WHERE IVAN DIED
-EXT. ISLAND IS THE BRAWLER OF HIGHWAY THE PLACE FOR DEATH OF IVAN THE DAY
+ROCKER-HUSBAND looks at his phone, then dials another number.
-[Roker] looks at the telephone, then some another number is set up.
+:::: ROCKER-HUSBAND
+:: Hi...
+:: Yes, it's me.
+:: Yes, but not entirely.
-[ROKER]: Allo… Yes, I. It not completely.
+[I gather we're hearing half of the conversation. But are there 3 lines as shown or 2? I can't guess what was said between the last two, so I'm not sure how to translate the last [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 01:57, 19 February 2010 (UTC)]
-EXT. ISLAND IS BRAWLER STONY WASTE LAND THE DAY
+[He is calling MAN IN BLACK. After "Yes, it's me. " MAN IN BLACK asking: "Is he back?", meaning "to this world, to life". I think "Yes, but not entirely." fits well, as the meaning that IVAN is back to life mentally not completely. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 04:12, 19 February 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan goes further. At the horizon because of the shroud of rain shows the silhouette of dark building - some ruins.
+EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND, STONY WASTELAND
-INT. SOAKED [KOSHCHEYA] CENTRAL TOWER UPPER ROOM THE EVENING
+IVAN continues. On the horizon, shrouded by rain is the silhouette of a dark building -- ruins.
-Maria [Morevna] lies at the armchair even not connected and by lifeless view it looks into the window. The lattices are established on the window. After the back Of [morevny] is visible the back of outgoing [Koshcheya].
+INT. EVENING - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER, TOP ROOM
-INT. ISLAND IS BRAWLER RUINS THE EVENING
+MOREVNA is in the armchair, not even tied up. She stares listlessly out the window. A grate is closed over the window. Behind MOREVNA, KOSHCHEI'S back can be seen as he leaves.
-Ivan goes inside the building of ruins. It [smerkaetsya], clouds disperse.
+INT. EVENING - BUYAN ISLAND
-INT. SOAKED [KOSHCHEYA] CENTRAL TOWER UPPER ROOM THE NIGHT
+IVAN goes into a building in the ruins. The sun is setting as the clouds disperse.
-[Morevna] looks into the window at the moon. Before its eyes flicker the fragments of its old battle [Koshcheem] in mono-chromium.
+INT. NIGHT - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER, TOP ROOM
+MOREVNA looks out the window at the moon.
-INT. ISLAND IS BRAWLER RUINS THE NIGHT
+INT. NIGHT - BUYAN ISLAND, RUINS
-Ivan looks to this - moon through the window. It descends to the elbows and, [zazhmuriv] eye, in the desperation it concerns by the head of floor.
+IVAN looks out at the moon through a window. He falls down onto his knees, shuts his eyes, and bows his head down onto the floor in  despair.
-Clouds finally disperse from the moon.
+The clouds disperse completely, revealing the moon.
-Ivan will sleep, after being rolled up [kalachikom] on the rock floor. The light of moon through the breach in the ceiling illuminates it.
+IVAN falls asleep, curled up on the rock floor. A beam of moonlight through a hole in the ceiling illuminates him.
-= Fellow in the black =
+= The Man in Black =
-INT. ISLAND IS BRAWLER RUINS THE MORNING
+INT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND, RUINS
-Ivan opens eyes.
+IVAN opens his eyes.
-Near fellow in the black sits on the pebble. Something it makes it hammers together from the boards. As if no attention to Ivan is turned.
+Nearby, MAN-IN-BLACK sits on a boulder. He is hammering something together from boards, ignoring IVAN as if he weren't there.
-Ivan rises, he sits down herself. To it to [pofigu]. Man continues to make.
+IVAN rises and sits up without consideration. He is indifferent. MAN-IN-BLACK continues to work, not paying him any attention too.
-Pause is involved. Ivan wants to arise and to leave, but manages to make only easy motion by hand and only tax body forward (in this case it is heard light rustle). Fellow in the black catches this motion and throws view from under the strand of hair to it.
+The silence becomes uncomfortable. IVAN tries to get up to leave, but only waves his hands and shifts his body. There is a light rustle. The MAN-IN-BLACK notices this motion and turns to look at him (his hair is partially blocking his eyes).
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: Impolite, Ali entirely by view is narrow it did become?
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+::Are you just being rude, or are your eyes really so dim?
-Ivan dies and is turned to it.
+IVAN freezes, looking at him (MAN-IN-BLACK).
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: How do you do, Ivan.
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: How do you do, Ivan.
-Ivan: ([smushchenno]) how do you do.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (sheepishly)
+:: How do you do.
-Ivan sits after standing still as was, without knowing as himself news. Fellow in the black continues his work.
+IVAN sits on the floor, not knowing how to act. The MAN-IN-BLACK continues his work.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: What [prigoryunilsya]? … You would go home.
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: What's bothering you? ... Maybe you should go home.
 Pause.
-Ivan: Home? … (faster to itself, than to man) do not have i now house… I indeed now… Now entirely as it. I now by Maria [Morevne] to the eyes seem cannot… To indulge I now. Anything not better…
+:::: IVAN
+:: Home?
+::: (to himself at first, then to MAN-IN-BLACK)
+:: I don't have a home anymore... I'm all... Now I'm just like him. I can't let Marya Morevna see me this way... Like some undead thing...
-Thus far Ivan he speaks it looks at its mechanical arm. Flickers the sequence of that rejected to the earth of Sister- doctor.
+As IVAN speaks, he looks at his mechanical arm. There is a flashback to the shot of the DOCTOR-SISTER thrown to the ground.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: Hammer you do here see? It is possible to board up nails by it, to build house. But it is possible also head to man to break. This is tool. It not poor and not good. All depends on man, who manages it.
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: You see this hammer?
+:: It's possible to drive nails with it and build a house. But it can also break a man's head. This is a tool. The tool is only an extension of the body and soul. Not evil; not good. It all depends on the man using it.
-Fellow in the black thus far speaks, [otklvdyvaet] hammer to the side and it begins to sharpen by knife the piece of tree (aspen stake). Ivan involuntarily follows its motions and to him behave in a queer way themselves any abominations - together with the wood of men it as if grinds off pieces its it is finger, absolutely
+As the MAN-IN-BLACK speaks, he puts down the hammer and begins to sharpen a wooden stake with a knife. IVAN involuntarily follows his motions, but he's having weird and scary hallucinations -- for example, of MAN-IN-BLACK shaving down pieces of his own fingers together with the wood without reacting to it.
+IVAN stares in horrified fascination, but manages to blink away the hallucination.
-without noting this. [Byaka]-[byaka]! Ivan in the horror looks, but he is worthwhile for it to blink, as vision it disappears.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (still in shock from what he's seeing, unable to look away from MAN-IN-BLACK's hands)
+:: How do you know my name? I suppose my sisters must've sent you?
-Ivan: (all still in the shock from the the [uvidenogo], unable to detach view away from the hands of fellow in the black) from where you do know as me they do call? You, sky, sisters my did send?
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+::: (amused)
+:: Ha-Ha. Your sisters are pure gold. But no, I was simply passing by and decided to visit you. It's not yet time for your sisters to see me.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: ([khokhotnuv]) sisters in you is simple gold. No they sent me not they. Yes even not time by them to still me see.
+:::: IVAN
+:: But it turns out to be my time to see you?
-Ivan: But to me, does leave, time?
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: Didn't you come here to die?
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: You indeed like to here die did intend?
+:::: IVAN
+::: (dazed)
+:: What?
-Ivan: (wonderingly) from where you did learn?
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: I came to help.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: It arrived to help.
+IVAN jumps to his feet, but nails are already flying into him like like darts. IVAN ducks out of the way only to see nails fly by his face. As IVAN follows them, they shoot into the rock wall.
-Ivan: (it does jump up) that???
+IVAN turns back to the MAN-IN-BLACK. Already he's charging with the hammer in one hand and the stake in the other.
-But already they fly in it, as if darts, nails. Ivan [uvorachivaetsya]. Nails fly directly near its face. Ivan, carrying out by their view it sees as they they insert themselves into the rock wall.
+IVAN ducks one hit, then another. He manages to grab the MAN-IN-BLACK by the hand, knocking away the stake first, and then the hammer. The MAN-IN-BLACK jumps to the side, and in the next instant, IVAN sees that he holds in his hand an amulet -- very similar to the one that MOREVNA had, but shaped differently. The MAN-IN-BLACK sneers.
-Ivan turns around again to the man. That already flies to it with the hammer in one hand and the stake in another.
+IVAN, not knowing what to expect, steps back. The man tightens his grip on the amulet and it flashes with gleaming light from inside.
-Ivan [uvorachivaetsya] from one impact, another. For it succeeds to grip fellow in the black for the hand and to knock out first stake, then hammer. Fellow in the black jumps aside to the side and at the following moment Ivan sees that the fellow holds in the hands amulet, very similar to that that had Maria [Morevny], but another form. Fellow in the black sneers.
+IVAN experiences flashes igniting in his mind. His eyes widen, his pupils constrict, he grits his teeth. Another flash, and IVAN's mechanical leg bends at the knee by itself and IVAN falls down to the ground. He hears a crack, hissing -- the sounds are like howls.
-Ivan, without knowing what to expect, makes step back. Man strongly compresses amulet and that it catches fire by from within gleam.
+Now IVAN's mechanical arm begins to choke him. IVAN chokes and attempts to resist, but his eyes are already clouded. Above him looms the figure of the MAN-IN-BLACK.
-In the head of Ivan the flashes ignite. Eyes are enlarged, pupils become narrow, Ivan squeezes teeth. Follows still one flash and the mechanical leg of Ivan breaks. Ivan falls to the earth. In its ears crack, hissing, the sounds are similar to the howls.
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: Well, just look at you! Die now, you evil, filthy thing!
-Here mechanical arm begins to suffocate it. Ivan chokes it attempts to resist, but in the eyes already he grows turbid. Above it appears the figure of fellow in the black.
+Suddenly, the figure of the MAN-IN-BLACK is replaced by MOREVNA, [http://morevnaproject.org/wiki/Image:Demo03-10.png exactly as she appeared when they first met].
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: Well look to itself. Give, die, you, evil unclean.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: What's your name?
-Suddenly instead of the figure of man appears Maria [Morevny]'s figure, exactly also as at the beginning, when they first time were encountered.
+:::: IVAN
+:: I'm Ivan. The Tsarevich one.
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: How you they do call?
+[Presumeably this should be matched to the exact dialog in that scene [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 17:02, 5 March 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan: I Ivan. That which tsarevich.
+: [Yes. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 09:05, 6 March 2010 (UTC)]
-Flashes of personnel of the life of Ivan with The the [morevnoy]. They are sped up
+There is a montage of abbreviated flashs of IVAN and MOREVNA's life together, sped up.
-Ivan: I Ivan [Tsarevich]!
+:::: IVAN
+:: I am Ivan Tsarevich!
-[Melteshnya].
+Flashes sped up even more to a flicker.
-Ivan: I IVAN IS TSAREVICH!
+:::: IVAN
+:: I AM IVAN TSAREVICH!
-Ivan yells not by his voice. And the [vsleduyushchiy] moment all ceases - and sounds and flash. Silence. Ivan stands face to face with the fellow in the black, holding by one hand (mechanical!) it for the hand with the stopped up amulet. Fellow in the black appears slightly astonished, but contented. It easily pushes Ivan into the stomach by free hand. From this push Ivan flies away to the opposite wall.
+IVAN yells, beside himself. The scene freezes -- all sounds and flashes of light stop. Silence. IVAN stands face-to-face with the MAN-IN-BLACK. He grips MAN-IN-BLACK's hand with the amulet in his hand -- the mechanical one. The MAN-IN-BLACK looks somewhat surprised, but satisfied. He easily shoves IVAN in the stomach with his free hand, sending him flying into the opposite wall, making a large dent.
+IVAN jumps up immediately. The MAN-IN-BLACK is already running up the ruined stairs to the roof. IVAN rushes to follow.
-Ivan here jumps up. Fellow in the black already runs along the half-wrecked stairs upward to the roof. Ivan rushes by track.
+INT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND, RUINS - ROOF
-INT. ISLAND IS BRAWLER RUINS ROOF THE MORNING
+IVAN stops in the rooftop doorway. Before him spreads out distant spaces: fields, blue sky, and golden sun rising on the horizon. IVAN stands there bewitched by the view. Above and behind IVAN, the MAN-IN-BLACK's dangling leg lowers into view -- he is sitting on the lintel above the doorway IVAN came through.
-Ivan stops in the aperture of output at the roof. Before it spreads infinite distance, fields, blue sky and gold sun ascending at the horizon. Ivan stands that bewitched by picture. On top after the back of Ivan is lowered the being rocked leg of fellow in the black - it sits on the cornice above the output to the roof from which recently it ran out Ivan.
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+::: (admiring the sunrise)
+:: With a spirit as strong as steel -- nothing else matters.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: (it admires rise) if is the spirit, strong as steel - the rest nothing and it does not mean.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (inhales deeply)
+:: Now I know what it is -- to remain standing, when all the foundations have fallen.
-Ivan: ( it deeply inhales) now I know what it is to stand, when there are all foundations for already lying.
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+::: (leaving)
+:: Keep this strength with you. You both took the best from each other. Did you really think you get away from THERE for no reason?
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: (departing) this is your force. You took from each other the better. Really you do think that you simply so from there they did let go?
+IVAN turns around, but the man is gone already -- there's just two black feathers spinning in the air. Where the MAN-IN-BLACK was sitting on the stone, is IVAN's CELL PHONE.
-Ivan turns around, but around already there is no one, only two black plumelet turn in air. There, where only that there was fellow in the black on the stone- it lies the cell phone of Ivan.
+Where the sun is rising on the horizon, the figures of IVAN's walking SISTERS are silhouetted against the golden sky.
-Where the sun arises at the horizon, the figures of the going sisters of Ivan appear at the background of gold sky.
+IVAN looks at the cell phone. The number is already on it, he has only to push the button to call.
-Ivan looks at the cell phone. The number is already collected on it, it remains to harvest the button of the removal of tube only.
+EXT. EVENING - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS - CENTRAL TOWER - UPPER ROOM
-EXT. SOAKED [KOSHCHEYA] CENTRAL TOWER UPPER ROOM THE EVENING
+MOREVNA sits in the tower in complete despair. There is a rustle at the window, but she does not react. Then there is a ring. The cell phone on the window-sill is ringing. MOREVNA turns in consternation, she sees the telephone and the figure of SPARROW flying away from window. The phone continues to ring. MOREVNA picks it up.
-Maria [Morevna] sits in the tower in the complete desperation. Some rustle reaches from the side of window. [Morevna] does not react. Then bell is heard - cell phone on the window-sill rings. [Morevna] is turned in the consternation, sees telephone and departing away [Vorobushka]. Telephone continues to ring. [Morevna], all still fear to believe take tube.
+INT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND RUINS ROOF
-INT. ISLAND IS BRAWLER RUINS ROOF THE MORNING
+:::: IVAN
+:: Hello! Marya Morevna?
-Ivan: Allo! Maria [Morevna]? :.
+EXT. EVENING - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS - CENTRAL TOWER - UPPER ROOM
-EXT. SOAKED [KOSHCHEYA] CENTRAL TOWER UPPER ROOM THE EVENING
+MOREVNA coughs in suprise and falls back onto the floor. She looks sightlessly to the ceiling.
-Maria [Morevna] with the surprise chokes and falls back, directly to the floor, to the back. It lies on the spin, looking by the sightless view into the ceiling.
+:::: MOREVNA
+::: (exhaling almost in a whisper)
+:: You're... you're alive!
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: (almost in a whisper, it breathes out) To [vau]! :. You is living!
+INT. MORNING - BUYAN ISLAND RUINS - ROOF
+:::: IVAN
+:: You wouldn't happen to know where Koshchei got that truck of his, would you?
+= Baba Yaga's automobile workshop =
+EXT. DAY - BRIDGE TO THE BUYAN ISLAND
+Ivan's car crashes through the barricades and crosses the bridge. None of the soldiers manages even to react.
+EXT. DAY - BABA YAGA'S AUTOMOBILE WORKSHOP
+On a building, which resembles both a carwash and a garage, hangs a signboard:
+"Baba Yaga's Auto Shop"
+[Very nearly literal and sounds right to me. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]
+(postscript: no humans! cars and trucks only) ~ off script :)
-INT. ISLAND IS BRAWLER RUINS ROOF THE MORNING
+["Off script"? Are we re-writing? I guess you mean this is hand-written on the sign? I like it. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan: You do not know, where By the [koshchey] immortal such wheelbarrows does take?
+: [Someone just joking here... ^___^ --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]]]
-= Baba Yaga's automobile workshop =
+IVAN drives up, leaves his car, and approaches the door.
+:::: THE DOOR
+:: Password?
+IVAN pushes his bangs away from his eyes and shuts them. A peaceful expression crosses his face.
-EXT. BRIDGE TO THE ISLAND BRAWLER IS THE DAY
+:::: IVAN
+:: Cabin, cabin, turn your back to the trees and your door to me!
-Ivan in the machine is carried past the barrages across the bridge. No one of the soldiers manages even to react.
+[Obviously a formula from the original story. My best poetic translation -- it almost rhymes. :-)  [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]
-EXT. RAM- YAGI AUTO-SALON
+Door opens.
-_ on building, resembling auto-washing and ONE HUNDRED hang signboard: “The auto-salon of Ram- Yagi ". Ivan drives up, he leaves from the machine and approaches the door.
+INT. DAY - BABA YAGA'S AUTOMOBILE WORKSHOP
-DOOR: Password?
+BABA YAGA -- a skinny elderly woman with gray hair, hooked nose, and black eyebrows -- sits at the table with a laptop computer. In the corner near the door hangs a black raincoat -- the one she wore in the laboratory ruins. IVAN enters the room. The raincoat hangs behind his back, so he does not notice it.
-Ivan removes hair from the eyes and are shut eyes. Its face assumes the pacified expression.
+:::: IVAN
+:: Good day, Baba Yaga, aka "The Bone Leg". I need you to give me a ride that will leave Koshchei's BelAZ in the dust.
-Ivan: Cottage- cottage, become to the scaffolding backwards, and to me front.
+[Do you want him to actually say "A.K.A."="AY-KAY-AY"? Also, this is a very abrupt request. Can Ivan really address Baba-Yaga this way? The word "overtake", BTW, always means "to catch up with from behind", not just "go faster than", so it'd be confusing here, since we know Ivan wants to run _away_ from Koshchei, not catch him. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]
-Door is opened.
+: [In Russian "aka" sounds well, maybe replace it with "known as" in English version? --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 07:46, 19 March 2010 (UTC)]
+: [To me it sounds good with "aka". Or he could say just Baba Yaga, The Bone Leg"" - --[[User:JuliaVelkova]] 17:21, 1 Aug 2012 (CET)]
-INT. RAM- YAGI AUTO-SALON THE DAY
+:::: BABA YAGA
+:: To outrun Koshchei the Immortal, you say? Come with me.
-Ram -[Yaga] - grey [sukhonkaya] elderly woman with the hooked nose and the black eyebrows - sits at the table, on which it costs [noutbuk]. _ in angle near door hang black raincoat - that same, in which it be in ruins laboratory. Ivan enters. Raincoat is located beyond its back and it does not note it.
+The door is opening, showing a dark corridor. BABA-YAGA goes inward, IVAN makes several steps and freezes: ROBOTS, similar to KOSHCHEI, stand all along the corridor.
-Ivan: It is healthy, the ram -[Yaga] of aka bone foot. Give this wheelbarrow to me so as to pass [BelAZ] Of [koshcheya] of immortal!
+:::: BABA YAGA
+:: Don't be afraid, follow me.
-RAM -[YaGa]: [Koshcheya] of immortal, you do speak? Let us go with me.
+:::: IVAN
+:: For a moment... it seemed like... like they were alive.
-Is opened the door, beyond which is located dark corridor. Ram -[Yaga] goes inward, Ivan makes several steps and he dies. Throughout entire corridor stand the robots, similar to [Koshcheya].
+He goes after BABA YAGA.
-RAM -[YaGa]: Does not fear, follow me.
+:::: BABA YAGA
+::: (chuckles/grins)
+:: What you are saying, sweetie, a machine can't be alive...
+::: (she coughs and adds quietly after a pause)
+:: ...without a human.
-Ivan: For second it seemed me… that they living. (it goes after by ram -[Yagoy]).
+[Options for what she calls Ivan "honey"/"sweetie"/"dearie": "honey" is more like she's being fresh with an attractive young man; "sweetie" sounds like she's talking affectionately to a child (more genuine); "dearie" is what witches usually say in fairytales when they're pretending to be nice (but is rarely used in life) -- which makes it a little threatening or insincere. I don't know which feeling you want. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]
-RAM -[YaGa]: (it smiles) that you, [milok], machine cannot be living… (it coughs also through the pause quietly it adds) without the man.
+: [Then "sweetie" is fine. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 07:46, 19 March 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan: But… from where this all here.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (looks around)
+:: But... how did all these come to be here?
+BABA YAGA, ignoring the question, approaches a door.
-The ram Of [yaga] ignoring a question it approaches the door.
+:::: BABA YAGA
+:: You're surely going to need a fast ride for that, aren't you?
-RAM -[YaGa]: The most rapid wheelbarrow is for sure necessary to you.
+[This is strays a bit from the literal, but I think it conveys the feeling better than literally saying "the fastest ride". Using "surely" instead of "sure" is grammatically more correct, but less common. It sounds a little bit "Southern" or "hick" to me, but it's exactly like I expect an old lady to talk. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 06:34, 14 March 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan: Machine I myself - this all, on what I can hope.
+:::: IVAN
+:: The car and myself -- that's all I can count on.
-Dark screen. Rises the door of the garage against the background of bright light they are visible the silhouettes of Ram- Yagi and Ivan. The eyes of Ivan are enlarged.
+Dark screen. The garage door rises up, the silhouettes of BABA YAGA and IVAN are visible against the bright light of the background. IVAN's eyes grow wide.
-Ivan: (in the shock) God is my…
+:::: IVAN
+::: (shocked)
+:: Oh my God...
 = Final escape =
-EXT. HIGHWAY ARE THE DAY
+EXT. DAY - HIGHWAY
+IVAN drives a ZAPOROZHETS along the road.
+[It matters little what we call it -- it's a virtual prop and we need to note it. Let's just be consistent [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 18:53, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
+[We could also replace Zaporozhets with "an old soviet car" so that everyone understands the joke with driving such a zaporozhets? [[User:JuliaVelkova]] ]
+EXT. DAY - BRIDGE TO THE BUYAN ISLAND
+A luxurious car drives up. The GENERAL and his security guys step out of it. A COMMANDER approaches and reports something to them.
+IVAN approaches in the ZAPOROZHETS, crashes through the barricades, and continues driving across the bridge. Everyone watches silently, mouths hanging open.
-Ivan will go along the road on the Dnieper Cossack.
+:::: GENERAL
+::: (astonished)
+:: What was that?
-EXT. BRIDGE TO THE ISLAND THE BRAWLER
+:::: COMMANDER
+:: I… I…
-Luxurious machine drives up. The General with the protection leaves from it. Approaches COMMANDER and something they report.
+:::: GENERAL
+:: It was him! Blow it now! Don't let anyone off that island!
-Ivan on the Dnieper Cossack by passes, he brings down barrages and it will go across the bridge. Everything after opening mouths in the silent surprise they observe this picture.
+EXT. DAY - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS
-GENERAL: (in the consternation) that this was?
+IVAN drives up to KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS. He says something over the telephone, then gets out of the car.
-COMMANDING: I… I…
+INT. DAY - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS, CENTRAL TOWER, UPPER ROOM
-GENERAL: This is it! Explode faster, from the island no one not to let out!
+MOREVNA is kept behind an improvised barricade of furniture.
-EXT. SOAKED [KOSHCHEYA] THE DAY
+EXT. DAY - KOSHCHEI'S FORTRESS
-Ivan drives up to the lock Of [koshcheya] of immortal. Something speaks on the telephone, then it crawls out from the machine.
+IVAN throws with all his might a grenade into the window of the upper room of the central tower. There's an explosion.
-INT. SOAKED [KOSHCHEYA] CENTRAL TOWER UPPER ROOM THE DAY
+KOSHCHEI passes by the window, the ceiling collapses directly onto his head, burying him. Only his feet remain visible, dangling in the air.
-Maria [Morevna] is buried after the improvised barricade from the furniture.
+Tousled but contented, MOREVNA appears in the breach. Using her raincoat as parachute, she jumps out from the tower to the ground.
-EXT. SOAKED [KOSHCHEYA] THE DAY
+MOREVNA hugs IVAN.
-Ivan throws to spread to garnet into the window of Maria [Morevny]'s tower. Explosion.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: My God, how has this all happened?
+:::: IVAN
+:: We should go now!
-Past the window it passes As [koshchey], ceiling crumbles directly to it to the head, filling up it. Remain visible only feet, by which it stirs in air.
+He takes her hand, they get into the car. IVAN presses the accelerator, and they leave.
-Tousled, but contented Maria [Morevna] shows in the breach. Using a raincoat as parachute, Maria [Morevna] jumps from the tower to the earth.
+KOSHCHEI gets out from under the heap of debris, shakes his fists, and rushes into the garage.
-[Morevna] embraces Ivan.
+= The Last Chase =
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: God, as this so came out…
+EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND HIGHWAY
-Ivan: It is more rapid!
+IVAN and MOREVNA'S ZAPOROSHETS rushes along the road. KOSHCHEI'S BELAZ overtakes them.
-It for the hand is taken, they sit down themselves into the machine. Ivan harvests to the gas, they leave.
+IVAN presses down on the accelerator, and the ZAPOROZHETS shoots ahead of KOSHCHEI'S BELAZ moving twice as fast as before.
-[Koshchey] it is selected from the heap of fragments, shakes by cams and rushes into the garage.
+:::: KOSHCHEI
+:: What???
-= Last pursuit =
+KOSHCHEI activates nitro starting-lever and also increases speed.
-EXT. ISLAND IS THE BRAWLER OF HIGHWAY THE DAY
+[Gearheads just say "nitro". I thought it stood for "nitro-glycerin", not "nitrogen", but I admit I don't know much about it. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 19:11, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan and [Morevna] rush on the Dnieper Cossack along the road. Them overtakes [BelAZ] Of [koshcheya].
+The bridge can be discerned in the distance.
-Ivan harvests to the additional pedal of gas and Dnieper Cossack two increases her speed, being torn off from [BelAZa] Of [koshcheya].
+EXT. DAY - BRIDGE TO BUYAN ISLAND
-[KOSHCHEY]: What???
+GENERAL: Blow it now!
-Is included the lever of nitrogen and it also increases speed.
+The explosive detonates. The bridge explodes first, then the explosions start to disperse from the both sides of the bridge to the island landing.
-Bridge in front is seen.
+EXT. DAY - BUYAN ISLAND HIGHWAY
-EXT. BRIDGE TO THE ISLAND THE BRAWLER
+:::: IVAN
+::: (frightened)
+::  My God! The bridge...
-GENERAL: Explode!
+MOREVNA raises her head.
-Explosive detonates. Bridge first explodes, then explosions begin to disperse from it to the different sides on the base of island.
+:::: IVAN
+:: We should brake! Pull up!
-EXT. ISLAND IS THE BRAWLER OF HIGHWAY THE DAY
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: Let me drive!
-Ivan: (frightenedly) God is my! Bridge…
+She attempts to reach the steering wheel.
-Maria [Morevna] raises head.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (in panic)
+:: No!
-Ivan: It is necessary to impede!
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: Trust me! Give me the wheel!
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: No! I give I will bring!
+:::: IVAN
+:: I trust you but...
+::: (cringing with shame and effort)
+:: I need to tell you… It's all my fault! It was me who let Koshchei out! Me! It's me who has to fix this!
-It attempts to undertake control.
+MOREVNA looks at him in surprise, then a soft smile appears on her face.
-Ivan: (in panic) no!
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: I know. It's all your fault.
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: Believe to me! Release me for the control!
+IVAN cringes even more and squeezes his teeth tighter. MOREVNA embraces his shoulders.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: But I am still with you. And I'm not going back. Not for anything!
-Ivan: I believe but… (entire it is compressed, it squeezes teeth) I all wanted to you to say… This I in everything am guilty! I let out [Koshcheya]! I! This I must all correct!
+[ She means that she don't want to return back to Koshchei. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 06:44, 1 May 2010 (UTC) ]
-Maria [Morevna] with the surprise looks at it, then soft smile appears at its face.
+IVAN opens his eyes
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: I know. This is your fault.
+:::: MOREVNA
+::: (continuing)
+:: I'm with you, because I want to.
-Ivan still more greatly is compressed and squeezes teeth. [Morevna] embraces it for the arms.
+IVAN raises his head.
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: But I still with you. And not for which I will return. Not for which. (Ivan it reveals eyes) I with you, therefore that I so want.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (quietly, through tears)
+:: So do I.
-Ivan raises head.
+["I want it so much" would've been okay too. "With all my heart!" might be corny, but it's appropriate here. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 19:11, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan: (quietly, through the tears) I also greatly want.
+: [I recombined replicas a bit, because "with all my heart" suits Morevna better. What do you think? --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 06:44, 1 May 2010 (UTC)]
+: [I think it is a bit cheesy with "all my heart" - which is also missing in the script... I think in the script Morevna is just determined, and I think "I'am with you, because I want to" expresses such a determination --[[User:Julia Velkova|JuliaVelkova]] 12:09, 2 Aug 2012 (UTC)]
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: It means together…
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: Then, together...
-Ivan releases it and they two together undertake control. Machine runs up on the break of bridge and flies into the precipice.
+IVAN lets her and they together take the steering wheel. The car jumps off the edge of the broken bridge and falls into the abyss.
-Ivan and Maria [MOREVNA]: It [neeeeeeet]!!!!
+:::: IVAN and MOREVNA
+:: No-oooooo!!!!
 Darkness.
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 INT. DAY FLASHBACK - BABA-YAGA'S AUTO-SHOP
-:::: BABA-YAGA:
+:::: BABA-YAGA
-:: You're certainly going to need a fast car.
+:: You're certainly going to need the a fast car.
-:::: IVAN:
+:::: IVAN
 :: Me and my car -- such is my only hope.
-:::: BABA-YAGA:
+:::: BABA-YAGA
 :: That's where... you are totally wrong!
 = Battle =
-EXT. BRIDGE TO THE ISLAND BRAWLER IS THE DAY
+EXT. DAY - BRIDGE TO BUYAN ISLAND
+The ZAPOROZHETS falls from the bridge. Suddenly, two white wings, like the wings of a bird, slide out from it. The ZAPOROZHETS rockets upwards and flies to the other end of the bridge. When the car is about to land, its lower part transforms into legs. The ZAPOROZHETS lands on its feet. In the passenger compartment, we see the legs and arms of IVAN and MOREVNA, sticking up -- they fell out of their seats during the landing. The car stands motionlessly, for a couple of seconds, then it continues the transformation -- one by one, two hands appear from the upper part of the car, the cabin moves back to the horizontal position and transforms into the control cab.
+KOSHCHEI brakes sharply. His BELAZ is slightly swerved to the side and the car stops on the opposite end of the bridge. Explosions start all over Buyan Island, and it starts to sink into the sea. A shroud of fire hides the BELAZ from sight.
+All of the soldiers, including the General, goggle in a deep amazement at the robot towering above them.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (looks around rejoicing)
+:: Holy mare! How... how could this all...
+[No one says "holy mare". [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
+["Святая кобыла" is exactly the phrase no one says in real world. It's an artificial idiom of a person from an artificial/alternative world, the world which combines the traits of ancient/fairy-tale Russia (mare) and modern days. AFAICT.[[User:Liv|Liv]]]
+[Okay, if it's supposed to be strange, then it's fine. :-) [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 01:34, 29 April 2010 (UTC)]
-Dnieper Cossack flies from the bridge. Suddenly from it are advanced the white wings, similar to the wings of bird. Dnieper Cossack rockets upwards and it flies so far to another edge of bridge. When it is already ready to land, its lower part is converted into the feet. Dnieper Cossack lands to the feet. In the cab [torchat] of leg and arm of Ivan and Maria [Morevny] - they [posvalivalis] from the seats in the time of landing. Machine stands several seconds motionlessly, it then continues transformation - from the upper part appear one after another the hands, cab is equalized relative to the earth, being converted into the cab of control.
+MOREVNA throws her arms around IVAN's neck.
-By [koshchey] it sharply impedes, its [BelAZ] barely will bring in and it stops on the opposite side of bridge. The island brawler cover explosions and it begins to sink in the sea abyss. [BelAZ] hides itself in the shroud of fire.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: We did it!
-Soldiers together with the General with the consternation look on the raised before them robot.
+The hoop round IVAN's head cracks and breaks into pieces. Now it's just a normal head. MOREVNA caresses IVAN's cheek.
+[Should note for artwork -- is he completely back to normal, or did the hoop just go away? (e.g. what about the prosthetic eye?) [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan: ( it is joyfully examined all around) holy mare! As… As this all…
+[Yes, eye goes back to normal too. But not his arm and leg unfortunately. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 08:05, 1 May 2010 (UTC)]
-[Morevna] rushes to it to the neck.
+:::: GENERAL
+::: (shocked)
+:: This… is our number one target!
+::: (he shouts)
+:: Fire! Destroy them!
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: We was able!
+[Other choices for "number one target": "primary target", "prime target"? [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-Hoop on the head of Ivan [treshchit] and it is broken into pieces. Now it has normal head. [Morevna] irons Ivan on the cheek.
+[Looks like "number one" fits perfectly. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 08:05, 1 May 2010 (UTC)]
-GENERAL: (in the shock) this… purpose is number one! (it shouts) fire, to destroy this!
+Soldiers start shooting at the robot. IVAN tries pulling different levers, but nothing happens -- the machine remains motionless.
-Soldiers begin to shoot at the robot. Ivan begins to pull by the levers, but nothing he occurs - machine remains fixed.
+:::: IVAN
+:: What? What's going on?
-Ivan: How? How so?
+Suddenly the shooting stops, because through the shroud fire on the island appears KOSHCHEI, frightfully burnt and terribly infuriated. He approaches quickly. A glow appears around the robot containing IVAN and  MOREVNA, and the robot rockets into the sky, its transformation continuing -- the seat beneath IVAN lifts up towards the head (of the robot), MOREVNA finds herself in the center part of the robot's body -- she spreads her arms, two bracelets clasp her thin wrists and she becomes the source of energy for the robot.
-Suddenly shooting ceases - because of the shroud of the fire of the exploded island departs [Koshchey] immortal, entire burnt and terribly evil. It rapidly approaches. Around the robot of Ivan and [Morevny] appears the glow, it rockets upward and still several small transformations occur with it - the seat of Ivan displaces nearer to the head, and Maria [Morevn] after arranging hands to the sides it is located in the center of the body of robot, the bracelets wind around its wrists - it becomes the energy source .
+In the cab, the control panel in front of IVAN turns on by itself (starts glowing), IVAN grabs the levers and rushes towards KOSHCHEI. The battle begins.
-Control panel in the cab of Ivan catches fire, Ivan is sufficient at the levers and is fixed by towards [Koshcheyu]. Battle begins. Ivan battles [Koshcheem], and in parallel occurs conversation inside [Morevny].
+Simultaneously, as IVAN fights KOSHCHEI, MOREVNA is having a conversation inside herself.
 INT. BLACKNESS
-_ in complete darkness hang illuminated figure Maria [Morevny] in the same pose, in which it be in robot.
+In the complete darkness hangs the illuminated figure of MOREVNA in the same pose she was in the center of the robot's body.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: (after the sequence) you, finally, did call me?
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+::: (off-camera)
+:: Finally. You did call me?
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: Yes.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: Yes.
-EXT. NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE THE DAY
+EXT. DAY - NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE
-By [koshchey] and Ivan they battle. Soldiers they look without being decided to [vstryat].
+The fierce battle between KOSHCHEI and IVAN continues. The soldiers are watching, not daring to interfere.
 INT. BLACKNESS
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: (after the sequence) which to you is necessary?
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+::: (off-camera)
+:: What do you want?
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: I am guilty.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: I am guilty.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: (after the sequence, a little with the sarcasm) really?
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+::: (off-camera, slightly sarcastically)
+:: Oh, really?
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: But how much people did suffer? And… Does stand one life of this?
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: So many people were seriously injured and even killed. How many more are to suffer? And... is one single life worth this sacrifice?
-Fragments of the [razdavlenoy] machine of Ivan, the fragments of the battles Of [koshcheya] with the helicopters.
+Flashbacks of IVAN's smashed car, flashbacks of Koshchei's battle with the helicopters.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: Perhaps it is bad to want to live? 34
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+::: (off-camera)
+:: Is it that bad to want to live?
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: I simply did not want to die.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: I simply did not want to die.
-The fellow in the black is manifested from the darkness.
+The MAN-IN-BLACK appears from the darkness.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: You do know that does promise our encounter?
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: You do know the cost of our encounter?
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: Yes.
+["encounter" could be "meeting" if you prefer. "Encounter" is a little more formal, "meeting" more colloquial. Either makes sense. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: You do not want more to live?
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: Yes.
-EXT. NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE THE DAY
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: You do not want to live anymore?
+EXT. DAY - NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE
-[Koshchey] it behaves more confidently in the fight than Ivan. Its impacts more frequently achieve goal, but Ivan does not weaken pressure.
+KOSHCHEI fights with more confidence than IVAN. His strokes are more sharp and he hits perfectly, but IVAN fights back with unrelaxing energy.
 INT. BLACKNESS
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: There are the errors, which determine entire your life. Their no one can forgive, therefore that you itself never will forgive… But you do not feel sorry about them, because from for them you the one who there is now. During one day you realize them, and from the realization of the fact that not to correct them and with them now to live you become another person.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: There are mistakes, that, once you make them, stay with you your whole life.
+:: They can't be forgiven, because you can't ever forgive yourself.
+:: But at some point you stop regretting them, because they made you who you are now. One day you realize those mistakes and realizing that there's no way to fix them and you have to live with them for the whole rest of your life... it makes you a different person.
+: [Liv: Still, Morevna DO regret she have _done_ (because she feeling guilty), but DON'T regret she _have_them_ (because she accepted herself as she is). --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]]]
+: [Yeah, that was tough. Translated somewhat liberally. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-EXT. NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE THE DAY
+: [I did few edits. Probably they are not correct English, but is closer to original idea. This phrase is very important for the whole movie. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 08:05, 1 May 2010 (UTC) ]
+: [I think the translation is as good as it can be.  Just the very last sentence feels a bit heavy, but not sure if it can be changed, and how...--[[User:JuliaVelkova|JuliaVelkova]] 12_24, 2 Aug 2012 (UTC) ]
+EXT. DAY - NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE
-By [koshchey] it stands in the break, to it Ivan flies with the impact. At the last moment [Koshchey] it is sultry and smashing attack on the back of the robot of Ivan is delivered.
+KOSHCHEI is standing at the edge, IVAN rushes towards him, ready to strike. At the last moment, KOSHCHEI dodges and stabs IVAN's robot in the back.
 INT. BLACKNESS
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: I am not right to request forgiveness. This hardly can be forgiven, but I obtained chance. Thus it came out that I saw sufficiently bright in order not to consider the life of useless and senseless. And even it is more - I was happy. It in the manner that me wanted. But this is given not all. Not floodlands than I deserved, most likely is not. I am grateful to life for this.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: I have no right to ask for forgiveness -- I hardly can be forgiven. But I've got a chance.
+:: The way it came out, I saw enough bright moments in my life not to consider it useless or senseless. Even more -- I was happy. Happy in the way I wanted to be. Not everyone has that kind of luck. I can't understand how I earned that, I probably don't deserve it at all. I am so grateful for this life.
+MAN-IN-BLACK listens attentively.
-Fellow in the black attentively controls it.
+: [ I've liked FELLOW-IN-BLACK much more--[[User:Liv|Liv]] ]
+:: [ No matter how we mention him in screenplay - he's never called by name in dialog. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] ]
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: (it throws up head) now I madly want to live. But it is ready to die.
+["Fellow" just isn't in common use anymore. It's becoming archaic. People in the 1950s used it, but today people would probably say "guy" (this was "человек" in Russian? [No-guy is парень in Russian [[User:JuliaVelkova|JuliaVelkova]] 12:27, 2 Aug, 2012 (UTC) )]. The phrase "Man in black" has some history. It conjures up a picture of a government agent in a black suit or of a preacher in a black suit with a roman collar (or no collar). Johnny Cash (a singer) was called "the Man in Black" because he always used to dress that way. The alien-fighting organization in a popular comic sci-fi film were the "men in black". But in the end, I mostly just want it to be consistent throughout the script. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: For it?
+:::: MOREVNA
+::: (tosses her head looking right at the MAN-IN-BLACK)
+:: Now I madly want to live. But I'm ready to die.
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: For him?
 EXT. NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE THE DAY
-To [koshchey] is placed foot on the body of the devastated robot, without giving to it to rise it will bring in hand for the completing impact. 35
+KOSHCHEI puts his foot on the body of the devastated robot, preventing it from rising, and lifts his hand for the final stroke.
 INT. BLACKNESS
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: For it.
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: For him.
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: Then let it be.
+The MAN-IN-BLACK stretches his hand into MOREVNA's body and takes out a needle. MOREVNA yells as if being pricked, but in the next moment, a peaceful expression appears on her face.
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: Yes it will be thus.
+EXT. DAY - NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE
-Fellow in the black stretches hand through the body of Maria [Morevny] and obtains from there needle. [Morevna] yells as from the prick, but at the following moment its face assumes the pacified expression.
+At that very moment an enormous sword, remarkably resembling the needle, appears in the hands of IVAN's robot. IVAN pierces KOSHCHEI's body with this sword. For a couple of seconds, KOSHCHEI stands still not getting what has just happened, then the light of his eyes dies out and he falls from the edge into the water.
-EXT. NEAR THE EXPLODED BRIDGE THE DAY
+He drowns and his eyes are now closed forever.
+Everyone looks down in astonishment.
+IVAN'S ROBOT freezes motionless as there is no vital energy feeding him. IVAN gets out from the robot.
-The enormous sword, similar to the needle, appears at that - moment in the hands of the robot of Ivan. Ivan pierces by this sword Of [koshcheya]. That it stands, first without understanding in than the matter, then its eyes [potukhayut] and it falls from the break downward into the water.
+:::: IVAN
+:: Yes! We've won! You see? We've done it!
-It sinks and its eyes [potukhayut].
+IVAN sees the lifeless body of MOREVNA, he stands dead in his tracks, the words stick in his throat. Abruptly he rushes to the robot and drags out MOREVNA's body. He puts her on the ground and presses his ear against her breast. People start gathering around him. Among them is PAYLAT.
-All with the consternation look downward.
+[I assume you've noticed that "PAYLAT" sounds almost exactly like "pilot" in English. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-The robot of Ivan thickens not moved is not more than energy of that feeding it. Ivan is selected from the robot.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (finally forcing himself to speak)
+:: How?
-Ivan: Yes! We conquered! You do hear? We conquered!
+Again he presses his ear against MOREVNA's breast, and he takes her hand, attempting to palp the pulse. He looks into her face.
-Sees the lifeless body of Maria [Morevny], it thickens on the spot, words [zastrevayut] in its throat. Then sharply it runs up to the robot and takes out Maria [Morevny]'s body. It places it to the earth, applies ear to the breast. People all around are gathered. Among them - [Paylat].
+:::: IVAN
+:: But you've... We've...
+::: (he gushes in tears pressing his head against MOREVNA's body)
-Ivan: (finally it does extrude from itself) as?
+The soldiers have surrounded IVAN. They stand feeling uncomfortable, exchanging glances and a mixed expression of confusion, guilt, and regret appears on their faces. Some of them look around awkwardly, some cast their eyes into the ground. IVAN's howl of desperation is heard from the center of the crowd.
-Ear to the breast again applies, hand is taken, it attempts to grope pulse. It glances at it into the person.
+IVAN lies cuddling up to MOREVNA's breast, he cries and he cannot stop crying.
-Ivan: But you… We… (it chokes in the tears, after being buried by head)
+MOREVNA's eyes open. She sees the sky high above -- exactly the same view seen previously by IVAN. She hears, as if from a distance, IVAN's crying. She puts her hand on IVAN's head and caresses his hair.
-Soldiers surrounded Ivan exchange glances, the mixed expression of confusion, fault and regret appears at their faces. Someone [neuverenno] is examined, someone lowered eyes into the earth. The howl of the desperation of Ivan is heard from the middle of crowd.
+IVAN ceases sobbing. He raises himself (on his elbow?). And abruptly gets to his feet screaming and springs aside either in horror or in surprise.
-Ivan it lies after being forced against Maria [Morevny]'s breast, it cries and it cannot stop.
+:::: IVAN
+:: Aaaa-ah!
-Maria [Morevny]'s eyes are opened. It sees above itself sky. Exactly so as saw to its wound Ivan. Hears, as if from a distance the weeping of Ivan. It places hand to it to the head, irons.
+MOREVNA raises up on her elbow and looks around rubbing her head.
-Ivan ceases to sob. It raises itself. And sharply with the cry it jumps up on the feet, it jumps aside, not thus horror, not thus unexpected contingency.
+:::: MOREVNA
+::: (puzzled)
+:: But why?
-Ivan: $$SP4!
+IVAN, having finally gotten a grip on himself after the repeated shock, rushes to MOREVNA, clasps her, turns her, and finally sinks together with her to the ground, embracing her tenderly.
-Maria [Morevna] raised on the elbow even it is examined, rubbing head.
+The MAN-IN-BLACK passes by behind people's back.
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: (puzzled) but why?
+:::: MAN-IN-BLACK
+:: Who do they think they are?
+::: (with a light grin)
+:: They think it's up to them to decide when it's time and when it's not.
-Ivan, having finally arrived into himself from the repeated shock, runs up to Maria [Morevne], forces against itself, worthite, and finally descends together with it to the earth, after embracing. 36
+MAN-IN-BLACK leaves.
-By fellow to black passes after the backs of people.
+:::: MOREVNA:
+:: Dear me, I am so happy!
+:: And... I do not understand.
+::: (she smiles)
-FELLOW IN THE BLACK: By whom itself they was conceited. (with the light smile) they still think that by them to decide, when time, but when no.
+:::: IVAN
+:::(he caresses her cheek)
+:: Neither do I. But it's not important anymore.
-Fellow in the black departs.
+They rise to their feet, watching as the remains of BUYAN ISLAND sinks into the water.
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: Lord, I am so glad. And… I do not understand. (it smiles)
+[I simply note in passing that actual islands do not, in fact, sink, no matter how much you bomb them. [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan: (it irons it on the cheek) I also. But now this is not important.
+Then they turn around and pass through the crowd of people which parts to let them pass. They go to the car parked nearby, in which the GENERAL arrived earlier.
-They arise, looking at the remains of brawler island, that are immersed in the water.
+:::: GENERAL
+:: Stop them! These people are enemies of the state!
-Then they are turned havoc they penetrate the crowd of people, which makes room before them. They go to near the machine confronting, in which arrived the General.
+The soldiers do not move. Then they start breaking up slowly in various directions.
-GENERAL: You will stop them! These people - state criminals!
+:::: PAYLAT
+:: Ivan!
-Soldiers do not move from the place. Then slowly they begin to disperse to the different sides.
+IVAN turns around. PAYLAT throws him the keys.
-[PAYLAT]: Ivan!
+:::: GENERAL
+::: (in impotent rage, spitting mad)
+:: You have just betrayed your Motherland!
-Ivan turns around. [Paylat] throws to it keys.
+IVAN and MOREVNA get into the car.
-GENERAL: (in the powerless fury, splashing by saliva) you only that betrayed your native land!
+:::: PAYLAT
+::: (turns around)
+:: Hey, looks like you see no difference.
+:: "I so love my Motherland, but I hate the state."
-Ivan and Maria [Morevna] sit down themselves into the machine.
+: [ It's far from literal translations, but gives the right idea very good. This is a quote [http://vids.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=vids.individual&videoid=33449856 "Я так люблю свою страну, и ненавижу государство"]. --[[User:KonstantinDmitriev|KonstantinDmitriev]] 15:36, 24 April 2010 (UTC) ]
-[PAYLAT]: however, (it does turn around ) that this after the native land, for which human life - nothing?
+[There's nothing wrong with your "so much" version, but I put this back to something a little closer to the literal translation. "so + verb" occurs in English poetry. The best example is probably from the Bible: "For God so loved the world that he sent his only Son..." It's also used in colloquial expressions (California dialect) as in "I am _so_ loving this". [[User:Digitante|Digitante]] 21:07, 26 April 2010 (UTC)]
-Ivan: (attentively it looks into the eyes to General) General… (pause) iditol home to the children.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (looks attentively into General's eyes)
+:: General...
+::: (pause)
+:: Go home to children.
-General stands, soundlessly moving lower jaw, unable to say something. Its eyes acquire the strange lost expression. After its back the soldiers depart to the different sides.
+General stands motionless moving his lower jaw silently, unable to force a word. A strange lost expression appears in his eyes. Behind his back, his soldiers are leaving in various directions.
-MARIA [MOREVNA]: Time and to us…
+:::: MOREVNA
+:: It's time for us...
 They exchange glances.
-Ivan: (it starts engine it is removed to the back of armchair) home.
+:::: IVAN
+::: (starts the engine and leans back into the driver's seat)
+:: Yes, time to go home.
-Ivan harvests to the gas and they leave along the road far.
+IVAN pushes the throttle and they take off.
-End.
+THE END